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ReshiDaVanci — Survivor: In The Land of Chunks Ch-2: First Dawn
Published: 2013-03-18 20:54:36 +0000 UTC; Views: 712; Favourites: 12; Downloads: 10
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Nothing starts until you take action. If you have time to worry than run.Sonic Next Gen
Second chapter! Go on!
Back: [link]
Next: Not ready yet.
Thanks for reading watchers! Sorry for taking so long!
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Comments: 46
YEEEEE~
Sooo excited to see where this goes from here!
This king is so not gonna give Sonic and easy time. That's so last year! Lol.
Ooohhh . . . I think I know what dis king is . . .
Great job! Loved it!
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You really liked it? I'm so glad you did! I thought I did really mediocre in terms of quality.
I also thought that the King doesn't looks like the way I wanted, like bipolar and some sort of a gentleman that is really easy to irritate.
Thank you so much!
What is this king? XD
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It was definitely a good read! All art is never truly done and perfect, but it was good!
Ahh, you wanted to interpret him as someone different? That's always frustrating.
You are so welcome!
You reaaaally wanna know? XD
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Thank you so much for the feedback!
Yeah, he sounded really different right?
x3
Yeah, why not? xD
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You're welcome~
What do you mean? Like, he changed halfway through?
Oookaaayyy . . .
endaman
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Huh? Wait, I thought you said (I forgot your exact words) that the way you saw the King's personallity different as how I wanted to write it. Now I am confused xD
Ding ding ding ding diiing! We got a winner! XD
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Okay, mayyybee I should have worded that differently. Whoopsies.
Yaaayy! Lol.
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It's really okay ^^
Hahaha yeah XD
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Ehehehe, that's good.
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finished it! it's very interesting when you get to it.
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Thanks ^^
Sorry to ask, but would you mind me what was your favorite part? I want to get better at the most intriguing parts of the story.
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That's ok. I really liked the Zombie fighting scene.
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Thanks a lot!
Sorry if I ask but can you tell me your favorite segment of the chapter? Because I want to extend these favorite parts!
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You're welcome!
I like parts where Sonic met the zombie and the creeper. They make chills down on my back!
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That's awesome! I'll make these parts even more scary in later chapter!
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Oh no, I can't wait the next chapter!
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My computer wont let me read 
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Try downloading it OR try updating your Adobe Reader
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Hehe thanks! Did ya like it? ^^
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Worth the wait, my friend ^.^ I was immersed the entire time. A great story indeed!
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Thanks a lot
Sorry if I ask but what was your favorite part?/What should I change from what I write? Do you like it that way or do you prefer it in another way?
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My favorite part was when you were describing Sonic's fear when he would look at the creeper and the zombie. The details that you portrayed helped me conjure up a picture of exactly what you wanted the reader to see. The details you used at those parts were very nicely done, and it even sparked some of my own fear! That's the kind of writing that's remembered!
What you should change, however, is the repetition of the phrase "minutes like hours". There are other ways of expressing excruciating lengths of time, I tend to switch my words up, use different vocabulary, or use different metaphors and similes.
I wouldn't change anything about your writing even if I could. You have quite the talent, all it takes is a little more practice and you'll have this mastered! I enjoyed the whole story so far and can't wait for more. Like you always say, keep on creating!
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I try to give more detailing in crucial parts of the story. Encounters like this one are a great example, since the story is mostly suspence, I kinda felt it was lacking on some stuff. I'm glad I managed to please your expectatives
It's kinda hard! xD Since English is not my mother language I find it incredibly hard to write stories, since many words means almost the same! And I don't have much of that knowlenge either xD But I try to not be that repetitive.
That last part made me smile ya know? x3
Well, practice its the key after all! I'll try my best! Chapter 3 is going to be a beast!
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English isn't your native language?
Well there's something I didn't know... XD
I'm glad I could be of help ^u^ And yes, Chapter 3 is going to be a beast!
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I'm latin american!
Well that is something you don't really know xD But I assure you that the next chapter will be full of action.
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lol, is this minecraft? the eye description and the cube ordeal is what really got me XD
this is well written. i like it. :3
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Yes! It's a crossover between Minecraft and Sonic xD Thanks!
Sorry if I ask but what was your favorite part?/What should I change from what I write? Do you like it that way or do you prefer it in another way?
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i liked the diary/ journal and how you described the area. i like how you write it, you really seem to know sonic's personality and what he would say.
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I try to describe everything as much as I can ^^
Well it's not too hard... Sometimes xD You just need some references and that's it!
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Thank you!
Sorry if I ask but what was your favorite part?/What should I change from what I write? Do you like it that way or do you prefer it in another way?
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To be honest, I only read like two pages before I got lazy
but I think it's really cool the way it is.
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Heck... I highly recomend you to read it completely, 11 pages take a lot of effort but if you don't want to that's fine ^^
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i'll try to read the rest tomorrow! ^^
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