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who gave you permission to growfrom a small child with ponytails
to a young woman
self-assured
with a sober head on her shoulders?
so many years in-between, dear.
so many experiences left swallowed in the past.
such as
first days of school,
first teeth lost,
reading and writing and math.
intelligent girl,
you probably charmed your peers
the first moment they saw you smile.
tests and papers,
graduation ceremonies with tasseled hats
and gowns and the future
an open book.
a well to tap.
a world to conquer set before you.
i still see the little girl inside my mind.
she liked to chase rays of sun
and stop to smell each flower she came upon.
she pressed her cheek against mine
saying, "daddy, i love you."
i bleed life
whenever i hear that small voice speak.
yet seeing you now
gives me hope for today and tomorrow.
yesterdays have passed like wind,
shifting sand dunes across the desert,
yet the here and now lingers
with the miracle of the moment.
that little girl's heart, now grown,
still has room for the one who first
chased shadows away from her bedroom
and stood guard over her,
the most precious jewel he possessed.
young woman,
who gave you permission
to wear the stars in your hair?
and what will i do when a suitor
comes along to capture the moonlight
sealing it inside a bottle
to present it to you?
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Comments: 32
cherry-blossom-fan [2011-08-14 20:01:40 +0000 UTC]
I love it. I love the whole father-daughter relationship dynamic. This was written really well
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peterdawes In reply to cherry-blossom-fan [2012-01-03 17:44:27 +0000 UTC]
belated thanks to you for your comment. i am very pleased you enjoyed my poem.
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BeutifulDeadCreature [2009-09-15 22:52:32 +0000 UTC]
I'm not a daddy's girl.. mine was never around. but i can see the love pouring from this work. great job
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PhantomThiefVier [2008-12-04 07:29:35 +0000 UTC]
I almost want to cry. Such beautiful melancholy you have portrayed.
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Metalwolfe [2008-11-23 02:29:18 +0000 UTC]
Perhaps the best poem that you have ever written, my friend.
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wonderlustqueen [2008-10-18 17:17:53 +0000 UTC]
young woman,
who gave you permission
to wear the stars in your hair?
and what will i do when a suitor
comes along to capture the moonlight
sealing it inside a bottle
to present it to you?
Aww. I'm a daddy's girl at heart. This really speaks to me.
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pageburner [2008-10-11 13:58:42 +0000 UTC]
Amazing! Reading this nearly made me cry when i thought of my one year old daughter.
I looved it all especially - I bleed life whenever i hear that small voice speak.
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ErilisVampyre [2008-09-20 05:39:23 +0000 UTC]
*smile* Very beautiful verses of felt memories cast from the stars.
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MrsDarcKnyt [2008-09-20 04:24:57 +0000 UTC]
*wipes a tear*
Peter, you're a gut puncher, you know that, right?
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rabidpurplepuma [2008-09-19 23:17:18 +0000 UTC]
oh my gosh i almost cried when i read this!!! i am the little girl!!! fortunately still little enough... but u r an incredible writer/ poet!!! so touching!
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Always-Wanting-More [2008-09-19 23:04:59 +0000 UTC]
this is really amazing! although my only problem is the line where it says "i bleed life
whenever i hear that small voice speak" because the word bleed takes away from the happiness of the poem. i would try using grasp or some other variation of the word.
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ItsxMagik [2008-09-19 22:47:45 +0000 UTC]
Magnificent!
Hey, congrats. I just logged in and this was on the popular page.
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LeonieSainteVire [2008-09-19 22:33:29 +0000 UTC]
Another lovely testament to love...amid a treasure trove of them.
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YouInventedMe [2008-09-19 20:45:09 +0000 UTC]
the first stanza was my favorite
...until I got to the close
great stuff, peter
xo!
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HoldingBackTears [2008-09-19 20:21:33 +0000 UTC]
the was so indescribably beautiful, peter! the sentiment and emotion was so powerful throughout the entire piece.
well done, peter. so well done.
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Guitar-Child [2008-09-19 20:12:06 +0000 UTC]
I might wonder if fathers really do feel this way . . . I wouldn't know . . . I don't have one to ask.
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purecountry [2008-09-19 18:49:07 +0000 UTC]
Peter, that is beautiful. Time does fly. In a blink of an eye, they have grown, and almost unrecognizable. One thing never changes though, she will always be your little girl.
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frisca-freak [2008-09-19 17:20:10 +0000 UTC]
that was beautiful. just beautiful.
i feel like giving my dad a hug now
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PanDemoniumAeon [2008-09-19 16:19:06 +0000 UTC]
blew mw away! very realistic and sensual! very well written! well done!
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Kathryn-777 [2008-09-19 16:18:30 +0000 UTC]
I can almost hear my father express just about the same thing yeaaaaaars ago. I was the only girl among 3 brothers Beautiful piece Peter!
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ikkuma [2008-09-19 16:15:50 +0000 UTC]
*bawls*
dawwhhh!
this one hit home.... only its kind of reverse for me. and different... but still. *cries*
great job.
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AzraelDarkAngel540 [2008-09-19 14:44:08 +0000 UTC]
magnificent!! the imagery, the concept are just perfect!
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peterdawes In reply to AzraelDarkAngel540 [2008-09-19 14:54:14 +0000 UTC]
thank you very kindly, friend.
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