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peterdawes — Breathe
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Published: 2009-11-05 04:15:32 +0000 UTC; Views: 520; Favourites: 16; Downloads: 4
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i take a breathinhaling deeper than
i ever have before.
scents which make
their way through
senses dulled.
revitalizing me
illuminating a
hazy consciousness.
flowing through
the passages into
the depths of my soul.
absorbed into
the system, expelled
as a wistful sigh.
the mind conjures
thoughts of who
i am, who i will
be, what to think
and how to feel.
unashamed, i am.
i take a breath
and feel the steady
cadence of my heart.
living within hope,
rising to the
forefront at last.
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Comments: 15
The theme of this poem is fluidly simplistic, each stanza lulls the reader into a dreamlike state. Great job on this piece very tranquil and well put together.
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There are 3 poets here on dA that I aspire to try to write as well as they do. You are one of them. When I write poetry, it's from a place deep within me and it comes out in rhyme. There are some that don't, but for the most part they rhyme. But when I read poetry, it's not the rhyme factor that wows me. Oh, I hope you get the drift of what I'm saying anyway.
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what a high compliment.
thank you very kindly. i truly appreciate it. 
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rhyming comes easily for me but to put rhyme and rhythm together is harder. My grand daughter have the same taste in poets, I see.
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I really like this, it seems almost dreamlike.
It was a nice to see some of your work in my inbox again, I hope to read more soon. ^^
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Nice surprise, sorry.
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My mind's eye is an active one ... it sees images in all manner of work. In this, I see someone who has risen above their repression ... above their pain ... above their own view of themselves.
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This is beautiful, I aspire to be able to write as well as this someday, *faves*
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*chuckles* i am humbled you think this is worth aspiring toward. thank you very kindly.
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You're very welcome, it truly is ^^
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yes DA has come a long way it seems although I can think of some other things they need to improve.
As for this piece I truly love it. It fits a part of how I feel sometimes.
Lovely to see your work again I for one am looking forward to seeing what more you had laying around
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thank you very kindly, dear.
glad you enjoyed it. 
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welcome love
lol so true about DA
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