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plotqueen — Haiku No. 2
Published: 2010-07-01 14:41:50 +0000 UTC; Views: 256; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 1
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Description Touch burns like fire
You beneath, soft and supple
Mouth eager to kiss
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Comments: 9

cordria [2010-08-11 03:41:54 +0000 UTC]

...I can't critique haiku. I just can't. I love haiku.

It's a very 'you' poem, by the way. If I had to guess who wrote it, you'd be at the top of the list. Great job on the sensory details for such a short piece.

-Cori

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plotqueen In reply to cordria [2010-08-11 15:59:59 +0000 UTC]

ty! i have your critiques for the 3 oneshots still. i'll reply eventually. i just like keeping them there to read every week or so.

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cordria In reply to plotqueen [2010-08-11 18:36:05 +0000 UTC]

No hurries. Though why you'd like rereading them I don't get.

-Cori

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plotqueen In reply to cordria [2010-08-12 00:49:17 +0000 UTC]

cause everything i've written the last month and a half has been utter shit? so reading the good critiques makes me not feel as shitty. *sigh*

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cordria In reply to plotqueen [2010-08-12 01:15:43 +0000 UTC]

Aw... I'm sorry. I'm sure it hasn't been that bad!

-Cori

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plotqueen In reply to cordria [2010-08-12 04:40:39 +0000 UTC]

............i never thought i'd say this, but i wish i hadn't deleted it. i'd love to show it to you and prove you wrong.

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cordria In reply to plotqueen [2010-08-14 01:30:23 +0000 UTC]

I wish you hadn't deleted it too. I'd love to prove YOU wrong. There has to be something redeeming about it.

-Cori

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plotqueen In reply to cordria [2010-08-14 21:06:18 +0000 UTC]

it was writing. that is all. it was so damned cheesy and trite. eick.

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cordria In reply to plotqueen [2010-08-21 03:00:29 +0000 UTC]

I suppose that happens.

-Cori

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