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peterdawes — An Ode to Skin
Published: 2008-03-10 23:33:54 +0000 UTC; Views: 530; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 5
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i had a dreamwhere you wore
nothing
at
all.
i always liked the way
that dress
looked
off
you.
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Thank you, dear Rabbit!
(For the favorite as well. 
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Very much so.
Thank you, my dear. The favorite is appreciated, as is the compliment.
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The form of this gives me an interesting idea, it has the dribbly form, which is pretty pitter-patter skin tingley in its own right, but how hilarious would it be to have the poem in the same of a woman. Formalist poetry is fun!
I'm literally blacking out now so I should probably shut off the computer!! Am so tired! My right eye is filling with darkness.
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Hello, darkness, my old friend. . .
Funny you should mention that. Deliberated the possibility of trying something of the like, just couldn't find the right placement of words for it.
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"Bodacious Babe" makes a great set of poem-boobs.
Just kidding.
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I'm certain it does... Dude.
Must reserve that thought for the next time I need to fuck with the writer's mind a little. *grin*
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Because there's always more room for that! >.>
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But of course! This is me you're speaking to, after all.
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Oh and we love you for it. Sorry Jules.
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Bah, sanity is overrated anyhow.
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Very nice..Your words always paint such a wonderful picture...
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Thank you, dear Sabrina. As always, I appreciate your warm compliments.
Thank you for the favorite as well.
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I like it! ^_^ hehe, it kinda reminds me of the line "I love that dress... but it would look much better on the floor."
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I couldn't agree more with whomever coined that phrase.
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Love it, especially the second stanza about dress. I've always been very keen on shorties, and yours are fine examples of using few words to say a lot and do it stylishly.
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Thank you for deeming it worthy of your Literature collection.
I am enjoying these shorter poems. They're quaint little indulgences. I doubt they'll break me of the longer tomes, but it helps hone the skills in any event.
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I've also written a few, but in my native tongue.
My favourite one goes like this:
Hullumeelsus on hullu meelsus
Midagi väljaspool meie reaalsust
Midagi eksimatut ja püha
(a roundabout translation would be (excluding totally the wordplay...*sighs*) - Insanity is the mad man's mentality, something outside of our reality, something inerrant and sacred.)
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I can catch a bit of the wordplay by looking at the words themselves. A pity I do not speak your language. The sentiment of the poem is really fascinating, though, just the same.
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And here's another one for you, another oldie and shorty:
"Väikeste laste sammudest puruneb kuu.
Tähed säravad edasi."
(Footsteps of little children shatter the moon. Stars shine on.)
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I really enjoyed that one. 
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Found yet another one: (looks like I'm amusing you with my oldies.)
Lõ
ainult enesetapjatele
(Endless will to live is characteristic only to suiciders.)
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You did well in translation.
And have quite a way with words. But then again, we always knew you were an intelligent woman.
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And you enjoy it. Admit it.
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Of course I do. Since you know HOW to do it.
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But seriously, you're right! Why be afraid
of something we ALL have! (I mean, except
for the skinless monster under my bed.)
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Now, that would be rather disconcerting. I do hope you keep it fed, for your sake.
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Of course! It eats dead carnations, so
I keep a steady stock of flowers.
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A good thing for you that carnations are so inexpensive.
I would have chosen a bit more docile of a pet, myself.
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Ah yes, but you're forgetting
all the advantages of having
a skinless monster.
Like, for example, if you have
some one over that you really
don't like, you only have to kindly
call out fluffy and send them running
from the house like a mouse!
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Quite so. Or, you could offer Fluffy dinner. That would serve dual purposes; keeping Fluffy at bay and ridding yourself of the nuisance.
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Fluffy's not as bad as Fluffy sounds. I think skinless
things are just misunderstood. We're so used to all
the skin-things, that when we see something without
it we get all freaked out.
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