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peterdawes — A Debtor in the End by-nc-nd
Published: 2008-10-21 11:17:24 +0000 UTC; Views: 400; Favourites: 9; Downloads: 3
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Description i spent currency my soul does not possess,
bankrupting myself in all manner of ways
giving something only to receive debt in return.
this world was fashioned for martyrs
it was created for the wounded to sing
glory, hallelujah
upon the altar mounted for them.

nails dug into the ground,
i formed trenches with my fingertips
trying to crawl out of the grave i dug.
the rain beating down on me,
mud-stained clothing and shoes with
not enough traction to scale the six-foot deep walls,
i slid and fell atop my coffin again.

perhaps i should just lie here.

the sky is peaceful from the belly of the earth.
the stillness reaches me like the whisper of death
upon the doorstep of the wicked
and i am inclined to watch the sunrise at last
in all its brilliant hues of pastel happiness,
that detachment i possess to the light becoming an
all-consuming fire, igniting my soul.

a funeral pyre; from ashes to ashes.
we all fall down.

i dug the hole too deep and the earth
swallowed me whole; it consumed me until
there was nothing left of me to offer.
just the debt left behind
of spending currency my soul did not possess
attempting to find an exit
from the chill of solitary.
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Comments: 16

Blueskye27 [2008-10-26 18:17:22 +0000 UTC]

Spending currency one's soul does not possess...amazing image. Great stuff.

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peterdawes In reply to Blueskye27 [2008-10-26 20:04:13 +0000 UTC]

thank you kindly.

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Blanzeflor [2008-10-23 01:50:52 +0000 UTC]

I totally and completely feel and understand this poem...right to my core. I could never have said it more beautifully and with such truth.

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peterdawes In reply to Blanzeflor [2008-10-23 02:21:41 +0000 UTC]

such kind words; i appreciate them immensely. thank you.

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Kathryn-777 [2008-10-22 02:38:19 +0000 UTC]

It gives a deep feeling of regret...perhaps a wish that if it could be undone and start over again things would be considered differently not necessarily in the concept of good or bad...just different...that is the feeling I get from this piece....A very enjoyable read!

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peterdawes In reply to Kathryn-777 [2008-10-23 01:37:46 +0000 UTC]

that is an interesting thought. i wonder if that is what was trying to wriggle from my subconscious.
thank you!

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Kathryn-777 In reply to peterdawes [2008-10-25 03:01:36 +0000 UTC]

My pleasure!

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AsteriaSinclair [2008-10-22 02:03:25 +0000 UTC]

I like the title, the piece is at whole, great piece.

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peterdawes In reply to AsteriaSinclair [2008-10-23 01:39:15 +0000 UTC]

thank you!

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YouInventedMe [2008-10-21 22:58:05 +0000 UTC]

that opening line is a killer


xo!

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peterdawes In reply to YouInventedMe [2008-10-23 01:40:43 +0000 UTC]

thank you, shane

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Guitar-Child [2008-10-21 19:27:08 +0000 UTC]

It flows quite nicely for just "random thoughts." *chuckles*

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Malandante [2008-10-21 13:59:54 +0000 UTC]

Different doesn't quite fit but it is good all the same.

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meljoy68 [2008-10-21 12:33:09 +0000 UTC]

It's an fantastic write, I'm still mulling it over.

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peterdawes In reply to meljoy68 [2008-10-21 13:00:58 +0000 UTC]

hopefully something worth chewing on in all of that. *chuckles*
thank you very kindly.

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meljoy68 In reply to peterdawes [2008-10-21 16:15:33 +0000 UTC]

Oh, most definitely.

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