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omnipotent-lion — Little Dreamer Drowning
Published: 2007-11-28 02:49:21 +0000 UTC; Views: 258; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 3
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Description Hey little girl,
are you happy now?
Have you found a way,
to live without?

Will you make it through,
will you keep the faith?
Will you learn to love,
before it's too late?

Your laugh is false,
your smile is fake,
Sometimes I wonder,
when will you break?

You have it all,
no reason to cry,
so will you belay, girl,
will you just try?

You can dream your dreams,
of impossible hopes,
but in the end girl,
you just gotta cope.

You can pine and sigh, kid,
it won't do much good.
You can ask me why, kid,
but would you change if you could?

Hey little girl,
are you still down?
Have your illusions moved on,
or have they stuck around?

Why do you wish
to be who your not?
Why not be content
with what you've got?

Can't you see, little girl,
you're good to go.
You're a charming young lass,
we're lucky to know?

You'd think that's enough,
but you still want more,
so all these good tidings,
you choose to ignore.

Hey little girl,
will you ever grow up?
Or will you still star-gaze,
like some dewy-eyed pup?

Got news for you kid,
we all dream those dreams,
we're never content,
but it's not what it seems.

We've all looked beyond,
our own far-fetched wants,
but you're still alone,
in your dreams you're ensconced.


Hey little girl,
how does it feel?
To be out in the cold,
when you realize what's real?

You've had your head in the clouds,
when the kingdom's right here,
you never realized
your dream was so near.

Hey little girl,
do you accept it yet?
Have you finally realized,
this is as good as it gets?
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Comments: 14

szmoon [2007-12-01 23:39:36 +0000 UTC]

Nice, and kinda sad, but nice. ^^

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omnipotent-lion In reply to szmoon [2007-12-02 00:01:40 +0000 UTC]

Ooh, new avatar ^_^

Thanks, and yeah. That was the feeling I was going for XD Glad it worked.

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szmoon In reply to omnipotent-lion [2007-12-06 22:20:14 +0000 UTC]

Isn't it cute? x3

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omnipotent-lion In reply to szmoon [2007-12-07 02:34:02 +0000 UTC]

Yesh. n_n

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malicedomestic [2007-11-28 23:27:22 +0000 UTC]

Mmm. Nice half rhymes there, even if the rhythm sometimes sounds a bit off. I'm a meterfreak though, ignore me.

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omnipotent-lion In reply to malicedomestic [2007-11-28 23:36:25 +0000 UTC]

Haha, thanks. Yeah, I noticed that too, but...whatever.

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malicedomestic In reply to omnipotent-lion [2007-11-28 23:40:08 +0000 UTC]

You noticed...?

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omnipotent-lion In reply to malicedomestic [2007-11-29 00:54:58 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, but I liked it how it was, so let it slide.

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malicedomestic In reply to omnipotent-lion [2007-11-29 16:58:44 +0000 UTC]

Oh right

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aaronvegeguy [2007-11-28 04:32:05 +0000 UTC]

This is good, I don't blame you for liking it. I'm glad to see I'm not the only person who believes in structure and rhyme scheme : )

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omnipotent-lion In reply to aaronvegeguy [2007-11-28 13:02:15 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! Yeah, can't lie, I dig rhyme scheme.

Thanks for the !

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Nojo-on-the-rojo [2007-11-28 03:00:11 +0000 UTC]

Ooh, cool! The wording was fantastic and really kept my attention. It's almost ballad-like with the repetition of "hey, little girl" and how you describe things so well. Nice work!

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omnipotent-lion In reply to Nojo-on-the-rojo [2007-11-28 03:02:53 +0000 UTC]

Thanks ^_^ Glad you like it.
And thanks for the !

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Nojo-on-the-rojo In reply to omnipotent-lion [2007-11-28 03:11:14 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome x2!

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