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The trees bowed down and the wires mournedWhen the darkness lost its light
And the drums beat on as the clouds lay down
And the phantom things took flight
Our eardrums rang like silver bells
As the monsters held their breath
And with the light there was no light
But cold electric death
Their towers rose like grim defeat
In steel made of clouds
And silence marched to the beat of a heart
As night cast off its shrowd
Fire cracked the sky in half
And oh, it roared in pain
But shed away the evil things
In blood that fell like rain
All the earth is dying now
As all the earth's alive
As we sit inside our plastic cage
And pray that we survive
The hostage of a hostage
Of this suicidal day
As the sky glares down upon itself
And washes us away
Comments: 15
Alienstar [2004-09-19 03:18:32 +0000 UTC]
I loved it, really loved it, especially the title, fits so well and, this part:
"All the earth is dying now
As all the earth's alive"
is so much what I feel about storms....I loved it, really loved it.
My next fav
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shadowpuppet13 In reply to Alienstar [2004-09-19 16:25:51 +0000 UTC]
thanks! i appreciate it, and im glad you can actually relate!
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KrazyJellyBean [2004-09-10 19:21:36 +0000 UTC]
That was excellent. I only have a problem with the misspelling of "shroud"... I want to fave this otherwise!
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shadowpuppet13 In reply to KrazyJellyBean [2004-09-10 19:45:12 +0000 UTC]
oh...grr i hate that word it always looks misspelled and i neevr know how to spell it...meh oh well thanks for the comment!
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KrazyJellyBean In reply to shadowpuppet13 [2004-09-10 19:45:56 +0000 UTC]
Don't worry about it. Your writing is great.
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shadowpuppet13 In reply to blackrose762 [2004-08-30 17:24:57 +0000 UTC]
yay! thanks so much!!
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shadowpuppet13 In reply to ViolenceLover [2004-08-30 17:21:04 +0000 UTC]
thanks.
it was rainging like crazy when i wrote it and our power kept going out and i couldnt help but think "stina must just be happy as can be right now" lol
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deadrose828 [2004-08-30 02:16:36 +0000 UTC]
omigosh you have a book coming out?!!? O.O that's so awesome
that's really good didn't know it was possible to write something like that about a power outage hahaha
awesome
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shadowpuppet13 In reply to deadrose828 [2004-08-30 17:19:09 +0000 UTC]
well i wouldnt exactly say "coming out" more like on my computer begging me to finally print it out and try submitting it to some publisher. its just a collection of poetry, not really a book book.
and yah, haha, i get inspired by the weirdest things, i dont know why
thanks so much for the comment though!
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SilverFenris [2004-08-29 15:35:34 +0000 UTC]
Wow. Gods! How can you write so wonderful like that! So many lines... were just beautiful! I mean... Really now! When's your book comming out? I am so buying a zillon copys and SO wany your autograph!!!
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shadowpuppet13 In reply to SilverFenris [2004-08-29 21:19:56 +0000 UTC]
haha cool! i dunno, havent got it ready for sending to publisher people yet, but when i do ill let you know!
thanks so much for the comment and the fav!!!
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