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Published: 2006-05-15 20:59:04 +0000 UTC; Views: 119; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 5
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I sit by the benchWhere we used to sit.
The grass beneath me is damp
I don't mind.
The bench is not a place
To be without you.
I remember back
To a time when you were still here.
We sit on the bench
And talk about about the future.
Our dreams and wishes and hopes
That you predict will come true.
You come out with the remark
That still makes me smile.
I listen to you talk
And watch your eyes dance
As you foresee my cluttered writing desk
Along with your research lab.
You knew my secrets
I knew yours.
We had a trust that was as strong
As the bond that was our friendship.
I found comfort and solace in your words
Your dry humour always made me feel better.
I laugh.
The leaves rustle
As if telling me to move along.
Your voice fades away.
And it's just me and
The bench again.
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Comments: 27
That's clever, expecially as benches can be dedicated to someones memory. I also makes the poem grounded in a specific time and place.
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I'm hardly ever comfortable with sharing the meanings behind my poems. So I hardly ever post my poems anyway. I think this is really purdeh though.
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i think it works the way that you base the whole poem around the one place (bench) but i get the feel that the time you write of was of considerable length!
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The whole poem is based upon remembrance. It wasn't just the one time, the bench is a symbol of where this person and I spent time. ^^ It was over a period of time. ^^
Thank you for commenting.
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yeah thats what i thought i just said it badly, that came across well!
thats ok
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Mmm
I have to say I prefer your other stuff. Being honest and nasty as I am, I will proudly say the themes are done far too often nowadays. I much prefer originality, and your other stuff hit a lot closer to the mark.
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Thanks for commenting.
I'm trying everything nowadays, I went for deep.
I don't like it actually. :/
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That's ok then, I guess it means you'll not do it again and we'll both be happy 
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I didn't say I wouldn't do it again.
And you don't have to read the things you don't think you'll like.
I'm not a big fan of lengthly poems, I'll leave trying that for a time when I fancy doing it.
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Generally if I don't like doing something, like banging my head on the wall, I won't do it again. I thought you might follow the same train of thought.
But I like you so I have to to look caring and read it all
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You're on your own train of thought too.
True, I could have that one piece that makes world history and you could just 'delete selected' after selecting my one, thinking 'Meh, didn't like that last one'.
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I don't know whether to look forward to your stuff now :/ Do some drawing so it's easy to tell please
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xD Draw what? I have limited art skills when it comes to drawing out of the top of my head. :/
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A nakey anthro. Not suggestive though. But it's almost no-one's style, so I tried it. Came up with an above average piece for me
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I told you, I can't draw fictional things out of my head. xD
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That's a pity. Fictional stuff is awesome. Okays, try drawing my featured mech in a new pose
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Even without specifics, I felt your anguish. The loss of a loved one is never easy.
And come to think of it, the bench as the repository of your feelings is appropriate; it's been designed to hold things comfortably and safely.
Thank you for sharing this. I hope the writing of it eased at least some of your burdens.
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Thank you for taking the time to read this.
It took me back to a place that felt good. It happened a while ago, not so recently so it wasn't as hard as I thought it would be.
I tried writing this piece with a lighter tone but it didn't suit.
I'm not very keen on the poem actually. This person wasn't a sad person. Always an optimist. So I feel this poem doesn't do the person justice. And that slightly annoys me.
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A poet who is satisfied with their own work is a poet who's stopped trying.
Maybe what's called for is a completely separate piece that focuses on their upbeat outlook. Just a thought.
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Thank you for that. ^^ I like that.
I like the idea and I'll think about it. Not just now though, I won't have time to focus on it.
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