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.Gears whirrr to create & grind,
sheets of steel reflecting light:
cylindrical pulses in tune
with breathing
red glued emotion. burnt edges
of hope. letters - masked, opened
bursting with thought streams.
prismal gaze. glaze.
inspired.
metallic fingers grasp feelings
then release. streaming, always.
elemental soul
with rustproof passion.
/skyOrange. ArtBot/
12.2001
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rustproof passion.
that was probably my favorite description throughout the work.
you have a gift in presenting such vivid imagery in literature, i love it. i can honestly say i haven't seen that before in such short poems. your words are vibrant and colorful.
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I can't believe no one commented on the unique (tabbed-over) structure! ...Or maybe they did and I just didn't catch it.
Regardless, it's a treat to leave for as long as I have and come back and be able to reimmerse myself in wonderful poetry and people.
I LOVE the last stanza! I can see it happening in beautiful slow-motion, a la Princess Mononoke or another artfully crafted anime. Great!
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.:: ne lump or two, indeed.::.
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There are some really great lines in this poem that stand out among the rest:
red glued emotion. burnt edges
with rustproof passion.
It reminds me of a novel by Tanity Lee called "Silver Metal Lover" for perhaps obvious reasons. Great imagery and composition.
+faves
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~ dilly
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This reminds me of pictures by naomi. The quiet longing, the polished surrealism. And here, again, brevity is very apt.
~aesta
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Wonderful poem...it seems to have an air of euphoric confusion, and the way you have put this together hits me with a smile, and brings me a feeling of undescribable joy. Perhaps it was the nature of peace that I get from this, or simply the colors you brushed through your words.
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castaway and chaosboy:
the poem, as the description says is about Argylekid and his artisitic style/technique. He has represented himself as a robot in most of his works, which made me call him ArtBot - a robot designed to create art.
In the first and last stanza, i, as an observer, am describing what he is doing. the middle stanza is more of a reflection of his techinique. If you'd view the links i gave in the description, you'd notice that he uses mixed media - glue, paint, torn letters, etc. - in expressing emotions such as hope and inspiration.
i hope this helped in understanding and appreciating the poem.
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Well, I have to admit... I'm not too in tune with most of your other poetry but this one I like. Your style of writing is quite different from mine and quite interesting
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Im with John (castaway) on this. Im not exactly sure what your saying, although I do get the broad picture. Its a fantastically well written poem. Flows very crisply although it would be very easy to make something like this choppy. The words paint a great image too.
Im just tryin to figure out what that is
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You have an awesome talent for flow, not to mention imagery. "rustproof passion" - great image. I'm just trying to interpret this and can't say that I'm doing a good job of it. I'd love to find out exactly what you were trying to say. It seems to be a more widespread commentary on life as a whole than something terribly specific. But then again, perhaps you're talking about a speck of dust on the fingernail of the index finger of your right hand - who knows. But either way, it's a beautiful poem.
Nice work
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Oh I love the metaphorical aspects of this, and the structure, lovely...
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-All that we see or seem, Is but a dream within a dream.
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i love it...the imagery is great and the flow of emotions is fantastic. you have a great poetic mind. and keep writing
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Interesting images...can't say that I exactly understand them...but they work nicely. Very vivid.
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~MD~ https://manadrake.deviantart.com/
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Sweet :j
The imagery rocks.. and the shape of the thing severely hit; freakin' incredible :j Love the way it's kinda machinery-like too.. all straight'n'structured.. mebbe I'm readin' too much into it ;j Meh..
Ooh and I reeeeeeally really really like the first line.. it says so much.. and it sez 'whirrr'! Rockin' ;P
*whirr*
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I never fail to feel foolish commenting on something with more than 5 comments.... Like I'm adding to the hordes. Oh well.
This is really cool, the defined imagery, rhythm and feeling to it all combine really well. It is a strange machine indeed that can turn out what machines were never created to do. How does it come about that such a creature exists, a machine (the epitome of logic) creating art (the epitome of illogic and feeling)?
I am intrigued.
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Push the Envelope. Watch it bend.
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Vivid, strong imagery. I was blown away by how you made an inorganic, mechanical thing pulse with poetic lifeblood.
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O friend, understand: the body
is like the ocean,
rich with hidden treasures.
Open your innermost chamber and light its lamp.
-Mirabai
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Very interesting style. Imaginative wording with a raw feel. I love the line "Burnt edges of hope"
It just stuck with me.
Nice work.
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Dreaming as the summer dies
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a very interesting tribute to an artist that i was not familiar with until now! and of course, very cool poetry ruth. haha... always reaching out to push the nearly flexible boundary of limitations...
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for mari:
https://www.deviantart.com/deviation.php? id=157027
-flow-
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I see it because I possess my very own argyle manufactured bot, Mechanical Joy so as I read your wonderful poem I imagined me, as MJoy, moving and thinking within the wonderful imagination of its creator. The red glued emotion and prismal gaze, glaze, was perfect and so Ruth "inspired." I love it.
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J Y
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a lovely poem.
absolutely love the way your poem in a way describes his artwork, you are amazing ruthy !
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. rajiv .
. kwan Studios India .
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ndi ako marunong magcomment ng poem
pero alam ko galing ng pagkagawa hehehe... dapat turuan mo si baby Angel ng leet skills na 'to ha.
bwek bwek bwek...
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http://pixelcatalyst.plastiqueweb.com
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I'm kind of creeped out that kodama can picture me typing...but regardless...
I was taken aback when you first sent this to me (art and all :]) and am once again. Beautiful words that I could only hope to emulate. Thank you once again Ruth.
I don't think people are reading the description. rofl
Maraming salamat Ruth.
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Argylekid
[Our scars make us who we are]
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Wonderful job I can just picture the artbot sitting there with his metallic brain ticking out words ^^
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Very vibrant images of artbot at work. Impressive!
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Ruth, awesome poem, really discriptive, it paints a picture in my mind, i like the
then release. streaming, always.
elemental soul
with rustproof passion
part the best, great job!
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terrific imagery, i love the way you used a machine to express pure emotion..fantastic
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:endogen:
:: Save Me From This Place ::
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i love the wording you used!
i like the train of thought style.
you made it evocative and simple ...
very beautiful!
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"...cylindrical pulses in tune
with breathing ..."
"..metallic fingers grasp feelings .."
sorry for dissecting the poem heheh. i just love those lines
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FLUX 2
http://flux.usednukes.com
nakatira sa
http://serp.port5.com
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awesome. i miss brett! You've captured his mechanical pulse well, and dropped in your own soft, soulful words to round it out. beautifully distilled words for a worthy recipient. in his style: (Rock!)
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lol, a beautifully inspired piece written by one artist to another. This is brilliant, Ruth Such an image of the Artbot producing his fantastic creations.
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.:they call me woozie:.
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Love it.
Powerful imagery, descriptive.
well done.
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i can see it, but like some dim image in the recesses of my mind. it's unclear, and yet i have this picture of it all the same....maybe it's the sounds that i get too....there is some sort of feeling that i get ....well written...
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.:spunj13:.
editor, asylumpublications http://ionscribe.rmes.andrews.edu/~cmalo ney
toaa: https://www.deviantart.com/packs/details. php?id=1643
.: abduct a deviant?
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