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i am i.thoughts
and pasts
are etched within the
Who.
what i know,
what i believe
can go on
and on
and on
and on
then cease
completely.
eye
inside the i.
understanding binds the will,
weakens reason.
exits end.
end exists.
/exi(s)t,ruth.jacob,aug4'01/
.a.response.to.plastik's.poetry.
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Comments: 23
Love this.
Broken, short sentences.
Leaves a lot more for feeling to make up rather than describing an image in intricate detail which can get boring to read.
Really really like this ^_^
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Very nice. It's Cartesian on the surface, yet a whole lot more. Understanding of one's identity and existence. Very good topic for poetry, and very well done here. I love your analogies. Very intriguing.. Very good.
i m not here. this isn t happening
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err.. *consciousness, oops
--The age that is honorable
Comes not with the passing of time--
-- Kodama
--
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Oooh! I love philosophical ponderings/questionings. An intricate stream of conscious of words building upon words. Very well done
--The age that is honorable
Comes not with the passing of time--
-- Kodama
--
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i see arrogance and humility. alongside the remains of illusioned truths. under a very entertaining poem.
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and i am without words to describe how much i have enjoyed reading your poem. farewell, and greatly written.
Deviant[Cype]
Im just different.
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I took this kind of satirically if you want to know the truth..Sort of to the effect that everything that we are is dictated by others..
"thoughts
and pasts
are etched within the
Who."
-When I read that section I just kept thinking of all the different "people" I've been depending on who I was hanging out with at the time..
"what i know,
what i believe
can go on
and on
and on
and on
then cease"
-Again I thought...well what makes what you know and believe "cease"..In my case its always been someone that changes my view of life..
"understanding binds the will,
weakens reason."
-much like my quote below.."When everyone is thinking alike few are thinking much at all."
Anyway, sorry for how long this is..but I just picked up on something else than what I felt most of the people that left comments did....I loved the poem though, it opened a few doors I'd rather remain closed..but thats what it should do.
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~MD~
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When all think alike, few are thinking much at all. - Walter Lippman
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Just a beautiful piece, so profound, just like the title, it's truly amazing
I never really looked upon your poetry, but I'm truly impressed
[.2:MO]
///G:REALITY
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i really like this. very introspective. nice use of word play. love the last couplet!
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you are indeed capable of forming words that reflect something beyond us. i will have to look into more of your stuff before i get too deep or thoughtful
-dspayre-
uh oh..
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very nice
GFXDรจmn :- Bringing Reality To Your Worst Nightmares.....
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Amazing emotionally abstract symmetries, if there can be such a thing. It pulls in one direction and then another, almost two simple, black and white stories which cooperate seamlessly throughout the piece until its end, where word choice, combined with alliterative composition, bring the message to a provocative halt and closure.
I am truly impressed with this work; a firm believer in simplicity as the most pure and truthful method of emotional delivery,
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it manages to be discreet, yet it has a powerful meaning... beautiful
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I had to read it a few times. Intruiging.
- u - b - u -
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For some reason I feel it's alot more abstract than your previous poems..and I really like that. It's short, yet very powerful.
"thoughts
and pasts
are etched within the
Who."
I especially loved that little part.
Make.shift*
http://www.makeshift.ca
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i am this poem so therefor i exist.
this wraps me in a being other than that i thought was my own.
a dive into the philosophical! great submission - i love it!
- get deviot http://www.epic7.com
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I would love to just sit with you, over a cup of coffee (and for me a cigarette) and just talk. I find you to be incredibly fascinating and intelligent. I love your poetry. You are one of the few people I know who can say a lifetime in so few words. *hugs*
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easy to exist in this poem
for a little while.
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you have such a definitive style ruth. your fans are in awe. stop being so bright for 2 seconds. you're blinding us all.
sheesh!
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hmmm...
it's useless... we're all just inside the matrix, pulled into your eyes to blind you from the truth.
deep poem
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"eye
inside the i."
You always manage to find those small broken sentences that drills a hole through my mind and lets my heart in.
Your work is amazing Ruth as are you.
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understanding binds the will,
weakens reason.
Yes,
exits end.
end exists.
There is a place which does not speak.
Not much, not often, and poetry is written there...this poem was written there, "w e d d e d World" by ramdom was written there...many others
ah, see...this is the way it is. it's dull, routine, comfortable in acceptance, nerve wracking and necessary
but
it's not so bad
I did dream once, I still dream
this is reality
it's not so bad
is it?
j♥y
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muh huh huh I get first crack at your poem ruth but this is quite intriguing...definition of one's self and validation seem important to many a person.....reasoning that life and thought intertwined are finite...though I think ultimate understanding is undesirable....if you truly knew yourself, would you care to keep on living? well....that's my interpretation anyways....great work ruth...and I'm off to check plastik's poem
Argylekid
[Our scars make us who we are]
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