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Published: 2005-03-28 03:58:51 +0000 UTC; Views: 118; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 7
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Description space b a r.

Isn't it strange that a period(.) can make a sentence seem so
final.

   spacebar.

punctuation.
what a mechanical society.
form
is
soimportant.

it must flow
p   erf  

   e

ctly(period)

Period. The end.      (spacebar)

worn out.
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Comments: 12

dumbassNUMBER4 [2005-07-29 19:47:21 +0000 UTC]

awesome! i can really see how you can get the word stuck in your head. you kinda break the word down, and then notice the punctuation. Awesome! This is a great piece!

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aridia [2005-07-29 17:13:40 +0000 UTC]

Nice style. Simplistic and sweet. I like the idea behind it, and the execution is quite wonderful. I'm enjoying your work.

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simplytears In reply to aridia [2005-07-29 19:08:32 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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Chaos-Angel-of-Fire [2005-04-20 00:37:29 +0000 UTC]

great suzi.. the style made me laugh...hehe... really koo prose

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quintessa27 [2005-04-13 16:17:16 +0000 UTC]

sweet--honestly, when i first read that you wrote a poem about the word "spacebar" i didn't have high hopes, but you're so damn creative you make even that work. nice job--it's fun to read.

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simplytears In reply to quintessa27 [2005-04-13 18:44:59 +0000 UTC]

thank you!

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purplefeelings [2005-04-01 05:37:16 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for the poem. I'm using it for an english journal on poetry, if you don't mind. Not copying but talking about and working with because there is a lot there. I like the line what a mechanical society. because your saying this in a poem, where nothing is really wrong, ever. and poetry and english can go very far from mechanical.

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simplytears In reply to purplefeelings [2005-04-13 18:42:55 +0000 UTC]

YAY!!! I feel like a celebrity. I'm glad you found a good use for my poetry!

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metacognition [2005-03-31 14:33:00 +0000 UTC]

I like it. I like all of it. The idea, the interpretation of it, plus its a fun poem and it makes me smile. so creative!

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abitalarming [2005-03-28 16:20:30 +0000 UTC]

Seems like everyone is on an e.e. cummings kick these days..must be that time of year. Insteresting take, and I know what you mean about a word getting stuck in your head, luckily yours resulted in such a nice, refreshing poem!

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Lecco [2005-03-28 11:28:43 +0000 UTC]

Reads like E.E. Cummings.

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LovelyJadedLoner [2005-03-28 06:51:15 +0000 UTC]

Okay, so the title definitely made me smile and is what drew me into reading this poem.

I really enjoy how you play around with the spacebar all throughout the piece, either by spacing perfectly, too much, or too little. It give this piece that extra little something.

It's cute. Nicely done.

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