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Description     Kevin and Buizel (Second edition)

Chapter 13: Renewal of life

    We headed towards the path in the woods; we were heading to Canalave city. The ports there were always beautiful, especially the large boat that carried me and my family to Kalos. It is a very beautiful and peaceful ship to be in; there are so many commodities as well. I'm more excited that I'm keeping my promise to Adam, that we would both go to Kalos, and now that I'm a Pokémon the time will soon come for me to finally talk to my best friend.

    Adam looked at me as we walked through the woods, he was still very uncomfortable, or that's what it seemed to be.

    "Kevin, are you sure?" I sighed and then looked at him with a smile, I nodded. "I'm just making sure. You know? I still can't believe you decided to become a Pokémon! And not only that, but to also become my Pokémon!" Adam said to me, I replied to him speaking in Pokémon, he just chucked. "This is gonna be a bother, I can't understand a word you are saying." I simply laughed, this is how Buizel must've felt this whole time.

    At one point we all stopped to rest, Adam had placed a mat on the grass for all of us to sit around, me and Buizel sat together by each other, he hugged me as much as he could while I was beside him.

    Buizel was speaking to me; he asked me questions and spoke happily. I unfortunately didn't understand a word yet; I shook my head and gave him a pat on the back.

    "Hey Buizel, don't worry, I'm going to understand you soon. I can't wait to speak to you; there is so much we gotta talk about!" As I said this, Buizel nodded in agreement and smiled. Adam came by and sat with all of us.

    "I bought some food from the store, let's eat everyone!" Everyone cheered as Adam announced this.

    Adam served Pokémon food for everyone; I was honestly hungry after a long walk although Adam gave me a sandwich. I didn't realize that I was honestly expecting Pokémon food to be served to me instead of what I used to eat.

    I ate just a bit of the sandwich, it was good, but how yummy and satisfying Pokémon food was, as I recalled from when me and Buizel got stuck in the same body, made me crave to eat Pokémon food instead of the sandwich that Adam had given me. I looked at Adam as I saw him confused, I pointed towards the Pokémon food the rest had and then I pointed in my mouth.

    "But Kevin, that food is for Pokémon!" I looked at him, at myself and then back towards him. "W-well, you are not originally a Pokémon though so-" Adam stopped speaking, he sighed and gave me a plate with Pokémon food. "I'm just not used to this at all Kevin, I knew you as a human being." Adam looked at all of us, we were all staring at him paying attention, and Adam realized this. "I guess that I got to learn to understand you as a Pokémon too, not just pay attention to Pokémon." Hearing this made me relieved, I ate my Pokémon food happily, to think that I didn't want to eat this in the past; I guess my taste buds must've changed as well.

    We had all finished eating and were just enjoying our little rest; we did have all the time in the world. Cain was relaxing and meditating on top of a rock, Marcus was running about, Grace was flying in the meantime, Buizel and I were just playing together, we were chasing around while dodging obstacles, I was precisely good at moving as swiftly as a Buizel could, but I was starting to get the hang of some of the tiny movements that helped with my balance.

    Adam came by, he was holding my journal on his hand with a pen, and maybe there was something important he wanted to ask. Adam kneeled and looked down on me.

    "Kevin, so what are we gonna do at Kalos? You know, aside from learning how to understand Pokémon." Adam asked, I could tell he didn't have a single clue on what to do next. I honestly had nothing planned, but then I remembered that Adam wanted to win a Pokémon league. I grabbed the journal and started writing, I gave him the paper and he read it.

    "We'll go and participate at the Pokémon league! Wasn't that what you wanted?" Adam's eyes widened, he seemed really happy. "Yeah! We should totally enter the Kalos league! I grabbed the journal again and wrote down something more, Adam read once again. "Cool! So you only need two more medals!" Adam shook his head and gave the journal back to me. "I have won absolutely no medals at Kalos!" I chuckled; I had a new gift planned.

    I went towards my guitar bag, and picked up a case, I handed it to Adam. Grabbing stuff with my mouth was very weird, but it was cool nonetheless. Adam opened the case I had given him and he saw the six badges I had won so far.

    "Oh dear, Kevin no! These are your badges! I can't take these!" I looked at Adam as I was thinking of a proper response, I wrote something down on the journal and made Adam read it again. "Well, I did win these medals, you are right. But I'm your Pokémon that helped you win these medals. These are yours." Adam looked confused, but then he smiled. "Heh-heh, this is so weird Kevin. But okay, I'll take'em." I smiled at him; he picked me up and looked at me. "Something tells me you want me to treat you more like a Pokémon and less the old Kevin I met." As I heard this, I shook my head up and down without a second thought. Adam sighed to himself. "This is still odd."

    Night came by quickly, Adam was practicing moves with the new Pokémon he had, and Cain was showing the moves he had to Adam. He showed how he punched and how he meditated, and then he focused his aura and showed him how he used aura sphere. Adam was impressed by all these abilities; I simply stared as they practiced.

    "Wow Lucario! You have some good abilities, although I think you could have a better punching ability or skill." Adam checked a book he had; he flipped the pages in search of something. "If I recall, I heard of a Pokémon ability that allowed you to get stronger with every punch." Adam pointed at the book, "Aha! Here it is! It's a TM." Adam closed the book. "With this we will be able to have you focus when the enemy is not close to you to empower your aura sphere and punch and get stronger when the opponent approaches. You'll always grow stronger in battle this way." It was a great tactic; I applauded at Adam for his great strategy. Adam looked at me and smiled. "Thanks Kevin! I told you that I really loved tactics, you can see why." I nodded.

    Adam then checked out on Marcus' skills, he noticed on the speed he had, mostly on how energetic he was. Adam thought it would be a good idea to give Marcus an ability that compensated his impressive speed. "Pikachu, you've grown ever so faster! I'm sure there are some good abilities you may learn." Marcus was happy; he jumped to hug his trainer. "I'm sure you must be very excited!" Marcus got down and ran towards where Cain was meditating, probably to tell him about everything.

    Adam then looked at Buizel and thought,”I wonder what kind of cool abilities you have." I had already told Adam that Buizel knew hyperbeam, I'm sure Adam was curious to see how Buizel used it. "I'd like to see you use hyperbeam, I wanna see how it looks like." Buizel nodded at him, I was just a bit concerned as hyperbeam takes a toll on Buizel at times. "Kevin told me that hyperbeam was a bit dangerous for you, I'll help you train hyperbeam so that you don't get tired right away after using it." I smiled as I reminded myself that Adam is there for us now and that he really cares.

    As Adam and Buizel practiced I went towards the edge of the lake we were at, it was already dark so we had set up a tent nearby. Grace was already sleeping, Cain and Marcus were talking with each other, in the meantime I just wanted to relax and look at the scenery. The lake was beautiful and the water was clear, I looked down at the water and saw myself, looking at my reflection reminded me of what I was now, but I hadn't seen myself as closely as I thought. I touched my cheeks with my paws, I smiled at myself, and I made all sorts of expressions. I closed my left eye, then my right one. I tilted my head as I kept staring at myself, all these things I did just to remind myself what I was now. I loved to see myself as a Pokémon now, the blue eyes I had since I was born were still with me.


    I could hear the sounds of many Pokémon at night speaking I could feel as if I was starting to understand certain words, although what I wanted to pay attention to was the beating of my heart once more. I closed my eyes and I felt the beats of my heart once I placed my paws on my chest and felt my blood flow within me, you might find it strange but I must explain, feeling my heart beat within the body of a Buizel, my body, was relaxing and also reassuring of the remembrance that I am now a Pokémon. I breathed deeply and let my lungs fill with air, I felt my chest lift and then breathed out.

    When I opened my eyes, I saw a bright ball of light approaching me, it was pink and it emitted such a relaxing sound, it came ever so closer and the light started to dissipate. I saw what appeared to be a very small Pokémon inside the ball. Looking at it closer I noticed it was a bubble.

    The Pokémon stared at me curiously, it giggled and then it came out from the bubble. It was a very small and light pink Pokémon, it had a very large alien-like tail and short paws. This Pokémon was levitating around me as it was smiling, after remembering the tales I knew exactly who this Pokémon was.

    "Mew!" The Pokémon greeted me, I simply smiled back. It was an honor to meet a legendary Pokémon.

    "M-Mew! What are you doing here?"

    "I'm happy!" Mew said, I realized that what Mew had said previously was "Hi" I could still only hear the Pokémon noises mostly.

    "Wow, I think I can understand the language now!"

    "Meeew mew!" I couldn't understand much, but it seemed happy that I did.

    "I think  I can understand part of it at least." As I said this, Mew came closer to me and it touched my head once. As Mew did this, I was suddenly confronted with the thousand of Pokémon talking rules. It was so simple to me now, the timing of what one says combined with the intention of the voice and using only four to five types of sounds allowed you to express yourself in endless ways. The eyes were also involved in communication, looking away while saying “hi” meant something completely different if you looked at the Pokémon or if you said this slightly slower or with another sound.

    "I'm sure you get it now!" Mew spun around playfully while giggling.

    "Yes! I can understand it now!"

    "And you can speak with us too!" Mew cheered to itself happily, he held my paws as we both levitated and twirled about. "It makes me so happy! Finally a human joins us all!" Mew and I landed on the ground again, Mew floated upwards and smiled. "Are you enjoying it? Isn't this so much fun?" It was hard not to smile at Mew, as it spoke on the voice turned out to resemble a feminine one, I'm not sure if legendary Pokémon had genders or not, but defining her as a she was almost unavoidable for me.

    "It's fun! I love being a Pokémon!"

    Cain and Marcus approached us as Mew was speaking to me. Cain's eyes widened as Marcus's smile could not be hidden. Cain approached quickly.

    "Mew! It's so nice to see you!" Cain said impressed. "I have so many questions!" Marcus hopped on Cain's shoulder and smiled at Mew.

    "Woow, I've never seen you before Mew! You are such a cool Pokémon and everything!" Marcus said as he then jumped down from Cain's shoulder. Mew smiled at us all. "So watcha doin here Mew?" Marcus asked.

    "I came to celebrate!" Mew said as she stretched her arms upwards and later spun around in circles. "It makes me so happy! This is the first human that chose to voluntarily become a Pokémon."

    My mind was starting to click now, everything I was starting to listen to stopped being Pokémon sounds, it was a growing feeling that I was starting to listen to voices now. It was almost the same thing I had felt when I was in Buizel's body, but now I can hear the emotion of their voices even better, I could also hear beyond this conversation. The woods themselves, the forest around me stopped being Pokémon noises and sounds, they grew into conversations. This felt exactly like going to Lumiose City at Kalos, there were thousands of crowds around me, the woods were not really as silent as we thought, the world was more alive than I had ever imagined.

    "Kevin?" Cain said as I snapped back, "can you understand us?"

    "Of course! And it's amazing, there are so many Pokémon all around the forest! It's like a big town!" I looked around yet not believing it. Cain looked at me.

    "And you wondered why I was looking for so many spots to meditate in the past, the place is hardly quiet!" Cain said to me, Mew quickly moved closer to me.

    "You see Kevin, most Pokémon are always helping each other around here, we are always all very close." Mew said to me, she stared happily. "Pokémon are all around us and we are all here to share our joy of living together! I'm glad a human is here today, I had thought none would ever want to become a Pokémon!" I was indeed happy, although.

    "Thank you so much Mew, but I have a question." Mew looked at me. "What human are we talking about?"

    "You of course silly." Mew said, I simply smirked.

    "But I'm not a human, I'm a Pokémon!" I looked at Mew sincerely. "A Pokémon at heart." I saw mew burst full of joy, she hugged me and twirled around while laughing.

    "This makes me so happy! You've found a Pokémon within you!"

    At the distance I saw Buizel, he looked very hopeful, I'm sure he wondered if I was able to understand other Pokémon now, when I saw him I couldn't contain my happiness. Finally after all these years I was going to be able to speak to Buizel myself. When Mew stopped hugging me I ran as quickly as I could towards Buizel, he of course did the same.

    The both of us hugged very tightly with each other, "Buizel, I can understand Pokémon now!" Buizel smiled back at me.

    "Kevin, finally!" I was lost for a bit as I heard his voice for the first time, it was one of those voices that you would hear in TV shows, confident and proud. "Is it true what you said? Do you consider yourself completely as a Pokémon now!?" Buizel looked at me with a smile.

    'We are both Pokémon, are we not?" I asked him, as soon as I responded he hugged me again.

    "You didn't have to do this you know, I would've been fine with you just understanding me." Buizel said as he looked at me again, I could notice his excitement, he really wanted me to talk to him as much as I did. "You didn't need to become a Pokémon just for me!"

    "It's fine, that way I can talk to you directly. And besides, I absolutely love being a Pokémon, once I was trapped in your body I realized how amazing it was." I explained, "In a way, you showed me how great the Pokémon world really is. And I can also hear it clearly now." I looked around, reminding myself of the voices in the forest.

    "I'm very happy! So happy that we can finally talk!" I could almost feel him cry out of sheer joy, he looked at me and then smiled. "My name is Corwyn!"

    "Corwyn!" I finally knew his name, my happiness was easily noticeable. "That name is cool! Kevin and Corwyn, best friends forever! It has a cool ring to it!"

    Corwyn looked at me and smiled, "Kevin, you have always been my only family." I smiled when he said that, I felt that he was family for me as well. "You are very important for me, and I need to ask you something very important now." Corwyn said, he looked a bit nervous. Cain and Marcus were both listening to the conversation just from a bit afar. It was strange, Marcus was now completely still paying close attention to all we said while Cain seemed excited as he anticipated the event unfold. It showed me how important this must be.

    "Bui- I mean Corwyn. What is so important," I really wanted to know, "What have you been trying to tell me all these years?" As I asked, Corwyn grabbed a hold of me and looked at me.

    "Kevin, I want us to be brothers!" I was completely taken away by this, Brothers... I never even thought of such a possibility. "Kevin I've always considered you to be my brother, whether you were a human or not, especially now that we are both Buizels we can definitely be great brothers together!" It's however strange, I never thought of this possibility, but why was it that I was actually expecting this?

    Buizel being my brother... When I was little I was normally alone and didn't have many friends to play with, I talked to George but we didn't go along as well as I did with Corwyn. He was always there for me at every instance, even in the bad moments he was. And in that night when we slept together in the sleeping bag, I really did feel that Corwyn was a part of my family. Does it really matter that we are not blood related? Of course it doesn't, Corwyn and I have always behaved like brothers, and I just didn't realize it until now.

    "Its like- We've always been brothers, I just didn't know that we were until you said so." I said slowly as I awoke from my epiphany.

    "Does that mean," Corwyn's eyes widened, and he was full of joy. "Does that mean that you'll be my brother?" I licked his forehead and then gave him a hug.

    "Corwyn, I've always been your brother, but now I am one hundred percent certain!"

    At that moment, I was reminded by all our travels, by the journeys we have had together. We have been through many barriers and many problems, but we always stuck together, I don't recall haven't seen Corwyn beside me for more than an hour ever since we met. We've fought so long to finally understand each other, we were brothers all this time. I started to feel my mind finally enter peace, I could be relaxed now knowing everything, that small reveal changed me forever and now I feel that I have always been a Pokémon myself ever since my best friend and I hugged together at that night and went to sleep. I didn't start to fully understand Pokémon after that, I was being one.

    Cain and Marcus were happy, they cheered that they finally knew my response on the matter. It must've been hard to keep this a secret from me when I could understand them, and then I saw Mew, she was happy to have witnessed this moment, she came closer to us and smiled.

    "This is the most joyful moment I've ever seen in my long life! Kevin renounced being a human to become Corwyn's little brother! This is truthfully a day of rejoice!"

    I looked back at Mew, "wait, little brother?" I asked Mew, she smiled at me while giggling.

    "Well yes! Corwyn is clearly older than you are!" Mew reaffirmed.

    "Wow, I really didn't know that!" I said to myself, Corwyn hugged me.

    "Yay! Little brother!" And here I was thinking I was going to be the big brother, I didn't mind.

    When Mew had left, Corwyn and I spoke all night, we talked about what he had said in the past too me when I couldn't understand him, we also talked about my music and how Buizel had inspired me. We talked of more mundane things like food, the world, other Pokémon. We spoke for hours and didn't realize how late it was.

    It was almost time to go to sleep, everyone was tired from today. Adam had set down sleeping bags for himself and me, he had put Cain and Marcus away at their pokeballs, but he let me and Corwyn out.

    "I'm not putting you two in pokeballs, mostly because I couldn't do that to Kevin, goodnight!" Adam said as he was sleeping. Corwyn and I had dragged the sleeping bag outside and out of the tent, the night was nice and the moon shone as brightly as it could. Corwyn was already inside the sleeping bag. We always went to sleeping hugging each other every night.

    I got inside with Corwyn and we hugged each other as we did every night.

    "I love you my dear brother" Corwyn said to me softly, I smiled and closed my eyes.

    "I love you too big brother."

    ...

    I had no idea what tomorrow was going to await for me, but it was exciting to wonder. Tomorrow I begin anew, I will renew my life!

    The journey might be only a bit more complicated now that I am not a human, learning to fully become a Pokémon might be a challenge, but with my older brother Corwyn by my side, I'm sure he will be able to guide me into really being a Pokémon in no time.

    My journey to understanding Corwyn was  not the end, this has only begun!

  To be continued...

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Author Notes

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Hopefully this end will be satisfactory for everyone. But wait, the story doesn't quite end there? I'mm not sure yet. But one thing is indeed for sure, Kevin's journey has just started!

I hope you enjoyed this story (also lol, last chapter is 13 LEL)
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Comments: 35

Trent2Luigi [2016-10-19 21:02:15 +0000 UTC]

This was the best story I've red in years. I know from the start that Kevin was that Buizel. I really liked it and I'm glad I red it. I might reread it, sometime.

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ScottFraser In reply to Trent2Luigi [2016-11-07 21:57:07 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad you liked this fanfic, this story was one of my first steps into being a storyteller.

I'm making more stories now that are not just fanfictions, one of them you can find here: www.starwarriorscomic.com/ Maybe you'll like it as well?

Thanks again for reading!

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Trent2Luigi In reply to ScottFraser [2016-11-07 22:14:51 +0000 UTC]

I suggest it to some friends. I truly wish I could have a friendship that strong.

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ScottFraser In reply to Trent2Luigi [2016-11-16 20:35:26 +0000 UTC]

One day you'll find a strong friend like that, it's all a matter of time.

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Trent2Luigi In reply to ScottFraser [2016-11-16 20:52:38 +0000 UTC]

Maybe... btw, I'm up to ch. 2 on that other story you told me about.

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ScottFraser In reply to Trent2Luigi [2016-12-29 22:34:52 +0000 UTC]

Awesome!

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TheKindredMasks [2016-07-20 09:40:26 +0000 UTC]

Debo admitir, no había leído algo tan corta venas en un buen rato. Amé la historia :3 recuerdo haberme sentido frustrado cuando apenas habías publicado el capítulo 3, y me quede "... ¿¡Y LUEGO!?" Tristemente no pude seguir el paso a la serie, y ahora la leí completa a las 4:30 de la mañana. Hermoso. De verdad, tu talento como escritor es algo que nosotros, los comunes, solo podemos aspirar a saborear. No puedo expresar lo mucho que la historia me volvió a envolver, como empecé a hacer teorías en lo que cargaba el siguiente capítulo (#MiInternetApesta ), ah... Un buen respiro de aire fresco en la literatura contemporánea. Me pregunto. ¿Debería de leer la siguiente ahora, o después de haber dormido?

P.D. El final estuvo a punto, excelente manera de cerrar la bella travesía.

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ScottFraser In reply to TheKindredMasks [2016-07-23 02:09:37 +0000 UTC]

Hola! Tu debes ser la persona que me pregunto acerca de la sequela en Twitter!

Me alegra mucho que te haya encantado mi historia, aunque lamentablemente (como creo que ya he dicho) pare la sequela por un momento (mas que nada porque quiero reevaluar la historia un poco mejor) Pero ahora estoy escribiendo un Webcomic al que le pongo aun mas trabajo para hacer una historia memorable.

www.starwarriorscomic.com/

Me encantaria saber de tu opinion ya que disfrutaste K&B.

Y si, el final es mi parte favorita de K&B porque da espacio para la imaginacion a pesar de ser el fin.

gracias por un gran comentario!

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TheKindredMasks In reply to ScottFraser [2016-07-23 03:37:53 +0000 UTC]

I'll reply in English right now, for the sake of easier communication in between us.
I've read the first chapter so far, and I must admit it is quite interesting! The way you explain phenomenon that happen around us (in this case, stars and black holes) makes me feel like it's some sort of ancient culture's vision of the universe. Well done! I'm certainly and undoubtedly hooked to the story. But alas, I can't ready too much in one day or I'll bottleneck.

One side note that I feel like I must implement is that the extra comics (such as the Christmas and cookie ones.) made me be rather confused for a moment or two before I realized they were just an addition because of a holiday or a friend, etc. I know not if it's possible, but it would be better (in my opinion) if they weren't in between the normal-timeline comics.

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ScottFraser In reply to TheKindredMasks [2016-07-23 03:48:21 +0000 UTC]

I could definitely put up a message before the comic saying that this is a guest comic or such. I'll keep that in mind.

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TheKindredMasks In reply to ScottFraser [2016-07-23 03:49:05 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, that really would be quite helpful for us, new readers of your comic

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Lazerbeam8876 [2014-06-19 02:22:17 +0000 UTC]

ahh man endings are always sad. whether it be nintendo collectings collecting tips 101 ending
or this story. they are always sad. but since i see a chance of there being more! you jusy earned a watch!

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FlashDrawingsGuy In reply to Lazerbeam8876 [2014-06-19 03:46:37 +0000 UTC]

give hug, now! D':

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Lazerbeam8876 In reply to FlashDrawingsGuy [2014-06-19 03:51:14 +0000 UTC]

*hugs*
you were right! that was best story

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FlashDrawingsGuy In reply to Lazerbeam8876 [2014-06-19 03:55:21 +0000 UTC]

*hug more* T~T
im going to end up crying all night , _ ,

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Lazerbeam8876 In reply to FlashDrawingsGuy [2014-06-19 03:58:17 +0000 UTC]

beacuse it ended? there was a hint at the end for another story. but even though i still dont like endings. sure for most things they have to happen but i still dont like them.

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ScottFraser In reply to Lazerbeam8876 [2014-06-19 03:38:19 +0000 UTC]

Im glad you enjoyed the story

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Lazerbeam8876 In reply to ScottFraser [2014-06-19 03:43:44 +0000 UTC]

im glad my freind on here showed me this! its soo awesome

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ScottFraser In reply to Lazerbeam8876 [2014-06-19 03:47:40 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad he showed it too you, its not a story that is very noticed by others so consider yourself lucky!

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Lazerbeam8876 In reply to ScottFraser [2014-06-19 03:50:46 +0000 UTC]

i most definitely will!

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TheRPMKid [2014-05-04 15:34:34 +0000 UTC]

This is such an awesome story. You could publish it if you wanted to, I bet. I also sure that you'll think of something to continue this, It's the same deal with me and my stories.

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ScottFraser In reply to TheRPMKid [2014-05-04 15:35:52 +0000 UTC]

Unfortunately I can't publish this, you got to remember it's copyrighted work.

As in continuing it, I already have an idea on where to start this off on the next part. I'm taking a break first though.

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TheRPMKid In reply to ScottFraser [2014-05-04 15:38:19 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, that's annoying (I'm writing an original story that I'll try to publish)

Good idea, I thought you would come up with something

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ScottFraser In reply to TheRPMKid [2014-05-04 16:00:51 +0000 UTC]

Im also making my original stuff to publish for the future.

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TheRPMKid In reply to ScottFraser [2014-05-04 22:43:42 +0000 UTC]

Awesome! I'll be looking for it!

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teysak [2014-05-03 20:09:41 +0000 UTC]

No he leído todo, pero ¿Al principio no estaba escrito en 3ª persona?

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ScottFraser In reply to teysak [2014-05-03 22:21:37 +0000 UTC]

exacto, pero hay un cambio de tercera a primera persona en la historia.

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teysak In reply to ScottFraser [2014-05-04 01:44:19 +0000 UTC]

No recuerdo si alguien me lo dijo, si lo escuché en alguno de los vídeos que vi o si lo leí en alguna parte, sólo repetiré la idea: "El cambio de narrador muchas veces muestra que el autor no tiene idea de lo que hace."
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Aunque recuerdo lo que me dijo una escritora en 2012, "El cambio de narrador confunde al lector y puede hacer perder interés."
No quiero ser pretencioso, sólo repito el mensaje que me transmitieron a mí en su momento.

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ScottFraser In reply to teysak [2014-05-04 01:56:08 +0000 UTC]

Interesante, porque uno de mis libros favoritos cambia de primera a tercera persona y de tercera persona a primera a casi todo momento y no molesta. Lo importante es hacer bien la transicion.

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teysak In reply to ScottFraser [2014-05-04 02:25:43 +0000 UTC]

No discrepo nada, sólo digo cosas de las que he sabido y creo que pueden ser de utilidad.

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corbynprower [2014-05-03 01:51:06 +0000 UTC]

it was very nice....Scott if imay ask how did oyu come up with buizel name?

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ScottFraser In reply to corbynprower [2014-05-03 02:06:13 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

I came up with the name finding name meanings www.meaning-of-names.com/searc… Corwyn stands for friend of the heart

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corbynprower In reply to ScottFraser [2014-05-03 02:35:50 +0000 UTC]

oh...heh it very close to my name surpriseingly

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ScottFraser In reply to corbynprower [2014-05-03 02:48:57 +0000 UTC]

its a good thing!

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corbynprower In reply to ScottFraser [2014-05-03 03:07:00 +0000 UTC]

it just effects me more  D:

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