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paper-doesnt-judge — Broken Telephone
Published: 2011-11-29 02:12:02 +0000 UTC; Views: 160; Favourites: 6; Downloads: 0
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Ask me my opinionTry to get my story
But you won't bother;
More interest in morning glory
It's like a broken telephone,
Each wire out of place.
Every circuit cut,
Another day to face.
It's a ridiculous game
Of no explanation
Just judgment and
All together damnation
You can't assume
You're right
Over midnight scribbles
And emotional blight
Two sides to every story
How convenient when it's you
But no empathy left
For conscience to stay true
It's a clawing at your shoulders;
That lonely ignored call
It's pins and needles;
Your attempt to stall
Oh nothing.
How convincing can you be?
If I had to ask
Couldn't you explain to me?
Just a misunderstanding,
Don't laugh at the naive
Turned back, locked doors;
I have a lost friend to grieve
Impartial party promised trust
Yet it judged my every breath
We always knew it'd be us,
Dancing the dance of death
I miss the smile and its repercussion
I miss the trust I felt
I don't believe that you can't hear me
Since not all the cards have been dealt
All four aces
Useless twos
But those jokers,
They were the ruse
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Comments: 2
I really liked this poem (in part because, I GET IT)
But what is the purpose of that last stanza? It doesn't seem to help me understand this lack of communication between two friends.
As I read the first stanza, I'm not sure why you wrote "More interest in morning glory" do you mean the flower?
I loved the two lines
"Just a misunderstanding,
Don't laugh at the naive"
I'm the kind of person who won't assume something is true unless I'm told that it is. Which saves me from assuming things that aren't true but also makes me seem naive for not thinking the worst of people :L
The other day my dad asked me "Are you finished applying to those college programs yet?"
I responded "No (not yet)"
Then he brilliantly asked "Why haven't you started?"
I know how frustrating broken communication lines can be, even if my own recent example is not nearly as destructive and painful as I'm sure yours may be.
Great job on this poem, your subject matter came across brilliantly.
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Im glad you understood this one but to clear up a few things i did mean the flower suggesting that one friend has more interest in morning glory than hearing the other friend out.
The last stanza is a slight bit more personal therefor more open for interpretation;
it's basically explaining which cards have been dealt (as mentioned in the second to last stanza) the four aces being the most key actions, the twos being small things we let slide and the jokers being the obstacles that tricked us into being led to this point.
As always thanks for reading and please let me know if i explained that okay haha
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