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peterdawes — The Footsteps of the Fallen by-nc-nd
Published: 2008-07-21 21:48:06 +0000 UTC; Views: 429; Favourites: 9; Downloads: 1
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Description looking for something
to cauterize the wounds,
i burned my fingers on the sun
reaching for the light contained therein
hoping it would sear away
the ever-present sense of self-loathe
that finds its way inside my shoes.

daily walks and listless pondering.
surveying my place under the stars
only to discover
i exist in some distant galaxy
far removed from sense and reason,
some other reality
far removed from the face of heaven.

the angels do not smile in my direction.
they hide their eyes and glance
toward the presence of someone
much more deserving of their attention.
meanwhile, the devils cast lots
for pieces of my soul

who will be the victor?

foolish demons, they do not know
when the final chips are
cast onto the pile,
nothing exists for them to purchase
with the blood of martyrs
i shed to make an offering
on the holy altar of self.

merely the burning flesh
and barren soul
of a man who was forsaken.
a man cast aside by the saints
in all their splendor
a very long time ago.
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Comments: 27

katarthis [2008-10-22 03:13:11 +0000 UTC]

Very rich and tasty. Very.

k

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peterdawes In reply to katarthis [2008-10-23 01:35:48 +0000 UTC]

thank you!

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LNIN9 [2008-07-24 03:27:40 +0000 UTC]

beautiful in so many ways... your imagery is fantastic...

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peterdawes In reply to LNIN9 [2008-07-24 09:30:09 +0000 UTC]

thank you very kindly. i consider that high praise coming from a poet of your ability.

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LNIN9 In reply to peterdawes [2008-07-24 13:57:23 +0000 UTC]

you are welcome...

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MrsDarcKnyt [2008-07-24 02:13:10 +0000 UTC]

I wonder if Cain felt such?

It's like being abandoned by God. I'm so sorry you feel this way Peter.

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peterdawes In reply to MrsDarcKnyt [2008-07-24 09:55:39 +0000 UTC]

if it is, then i have instant empathy for cain.
there is that bloody ceiling again, just beyond my fingertips.

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MrsDarcKnyt In reply to peterdawes [2008-07-25 02:15:22 +0000 UTC]

Always just beyond our reach.

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denlm [2008-07-22 15:51:08 +0000 UTC]

This rises close to the top of my list of favorite Dawes poetry on the strength of these lines alone:

"... burned my fingers on the sun
reaching for the light..."

"...a man cast aside by the saints..."

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peterdawes In reply to denlm [2008-07-24 12:54:43 +0000 UTC]

thank you, dear denise. i am rarely satisfied with my own work, but this has been one of my recent favorites for some reason.

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denlm In reply to peterdawes [2008-07-25 13:18:49 +0000 UTC]

Are we ever, really? Satisfied? Take my word for it, though. This is top drawer.

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believeeverything [2008-07-22 07:20:10 +0000 UTC]

beautiful, speaks of feelings that i think most of us have at some time or another, not knowing where we belong or wanting to belong somewhere else. at least thats kinda what i got out of it. another beautiful piece

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peterdawes In reply to believeeverything [2008-07-24 19:08:30 +0000 UTC]

yes, very close to the intended sentiment. sadly, you are correct, we all can empathize in some manner or another. but i am glad you enjoyed the poem and found it beautiful. you are too kind.

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purecountry [2008-07-22 03:10:29 +0000 UTC]

Wonderful as always Peter..Such imagery and feeling..Another

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peterdawes In reply to purecountry [2008-07-24 19:08:53 +0000 UTC]

thank you, dear sabrina. i humbly appreciate it.

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purecountry In reply to peterdawes [2008-07-27 21:21:22 +0000 UTC]

My pleasure as always hun..

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HoldingBackTears [2008-07-22 02:40:53 +0000 UTC]

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peterdawes In reply to HoldingBackTears [2008-07-24 19:04:32 +0000 UTC]

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YouInventedMe [2008-07-21 22:02:57 +0000 UTC]

great poem
great band

all around

xo!

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peterdawes In reply to YouInventedMe [2008-07-21 22:07:51 +0000 UTC]

thank you very kindly.
may i say you have exceptional taste in music?

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YouInventedMe In reply to peterdawes [2008-07-21 22:09:20 +0000 UTC]

you certainly may. thanks.
rightbackatch1a

xo!

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Zer0Hawke [2008-07-21 21:59:01 +0000 UTC]

Such wonderful imagery.. but, surely, the saints and angels cannot give you up to the devils so easily?

I love that song!

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peterdawes In reply to Zer0Hawke [2008-07-21 22:07:04 +0000 UTC]

i do not know, dear. at times i wonder.

i do as well.

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Zer0Hawke In reply to peterdawes [2008-07-21 22:08:37 +0000 UTC]

Don't we all?

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peterdawes In reply to Zer0Hawke [2008-07-21 22:13:52 +0000 UTC]

i suppose so.
wait, are you talking about wondering or about loving the song?

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Zer0Hawke In reply to peterdawes [2008-07-21 22:18:07 +0000 UTC]

Wondering.. and loving the song! 'Cause the song is pretty awesome.

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peterdawes In reply to Zer0Hawke [2008-07-21 23:53:12 +0000 UTC]

quite awesome, i do agree.

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