HOME | DD
SnoByrd — Oath to Three pilot 2
#oc #comic #comics #comicstrip
Published: 2018-02-03 17:11:34 +0000 UTC; Views: 554; Favourites: 8; Downloads: 0
Redirect to original
Description
Page two of my comic. This is only a sort of look into what the basic tone that I want my comic to have. The full story is still being made. I received a lot of awesome feedback on my last page but I'm not going to incorporate it all at the same time. I'm going to try to work on it bit by bit. This time around, I worked more on anatomy and next time around, I'll try to work on the paneling and layout which might be a trainwreck. Thanks again for the advice, guys!Previous: yodawgyoutalkin2me.deviantart.…
Next: yodawgyoutalkin2me.deviantart.…
Related content
Comments: 2
Greetings! I´m from
First off, this page looks really nice! I like that you coloured the whole page, it makes the page look lively and more interesting to look at! The colouring is very nice too, it´s simple and not overdone! It really adds to the action scene. The structure of the page is very nice and interesting too, it puts emphasis on the action scene which is very nice!
The expressions are well chosen, they go well with the fighting poses.
Now something I would suggest you to change is the perspective. Currently, it just feels like I´m standing behind the one guy and like I watch the fight by looking over his shoulder. I´d suggest to also show the other person´s expressions or try some profiles to add a little more diversity to the fighting scene. Another thing that I noticed is that the poses look a little stiff. In this case, I´d suggest studying some action poses to make the poses and movement seem more dynamic and realistic.
But all in all, this is a very nice page so far and you did very well!
👍: 0 ⏩: 1
Thanks! I see where you're coming from. I'll try to apply your feedback to the next page.
👍: 0 ⏩: 0