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punkfairy101 — Loops of the Bloodied Rain~
Published: 2012-09-24 01:56:00 +0000 UTC; Views: 1249; Favourites: 45; Downloads: 10
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Loops of the Bloodied RainTears on paper staining red
Shots of guns that have now bled
Injured die leaving one to roam
Wishing to all leave for home
One by one they are picked off blind
Lurking in the shadows from behind
Screams for help have long been heard
Others forgetting what has occurred
The ticking clockwork hides some pain
The many loops of the bloodied rain
He lies lonely carrying the book
Fighting once more for those they took
Many have passed and memory fails
He hasn't won yet he prevails
His friends have passed many to count
The reddened numbers spread the amount
His smiles have been lost and greatly acted
Every bit of laughter now so sacred
Tears of sadness have dried out red
Sighting the friends that are now dead
A corpse of blood but not of hope
The final loop unable to cope
He hasn't lost though hasn't won
Can he redo what he has done?
This is my entry for my sempai little contest
It needed to be hetaoni related and of any media so i did poetry...
I don't have a set pattern to read it in or anything fancy like that
I just want it to rhyme since rhyming poetry is often my best ^^ This one kind of sucks though..
Hmm...
Oh well, more then likely it won't win but meh~ i don't care
So credits~
Poem is by me
Idea from Hetaoni
Programs~
Photoshop
OpenOffice
Brushes~
All of the flippin brushes go back to their owners...
So yup~ I think its pretty interesting but it doesn't scream out "HETAONI" right away no? I kinda influence the idea into the reader
Words like "one to roam" "book" "can he redo what he has done" are just some words i placed to kinda insist the ideaThankies for all who read~
Ciao~!
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Thankies so much :'D
(Also, I love your icon~! >W<)
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This doesn't suck. There are a few spots where trying to put in the rhyme threw off the flow, but otherwise its very well done.
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yeah, I wasn't really aiming for flow much in this one I think, though I'll defiantely keep that in mind
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ANOTHER ONE? Well, good luck to you. But be warned, I'm entering -san's contest too, so you better watch out
...
OH, BUG OFF, TROLLKASTEL!
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Yup~! XD I enjoy writing hetaoni poems XD and thankies~
Oh~ Good luck to you too~ ^^ I hope you win since my entry really sucks XD
XDDDD lol~! Creepy Trollkastel is creepy x3
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You're welcome I don't see why you think this is so bad though, I think it might actually have a shot at this thing. Ve~I also think this of my own entry but then again about 50% of it resulted from me messing around with the effects in Paint.net and then throwing in the ones I thought went well with the picture [link] XD
Yeah, I'm sorry, Trollkastel is not very creepy lolz
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its a natural habit of mine to think everything i make sucks *shrugs* ^^"
xD thats pretty much what i do on photoshop xD for my mmd pics lately i would pose and then use random photoshop brushes to see which fit best xD
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Well, I'd turn it into a self-deprecating joke lolz
Ah, so I'm not the only one now am I?
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XD Well here it is [link] And just out of curiosity, how do you get one of those little preview things for pictures to show up in the description? I'm serious, how do you do it?
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Like thumbnails of your art? I can give you a link to show you how since It's rather hard to explain. [link]
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It's not working DX
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hmmmm give me a sec, you said description right? Or are you meaning comments?
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