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peterdawes — The Darkness Snuffs the. . .
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Published: 2008-08-24 05:03:11 +0000 UTC; Views: 501; Favourites: 10; Downloads: 2
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ebbs the crimson from your veinsfrom ashes to ashes, death breathes its last
the darkness snuffs the dying flame
surrendering lifeblood in sharp waves of pain
enduring the visions of life flying past
ebbs the crimson from your veins
teeth prick the skin, establishing their claim
the spell of enchantment upon you cast
the darkness snuffs the dying flame
you followed me, precious, no need to explain
surrendered, you did, to the demon that passed
ebbs the crimson from your veins
immortal desires no longer restrained
your candle's light flickers, succumbing so fast
the darkness snuffs the dying flame
slip under, my dearest, and join the refrain
ascend to the heavens with the conquests amassed
ebbs the crimson from your veins
the darkness snuffs the dying flame.
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Comments: 27
Oooh this was excellent!
I love the line about the demon that passed. Bravo!
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......*starts to speak*........... blast it all! I'm speechles. This was.... amazing, to say the very least. I swear this should be made into a song. It had such a lyrical quality to it - i wanted to sing the words aloud. Excellently done, Peter.
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why thank you, kelly. i am growing fond of this style of poem.
sing along all you'd like, dear.
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woo! i think i just might.
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this sent shiver down my spine!
wonderful job and i love the line
"the darkness snuffs the dying flame."
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ah a shiver. exactly what i was striving for.
thank you, dear.
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Beautiful - I absolutely love it - the imagery is fabulous!
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thank you very kindly. coming from you, that means a great deal.
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i havent read much of your darker stuff but this is amazingly sublime
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*chuckles* i have not been penning much in the way of darker works lately. it begged to be done.
thank you.
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wel i guess its good that you havent been writing darker poetry lately because most poetry comes from whatever you are feeling at the time.
and what have i said about thanking me?
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ah yes, the devil always sits poised for a moment to speak.
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Indeed! I'm in the head space that some things land on your lap at precise moments to jolt awareness. Somethings echo our feelings and make us examine them instead of denial settling complacently. Thank you!
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mmm. . . blood. my sentiments exactly.
thank you.
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Of course..
You're welcome ^_^
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"you followed me, precious, no need to explain
surrendered, you did, to the demon that passed
ebbs the crimson from your veins"
::smiles::..perfectly expressed...
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thank you, dear leonie.
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isn't it about your bedtime, peter?
kidding.
nice poem. kind of creepy, in a good way.
god job
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speaking of bedtimes, dear kellsie-reanne.. . *coughs*
i have a phd in creepiness. it came with the immortality.
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hahah, i might as well be a vampire, peter. i probably stay up later than you do
i've always been a night person.
ROFLOL. a phd in creepiness. you crack me up.
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well, since i am no longer using the one in medicine, i must have something.
fellow creature of the night in mortal form, i dub thee an honorary vampire. all of the prestige with none of the bloodlust.
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yeah, i was gonna go for the whole med school thing, but decided against it.
and here's the coincidence. blood doesn't bother me, as long as i dont have to touch it.
so much for vampire, eh?
oh, none of the bloodlust. that works for me ^.^
wait... does this mean i'll be more coordinated? 'cause seriously, if i'm not, i want a refund.
xP kidding
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