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peterdawes — Want
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Published: 2008-07-23 11:46:40 +0000 UTC; Views: 340; Favourites: 7; Downloads: 1
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nothing more than one thing,one thing holds my desires captive;
one consuming notion
enthralls my mind
leading me through the desert of self
in search of an oasis.
if you are a mirage,
you are a beautiful illusion
and i would crawl across the sand
merely for the want of you.
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thank you kindly for the favorite.
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Fortunately she is no mirage. You CAN reach her eventually.
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Beautiful, Peter. Yet another wonderful piece to add to your collection.
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thank you kindly, dear.
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You are quite welcome ^^
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When the longing is fulfilled, it will be glorious!
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each time it is fulfilled in part, i am reminded that the best things are yet to come. but i am an impatient man.
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Waiting is always painful, this I know. I spent 30 years waiting for my beloved.
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fantastic sentiment
and the last line is great
xo!
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this is beautiful, in a wierd way... it was almost...desperate?
i'm gonna try not to sound like a raving fool here, but reading it, i thought of the word dry... but the way the words flow perfectly together completely contradicts that.
the words of one for his beloved? always a treat.
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perhaps because of the desert allusions and hopefully not the quality of the poem.
a bit desperate, i am certain. these quick, timed poems have a way of drawing outward the desires of the subconscious. and therein is where she lies.
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oh, definitely the desert allusions. the quality of the poem is never in question, hon.
i see. i'm going to have o try this, only maybe give myself a tad more time, and try it with prose? that'd be fun!
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yes, i have heard of five or ten minute prose drills. complete free writing exercises. they often help shake the rust off and engage the mind if you are feeling bored.
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hmm, i should try that sometime.
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Want and need...longing too intense...it can drive one to cry out.
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quite so, leonie, and often does.
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The desperation you convey here is absolutely beautiful.
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thank you, kira. i am glad it comes across as beautiful. that is very kind of you to say.
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