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Note: Given the harsh criticism this picture is getting I feel like this project is a very good candidate for an early re-make. So if you want to write down whatever you feel is wrong with the picture, please do so. Constructive criticism is welcome.For those that don't know, the JGSDF stands for Japanese Ground Self-Defence Force which are the modern military of Japan (While at the same time hilariously not considered a military due to constitutional technicalities).
I wanted to do this for a while 'though originally I wanted to use Kaname Chidori from FMP but then I decided to go with one of my OCs Kahoru Kawasaki (Note that the name might change in the future).
The rifle is the JGSDF standra issue Howa Type 89, and it's a pretty well drawn one.
Like with 's request, I made a bad screw up with the body-head relation and... well... the original lineart at first glance looks ok but when start applying perspective to it, you realize that it look more like a chibby drawing
So again I tweaked the lineart with perspective and scaling two times. One for overall the body and head and then again exclusively for the head as to make it look more appropiate to the angle of sight.
I'm sorta happy with this project but I realize that I still need a lot of practice to make my pin ups look anywhere as good as those of the best artists.
Oh.... And yeah, I said I would be working on that remake of May Liberty smile. The problem is that the project is going to have some 50 aircrafts (More or less) and vectoring each one of them is going to be such a drag. And I already noted that I made a small mistake in the perspective of the aircraft screenshots I'm vectoring. A very good eye will notice but again I might be able to do slight corrections on the final steps as to hide/camouflage any mistakes I'll do during the project. I'll be two weeks with it AT LEAST!
So I might as well dedicate some time with the smaller projects (Unfortunately this is the only one that can be considered small).
Anyway I hope you like this.
See'ya in the Battlefield!
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Comments: 123
Panzerfire In reply to Danny-Haymond-Jr [2010-08-18 00:42:39 +0000 UTC]
Well thanks. When I re-make this project I'll make sure that the Type 89 keeps up with the standars of the one I drew for this one.
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Panzerfire In reply to ItsJustKozHere [2010-08-18 00:41:26 +0000 UTC]
Yeah. Since I tweaked the lineart with perspective, I'm not surprise they look off.
I'm remaking this project in a few weeks trying to mantain the pose (or a similar one) but perhaps from a different perspective.
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ItsJustKozHere In reply to Panzerfire [2010-08-18 01:51:12 +0000 UTC]
instead of a high angle try a low angle
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Panzerfire In reply to ItsJustKozHere [2010-08-21 13:18:42 +0000 UTC]
lol.... I thought I did made a low angle. MAN I SUCK!
But ok... will look into it for the next version.
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kaazmiz In reply to ??? [2010-08-17 23:41:47 +0000 UTC]
No cute short-haired girls?
Dont u think that pose is quite impossible to make? What kind of neck does she have
?
the Type89 looks even longer than it is in reality
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Panzerfire In reply to kaazmiz [2010-08-18 00:38:01 +0000 UTC]
Bugger.
I'm remaking this project due to the criticism its getting. Well... that and I agree that project could have looked so much better. So I'm remaking it taking into account the mistakes I have made.
Oh and the Type89 is just fine That's your own eyes tricking you. Any smaller and it'd look like a toy. Hell I think it's already a bit too small.
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kaazmiz In reply to Panzerfire [2010-08-19 00:35:08 +0000 UTC]
im asuming the guns length based on the bipod atached underneth it. thin how high the gun would be if it was standing on it
yes yes. mistakes...long hair just wont doo for tomboyish jsdf cuties
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Panzerfire In reply to kaazmiz [2010-08-21 13:22:52 +0000 UTC]
Pffff... My character, my decission on how her hair looks.
And yeah the bipod is a bit too long but the rifle itself is not so off from it's proper size.
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Panzerfire In reply to Ownerest [2010-08-18 00:35:40 +0000 UTC]
Point me to an anime character that does look Japanese.
But there's a lot that I f*cked up in this project. So I'm making a remake of this in a few months.
You think that if I enlarge the space between the eyes and the eyebrows, that would make her look more asian?
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Ownerest In reply to Panzerfire [2010-08-18 02:00:55 +0000 UTC]
Yeah but this isn't anime, itslike based on real people ;D
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Panzerfire In reply to Ownerest [2010-08-21 13:20:20 +0000 UTC]
O_O
Well.... I try to aim at drawing more realistic faces but I don't want to get rid off the Rei Hiroe style I'm trying to develope. which is well anime/manag looking
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Tank50us In reply to ??? [2010-08-17 22:57:28 +0000 UTC]
don't worry about the body head relation, most japanese anime artists seem to mess up the body-breast relation... seriously, I think it's helarious how in some of them, they start off twigs, but when the clothes come off (even with bathing suits) they've got... well... I'll shut up
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Panzerfire In reply to Tank50us [2010-08-18 00:33:04 +0000 UTC]
lol well... Some artists got a different concept of body proportions which is an integral part of their style. So far I have been using proportion conscepts that I've took from a book that teaches how to draw human anatomy in a accurate way although I think I have failed to properly go trough its guidelines.
Maybe it's time I make a slight change in my drawing style and go for a slighty more unrealistic body proportion concept as to make my characters look better (I know it sounds ironic).
Either way, I think I'll remake this project. I can definitively make it look better. I just need to practice more my body drawings.
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enojado In reply to ??? [2010-08-17 22:39:54 +0000 UTC]
Nice, i honestly have no other questions since youv explained the whole thing in the description, however, the rifle looks like a combines AK with a G3...LAWl
but cool drawing...if i may say, the legs look a little weird, from the knees to the feet, but it could just be the angle of the pose..
coloring as always is just awesome
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Panzerfire In reply to enojado [2010-08-18 00:28:15 +0000 UTC]
lol... The Howa looks more G-3 like.
Looking at the general criticism on this picture, I realize that this is far from being good.
So..... It shall get a remake
I'll draw a new "Why I joined the JGSDF". I'll aim at replicating the pose but properly build as to avoid making the character look too flexible. If I feel I'm getting nowhere going that way, then I'll just go with another pose.
If you got some more constructive criticism I am willing to hear it.
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enojado In reply to Panzerfire [2010-08-18 01:08:33 +0000 UTC]
haha, well to be honest, i dont like criticizing because im not that good of an artist myself, however, i am willing to help out on improving, so ill say that her right arm, from the shoulder looks a little off, almost as if the angle is from the front of the body, i dont know if i can explain it better, but other than that, you got it down quite well
and yeah i just adore these "why i joined" pics of yours xD
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Panzerfire In reply to enojado [2010-08-21 13:16:41 +0000 UTC]
Well I'm glad you like'em
I hope I can avoid making the same mistakes I made working on this one in the next version.
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