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Published: 2008-01-08 06:59:37 +0000 UTC; Views: 5273; Favourites: 166; Downloads: 32
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If I allow my tongue totouch the top of my teeth
to the bottom to utter a
"I Love you"
tonight, does it mean I
can't say it again?
I bite my nails
as I recoil, remembering
the bad habit, barely making
progress in this patience
plaguing, somber, far from serene
nightfall dream.
12:31am,
two minutes since we last
said our good-byes,
good-nights, good-wishes of
sleepfully peaceful mind shows.
Feels like an eternity since
we last spoke, while Eternity
waits by the door,
readying to again make my heart
long so long for you.
~she has always been
so successful in her
endeavors~
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Comments: 105
reiinbow In reply to ??? [2008-04-24 22:11:13 +0000 UTC]
>.>
How come my poems never get into the newest category?
D8
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ScribbledNotes In reply to reiinbow [2008-04-25 04:08:47 +0000 UTC]
Ummm.... I'm not really sure..... *shrugs*
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schattenstimme In reply to ??? [2008-04-24 21:35:07 +0000 UTC]
concrats to the DD!
i really like your poem...
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ScribbledNotes In reply to schattenstimme [2008-05-03 01:46:01 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much.
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ScribbledNotes In reply to ReldaDark [2008-05-03 01:46:44 +0000 UTC]
THANK you! I love the title, too.
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OddtheMagnificent [2008-04-24 16:03:15 +0000 UTC]
this is really good..*faving* i like the full title the best. ^^
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ScribbledNotes In reply to OddtheMagnificent [2008-05-03 02:29:31 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much!
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OddtheMagnificent In reply to ScribbledNotes [2008-05-03 12:28:13 +0000 UTC]
you're welcome!
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Alannavich [2008-04-24 14:58:07 +0000 UTC]
I love the full title... and the first stanza (particularly because of the "allow my tongue to/touch the top of my teeth/to the bottom"). But I also love the whole damn thing. Congrats on a DD well-deserved!
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ScribbledNotes In reply to Alannavich [2008-05-03 02:29:57 +0000 UTC]
Thank you thank you. Glad you liked that line, too.
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a-weird0 [2008-04-24 14:50:15 +0000 UTC]
i hate goodbyes. it's a bad bad baad habit
i ur poem
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ScribbledNotes In reply to a-weird0 [2008-05-03 02:30:12 +0000 UTC]
It is, it is. And thank you! Glad you like it.
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ScribbledNotes In reply to NooneButMyself [2008-05-03 02:30:19 +0000 UTC]
Thank you thank you.
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qbeentraining In reply to ??? [2008-04-24 13:43:08 +0000 UTC]
This is really beautiful--I was surprised it was from a male's viewpoint (I checked your cool gallery) because I imagined a young, timid, insecure female expressing these feelings. I love it none the less....congrats on the DD!!!
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ScribbledNotes In reply to qbeentraining [2008-05-03 02:30:37 +0000 UTC]
I think that's a good thing, right? lol
Thank you.
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calthyechild In reply to ??? [2008-04-24 08:45:39 +0000 UTC]
I love reading the DD literature bits. They're always outstanding and facinating. I love the full title, really interesting. There's some nice descriptive imagery in here... feels like a warped love letter. Interesting.
I love this bit.
"plaguing, somber, far from serene
nightfall dream."
Mmm.
Congrats!
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ScribbledNotes In reply to calthyechild [2008-05-03 02:32:14 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much! And glad this met with your expectations.
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PaperPile In reply to ??? [2008-04-24 07:59:55 +0000 UTC]
i wish we stop measuring time ... i wish time to stop measuring our lives ...
and beautiful moment become eternal ...
but i wonder .. if we pause at one moment ... are we missing more beautiful moments to come?!
or one beautiful moments is enough to breed eternal moments ...
u've expressed abnormal human feelings abnormally ... definitely what you have is abnormal .. (:
i totally agree with the love letter issue above (;
congrats for the DD! (:
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ScribbledNotes In reply to PaperPile [2008-05-03 02:33:00 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much for the kind words!
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ThornyEnglishRose [2008-04-02 14:48:30 +0000 UTC]
I found this by typing 'nail biting' into the search for some dumb journal thing. I love it! Really great imagery, lovely feeling - I hope you won't mind if I feature it in my journal.
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ScribbledNotes In reply to ThornyEnglishRose [2008-04-03 02:47:20 +0000 UTC]
Yes, you can feature it! Glad you enjoyed the piece, too.
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ThornyEnglishRose In reply to ScribbledNotes [2008-04-24 10:48:14 +0000 UTC]
Congrats on the DD.
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bohemianpoets [2008-01-08 11:54:22 +0000 UTC]
its perfect,
i've always wished someone had written me a love letter, the ones i got were always childish or way over dramatic, i dont know, this poem just reminded me that i have always just wanted a love letter, that i could read over and over and over, etc .. and over again, till it wore old and the ink started to fade.
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ScribbledNotes In reply to bohemianpoets [2008-01-09 07:38:40 +0000 UTC]
Aww, so picture perfect. So glad you like this piece. The title is my fav part.
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bohemianpoets In reply to ScribbledNotes [2008-01-11 10:53:23 +0000 UTC]
your really should stop being so talented , no i take that back,..bring it on
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ScribbledNotes In reply to funky-banana-man [2008-01-09 07:39:27 +0000 UTC]
Thank you much, sir!
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funky-banana-man In reply to ScribbledNotes [2008-01-09 13:22:36 +0000 UTC]
sir? wow its a first time someone look at my silly avatar and treat me like sir..
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