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peterdawes — Abiding Slumber I Bequeath
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Published: 2009-02-05 01:50:21 +0000 UTC; Views: 4267; Favourites: 29; Downloads: 10
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eternal kiss of death i bringwith silver tongue and sharpened teeth
a wicked denizen of night,
abiding slumber i bequeath
all you who rest in ignorance,
you silent dreamers lost in spring.
the chill of winter overwhelms.
eternal kiss of death i bring.
all you who dance within the dark,
who come upon your lifeblood’s thief.
i lure you to the grave’s embrace
with silver tongue and sharpened teeth.
you damned and finite mortal ghosts,
immersed in decadence and spite.
i taste your sins upon my tongue,
a wicked denizen of night.
you’ll not escape the judgment come,
the threshing plow of blade in sheath.
with one fell swoop, you’ll breathe your last.
abiding slumber i bequeath.
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Comments: 31
Congratulations! The poem is haunting and beautiful, no wonder you won! Bravo, good sir, bravo!
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This has an excellent rhythm and I love how "old-fashioned" the poem sounds.
The only thing that needs changing is the small typo near the end: "you'll breath your last" should be "you'll breathe your last."
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And then, six years later, I finally saw this comment and fixed the typo. 
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Well, where the hell have you been these past 6 years?
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Here, there, and practically everywhere. I have been making some attempt at publishing my work. So far, it has been at least marginally successful. I hope you have been well.
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This is a wonderfully written poem. Very dark, traces of morbidity all throughout the piece. Congrats on winning first place, you've earned it.
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right... ive been trying to stop myself from commenting everything i see but i liked this too much to let it go XD
very creepy, it sent chills down my spine. i loved it, its perfect
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Stunning work, your horror poetry is always so beautiful.
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This reminds me of a villanelle ^_^ I love the rhythm, it really suits the subject ^_-
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yes, it reminded me of one as well.
perhaps why i thought it should rhyme.
thank you!
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Positively Chilling! *shudders* Very well penned!
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lies, fangs, and a sharpened sword. i think i'll leave the lamp on tonight...
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that... may not be a bad idea.
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