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Published: 2002-01-31 16:35:30 +0000 UTC; Views: 4544; Favourites: 32; Downloads: 583
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~inhale.
understand
how it is to be
undone.
seek, Phoenix,
your
dimensional i.
transcend now.
exist in a new realm.
You, Phoenix..
still.
You burn bright,
hues ever-changing.
reflect radiant light.
fill.
and i,
embraced by your wings,
warm myself
and exhale.
~
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Suffocating , simply making itself heard , as though whispered .
Like the felling of its circle-like form , beginning and ending with the elements of breath.
great pic too .The world out there is passing out messages ,even though they are written on a sign.
Nice to have people capture them.
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Brilliant, fluid, colorful meaningful poem that says so much...I like the flow of it.
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I can't decide what kicks more ass ... the photo or the poem.
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i like the breaks
the negative space
and i like the last stanza.
i can see the dd
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Sorry but I find it plain, boring and pointless, both the picture and the poem.
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I did not know Mari, but I am getting to know her through others and how they remember her and cherish her. This poem is very lovely for it begins with a meditative breath. Inhale in....what she is and what she will always be in loving memory. Then the exhale out...the breath that passes on her memory, the breath that orates the story of who she was, and thus passes on her "living" to another. Every word is lovingly crafted such that I can feel the imprint she left upon you.
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I agree with elphabastevens , I wish so much it was a print!!!!!
That would be such a fantastic treat!!!!!
Excellent work.
Perfect.
Everything works great there.
Colours.
Shapes.
textures.
Light.
The feel of it.
Wonderful
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I so very much wish this was a print. I would love to put it on the wall I face when I meditate, to remind me that each day has been a step of progress and movement. Delicately done, with an unspeakably masterful deftness. Superb!
Congratulations on your DD!
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I love it, the blue, red and yellow works really well.
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definitely enigmatic..and i love it. it means something to me, and thus i shall +fav it ^^
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so deep in a way, yet still has the touch to reality
through fantasy.. I'm impressed.
keep up the good work.
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yes, this hit the mark ruth. excellent poem and about time for a dd.
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It's still as good when I read it again after all this time.
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seek, Phoenix,
your
dimensional i.
right there.....
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Beautiful
I think using 'phoenix' is this one is very apt...rising from the ashes and burning brightly and stronger than before...
And i second what rajivmathur said...it's hot and fiery but it extends not the heat of anger but the warmth of friendship...and love...
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like a series of quick gasps this doesn't settle down until the very last line delivering relief at last. very classy. congrats on the daily feature - long overdue!
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the first half doesn't seem to fit the second half.
almost feels like each line was written by someone else and put together, real start/stop kind of jerky.
but the second half has a nice attachment to the theme, good flow.
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Muchly deserved DD. I thank you for your existence... and your thoughts and poetry and spiffiness that is you.
I love the simplicity... the meaning. It's hard to avoid redundant cheese this late at night though... my enjoyment is sincere, I assure you.
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Like the poem I am lifted to a higher existence. Thank you
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Beautifully and simplisticly written. I love it.
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interesting write....i enjoy poems written in this style in which you have employed here.....simple words that weave an intricate tale or message....i love this piece.....
thanks for sharing.
ViNce
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ooh! mysterious and intriging, i love your choice of words
there's something quite raw and emotive about this
lovely poem, with a very effective ending
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Well... this really is a wonderful poem..... as everyone has said before me it deserves all the praise
Great job !!
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I see that you're the master of the ambiguous...but that's not a crticism. Within your ambiguity is a great deal of insight...I think (unless you're good at faking it....which I don't think is the case..hehe=0) Anyway, again, nice poem.
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Beautiful. Simply beautiful. I loved the lines:
"You burn bright,
hues ever-changing.
reflect radiant light.
fill."
Excellent!
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Who is it that says most? Which can say more than this rich praise, that you alone are you?
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That's pretty sweet. I'm just a little confsued where that is in lake tahoe. I guess If I lowered my elevation from my average 30' off the ground when hitting those wonderful tables and spines themthere resorts (SUGAR BOWL, TAHOE'S BEST KEPT SECRET) I might see there's an "End" in tahoe.
Poem's awesome. But next time I take it, that yer in Tahoe. Wear a coat. No wonder yer freezing lol. And take that lust thrush of powder in the California wonderland that is TAHOE!
poxet industriesΒ©
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i too, dont know mari but she must have been a very wonderful person to be written about so full of love as you have. beautiful poem
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5t3iggy
.:I decided i want you now i know...i need:.
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I am hopelessly external to this beautiful work... i came to DA too late to know its subject.
But it throws off enough poetic and spiritual warmth to touch me anyway where I am standing, outside of its heart of time and place. Thank you.
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O friend, understand: the body
is like the ocean,
rich with hidden treasures.
Open your innermost chamber and light its lamp.
-Mirabai
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Beautiful in its' simplicity and style. So few words, so full of warm
emotion. Love the use of the phoenix image and this...
"seek, Phoenix,
your
dimensional i."
...Just keeps rolling around in my head.
Great poem!!
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Dreaming as the summer dies
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hi ruth,
lovely,, thats all i can say, u get superb coments..keep it come, keep in touch
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It's almost undescribable, that's how beautiful it is. It's transcendental, you have an amazing work here
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The images are so simple but unbelievebly apt.. incredible stuff..
Pach
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Great words and great use of them in my mind!
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that is so good!! I can easily see the pattern but still not.. very well written, i love it!!
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I see some meaning somewhere in the end of the poem about two people looking after each other, or something.. The beginning of the poem just feels like some buzz/"poetic" words thrown together. Maybe there's some meaning, but I don't follow it. I didn't particularily care for the imagery, words like "hues" and "radiant" don't invoke much of anything.
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***sigh***
cannot comment on this except to say
-thanks-
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for mari:
https://www.deviantart.com/deviation.php? id=157027
-flow-
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wonderful, magical use of words. A truely special poem
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Thanks Ruth.
The simple, yet powerful beauty of Mari's being resonates in your poetry.
I'm still having a hard time getting back into "normal" life, probably because life will never be normal anymore. Your poetry, and all other expression that evokes memory of Mari helps a lot in healing me from the pain of losing her.
Take care.
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if i had the body of an underwear model, then i would constantly find or create opportunities to reveal it at all times
that is probably why God made sure i did not get one
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Your words spill forth with a gentle fall, Ruth, and your soul reminds me that of a rainbow that colours a gloomy day. *hug*
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.:they call me woozie:.
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It takes my breathe away and leaves me still,
peaceful, unknowing and uncaring of the need for oxygen.
Thank you for this beautiful expression.
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i came back to say that i love this poem
FLUX 2
http://flux.usednukes.com
nakatira sa
http://serp.port5.com
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As Jay said.
This needs no critique, and deserves nothing less than silence.
: :
http://euphoria.idleplay.net
Come visit me.
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