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peterdawes — Do You?
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Published: 2008-03-21 23:07:18 +0000 UTC; Views: 705; Favourites: 7; Downloads: 10
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Do you feel that, love?The sensation of my fingertips,
Running across your body,
As though you were an instrument,
And I the musician, seeking a melody.
The sound of your erotic moans.
Do you feel the hand upon your shoulder?
Sliding along its curvature,
Studying the topography of your skin,
Silky smooth and worthy of being kissed,
Worthy of being stroked with gentle reverence,
By fingertips and tongue alike.
Do you feel my breath,
Hitting the side of your face,
Before my lips graze against your cheek;
As my voice whispers in your ear,
How beloved you are,
How much I've desired you above all things?
Do you believe what I say?
Melting into the incantation of words,
Becoming lost within the gentle caress.
Two hands memorizing every inch of you.
Do you feel me close against you,
As words and actions join together.
How much I need you. How much I want this.
Your hair drifting down your back.
My fingers intertwined with it while,
My mouth presses against your flesh.
You are a goddess. I am your servant.
Do you believe this is true?
Do you believe that when I make love to you,
I lose myself within the experience,
My soul sinking deeper into yours,
All of my senses being assaulted by you,
In sensual blindness to every other thing,
That might be happening around us?
Only feeling your body beneath mine.
The touch of your hands upon my back,
Hungry lips intersecting with one another.
Do you feel the depth of my love for you,
As I clutch onto you tightly,
Begging not to let you go?
Do you sense me in your dreams,
Whenever we're apart from one another?
That every single night I walk behind you,
Wrapping my arms around you,
And drawing you near.
Do you hope to feel me beside you once again?
Or am I just a hopeless dreamer,
Lost within his reveries?
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Comments: 43
Ahh, I know this sort of emotion so well. Lovely work.
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You are seriously killing me... hoping the rest I still want to catch up on are not of this nature. You are too good a writer in ways. Stick to the depressing. 
Just kiddding, write what you feel... that's the only way to do it.
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*chuckles* I'm confused. Depressing or erotic? What say ye?
How am I killing you, dear?
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I have this ability to literally feel things I read quite often. So what I read effects me in that way. So just imagine the rollercoaster reading all those poems in one day put me on.
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I operate quite differently. The mood comes upon me and I only seek out those things which indulge it. The other things seem to bounce off me.
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Oh, lucky. I can be an emotional wreck when I read. I recently emersed myself in a book trilogy called the Dragonriders of Pern. I read it a few years ago but forgot most of it. I dragged the book everywhere with me until I finished. I'm sure people wondered who the nut was that would be laughing then the next minute crying over a book.
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If only the author knew. They would probably be flattered.
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I would hope so. I once started writing a fanfic based on the world.. but I couldn't figure out good timing on it. There are so many books I couldn't figure out where to put my intrusion in without changing the original timeline.
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Have you considered penning a similar tale with your own characters? This way you are not bound to the author's continuity.
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well as long as I use the world it's tough to time things out because there are books written all along the timeline.. there are like 20 books spanning all the years pern existed.
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No, meant more so. . . a similar tale, yet not within the author's world. In your own world, perhaps? But one that resembles what you favor about those books and their realm.
Not that I am averse to fan fiction. However, there is quite a bit of liberty when operating outside the bounds of someone else's canon and continuity.
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well the problem is my story involves dragons and dragon-riders, harpers, and a harper hall.. all things any Pern fan would recognize immediately. Oh, and thread. I know if you haven't read the books you don't know what that means but it's like the big enemy of pern.. so there's no way I can get around it being on that world.
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That's so beautiful and yet so sad an ending.. you have an amazing way with words, Mr Dawes.
Though, I have to say.. this was rather difficult to read with thecarrot sat behind me shouting obscenities at my GameBoy because of what he's naming his Pokemon and rival *rolls eyes* He's so *mature*..
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*chuckles* You should see me while playing cards.
The elders love cards. I have no bloody idea why. I lack any semblance of a poker face because my profanity flies freely and unfettered when I'm losing.
Thank you for the compliment, my dear. I truly appreciate your comments.
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Hehe, I'd love to see you play cards - it sounds amusing
I'm always here to cast a critical eye over a piece... though, with poetry, it's very difficult to do so.
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I am not much of a card player. Games in general tend to vex me. I endure them purely to be diplomatic.
Yes, poetry is much like critiquing a painting in a gallery. One can assuredly tell when it's poorly executed. However, from there it is all in the eye of the beholder.
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My father's terrible, he won't even join in games for someone else's benefit.
Of course. For example, we came across a poem today in English by W.B.Yeats, "He wishes for the Cloths of Heaven", which we all agreed seemed a piss poor attempt at a love poem... but I'm sure the person he wrote it for thought it was beautiful. Lovely imagery but far too much repetition for my taste...
Had I the heavens' embroidered cloths,
Enwrought with golden and silver light,
The blue and the dim and the dark cloths
Of night and light and the half-light,
I would spread the cloths under your feet;
But I, being poor, have only my dreams,
I have spread my dreams under your feet;
Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.
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Yes, far too repetitive for my taste as well. Not much of a Yeats fan. Amy Lowell and Pablo Neruda are my current favorites, with a bit of a hat tip toward e.e. cummings. He penned his poems lowercase as I do.
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I seem to be becoming more interested in poetry recently. Possibly because it's the first time in four years that I've not spent the majority of my English classes analysing them to death. Not to mention, they do pick some of the worst poems to go into exam anthologies *sigh*
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The key is to determine what form of poetry you like. Then, to find the poets penning such verse. Even while the rest of the mortal world picks apart the dull tripe, you can engage your mind with something that spurs your own creativity.
Several of you have inspired a few of my own works.
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Yeah... hopefully it'll be better at univesity.. *crosses fingers* It seems like they choose some good texts - last year they used Dr Jekyll and Mr Hyde and Dorian Gray as two of the texts.
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so i was just sitting here, munching on my favourite chocolate-chip cookies, when i come across this. i almost choked!
this is beautiful! i was astounded at your description and your word choice was extremely powerful.
*bows* i am not worthy! i am not worthy!
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I suppose there is a reason why the writer lady calls me The Poet.
I still believe I am The Amateur.
But I thank you for your kind words. 
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ahhh, cuute.
oh i have every doubt that you're The Amateur. i've tried so many times to write poetry and every time i've failed horribly. it's quite sad, actually.
ahh, no problem. i'll defintely keep reading.
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A matter of practice and having the right subject matter.
Be personal. Be real. Be descriptive and be clever. Those are the ingredients to some of my better works.
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i've been inspired. i actually wrote a poem for the first time in probably three years. thank you.
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Bravo! And it is truly my pleasure. One can only hope to inspire another. You have given me a smile, my dear,
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ah, then my goal is fulfilled. there's nothing unhealthy about a smile a day
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Certainly not, especially when one is needed.
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i see. thank you for the tips, i can tell they work.
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Quite so. Too long indeed.
Entirely my fault.
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Once again I'm left in total amazement of the feelings, and the visions that are conjured up within your words. Beautiful work my friend..
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Thank you, Sabrina.
You all make the experience of exploring poetry that much more delightful. I didn't know I would enjoy it so much. Consider yourself one of the people I learn a great deal from as I explore.
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It is always my pleasure. I am extremly honored and flattered that a poet such as yourself could learn from me. Your work is always amazing, and I find myself learning a great deal from you..
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Life experiences should be good for something, I suppose.
Wrestling with words to find emotions. It's certainly an interesting ride. Thank goodness we can still manage to create art from it.
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The art is my outlet..Without it, I fear, life would overly consume me..At least with my words, I am able to have some form of release..
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I understand the sentiment completely.
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I knew if anyone would, it would be you...
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