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peterdawes — Last Words of a Drowning Soul
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Published: 2009-01-13 00:28:04 +0000 UTC; Views: 518; Favourites: 19; Downloads: 3
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who is this personwho casts a weary glance
outside the window?
who is this man who shuns
the light of more than suns,
their destructive forces with spots
bursting from the surface; a tumult.
with fire; arms outstretched,
how could he refuse
their deadly embrace?
take away the shadows from the
corners of the room.
the demons lurk there.
the voices whispering in the
dead of night, without cadence,
a cacophony of murmurs with
accusations hidden in their words.
punish the guilty; punish the wicked.
they encroach upon me when i cower.
they consume me when i fail to
brace myself for the embrace of night.
i beheld the moon just like a voyeur.
i beheld the world as though i
belonged to it; as though there was a
caress and an embrace within
strangers passing by.
but darkened eyes and a silent tongue
are all i have to offer them.
they walk away and gaze upon
my countenance no more.
who is this person?
i scarcely recognize his haunted gaze.
i hardly know what manner of possession
forces the one who has everything
to be convinced he has
nothing at all. i only know the
shadows clamor for me and i
extend a hand, i reach a hand out
a final attempt to grasp for salvation
before the darkness captures me
and refuses to let me go.
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Comments: 22
"hello darkness, my old friend"
thank you for the 
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Wow, literally could feel the emotions flowing from the words. Very well done Peter.
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this is so well orchestrated. i like these lines best, though:
i beheld the moon just like a voyeur.
i beheld the world as though i
belonged to it;
they haunt professionally.
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I really like the difference between this and your normal pieces-though it is darker than I know you to write. It's deep. I simply adore it!
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This is great; you capture the feelings to a tee.
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I can relate to these words. I'm wading through negative thoughts myself and their fingers are grasping...I'm trying to make myself as slippery as an eel when I feel this kind of mood clinging to my skin. Well expressed!
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I'm here beloved, should you need to talk. No critique or criticism. You can't always shine like the bright star I know you are. Every now and then it needs to be polished so that it may shine brighter.
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I agree with ~losingmyfaith -- this is different than the usual from you, but it is still extremely well written.
I can relate all too much right now, but I don't think that the darkness will obscure us completely.
they consume me when i fail to
brace myself for the embrace of night
I really liked that part. I feel I can connect with it.
Wonderful work, Peter.
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Anyways, I'm in the doldrums myself actually. I'm trying to claw my way back out. So this really spoke to me.
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I like how different this is to your other poems. It's a great change. Good work.
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to tell you the truth, i am not all that fond of change like this. usually when i pen really dark pieces it is because i am very depressed.
but, i am glad it turned out nice just the same.
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aw, well I hope you feel better.
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