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SoImStillUnsureA Promise She Made With Death
Published: 2010-10-24 18:08:39 +0000 UTC; Views: 12528; Favourites: 544; Downloads: 144
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Description She was conceived on the edge of a mirror,
lined with pretty white lace,
that burned the inside of her parents' nostrils.

She was born with a hole in her heart,
that the doctor's never noticed,
and no one bothered to fill.

She met Death on the playground,
when kindergarten was bending her bones.
Enticed by the glinting of his scythe,
as it preyed on a malformed baby rabbit.
She made a pinky promise with him,
swearing that she'd never forget his face.

He came and went,
swayed by corpse breaths
and east-coast winds,
but always leaving her alone.

He showed her how to hurt,
in the worst kind of way.
And each time,
he paid her a visit,
he'd take someone back with him.

She often asked where he would go,
when his curled claws would drag her mother,
her father,
her sister,
and every love she'd ever fallen for,
into the darkness that he crawled from.

All he'd say,
was that she'd find them again someday,
and that he would take her to them, personally.

But as February,
of her fourteenth year,
threatened to consume her whole,
burying her in the snowdrifts and icy winds
of its cavernous belly,
she saw him for the last time.

Without a second glance at her,
he swept her ink colored rabbit
into the crook of his scythe,
and turned his back on her.

For six years,
she waited,
for the promise he'd made.
To see all the ones she'd lost
to his bony grasp.

She had no friends,
no lovers,
no kin,
no pets,
only waiting,
alone,
for the day that he'd take her home.

As she withered into her twenties,
back breaking,
and hair graying,
not from age,
but from the weight of the world,
she began to lose hope.

He was all she'd ever known,
and now,
even he had left her alone.

She wept for him to take her,
as she slept in alleyways,
stained with his fingerprints.

She begged for him to find her,
as she fell on the steps of a church,
whose doors she couldn't approach.

She whimpered for him to save her,
as she stumbled,
heart cold,
and stomach hot,
to the edge of her iron-wrought balcony.

As the ice,
and the concrete,
gathered her into their embrace,
finally,
he came for her.

A twisted smile,
on torn and rotted lips,
and his scythe lined with frost,
and her blood.
He gathered her into his arms,
whispering that all was well,
as his cloak pulled darkness down to close her eyes.
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Comments: 285

peacoc-feathers In reply to ??? [2010-10-25 02:46:54 +0000 UTC]

welcome

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rocknrollmanican In reply to ??? [2010-10-24 23:08:56 +0000 UTC]

this is very well done shea!! good job on it.<3 i can see you as a writer in the future for sure.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to rocknrollmanican [2010-10-25 00:32:12 +0000 UTC]

Yayay...Thanks!

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rocknrollmanican In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-10-26 23:52:35 +0000 UTC]

no problem<3

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battlemage69 In reply to ??? [2010-10-24 22:35:48 +0000 UTC]

AHH!
oh, Grim isn't it?

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to battlemage69 [2010-10-24 22:44:02 +0000 UTC]

It is rather grim.

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sade132 In reply to ??? [2010-10-24 22:31:52 +0000 UTC]

wow, u are talented

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to sade132 [2010-10-24 22:43:49 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much.

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sade132 In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-10-25 00:08:53 +0000 UTC]

ur welcome

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ocean-whispers In reply to ??? [2010-10-24 21:55:53 +0000 UTC]

Your writing is always so amazing. Good job,
I love that I had to think a bit about this one.
It wasn't out plain and clear for me to understand.

Write some more!

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to ocean-whispers [2010-10-25 03:21:57 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it.

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Delicatesilver In reply to ??? [2010-10-24 21:55:42 +0000 UTC]

Hey, it's you again with another good poem! (You probably don't remember me, but I remember your poetry!) I should just watch you. :-D
Anyway, the poem was amazing, beautiful, the words just led me in. I found myself reading it once and then coming back to read it again. It was just altogether an awesome read.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Delicatesilver [2010-10-25 03:31:51 +0000 UTC]

Aw, thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

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Vadin-Blackwind In reply to ??? [2010-10-24 21:01:25 +0000 UTC]

THIS IS AMAZEING! I love it...if you couldnt tell...

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Vadin-Blackwind [2010-10-24 21:02:35 +0000 UTC]

Aw, thanks!

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Still-Dreams In reply to ??? [2010-10-24 19:14:18 +0000 UTC]

I really enjoyed it, you took a topic that is used often- Death
and made it into something unique.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to Still-Dreams [2010-10-24 19:26:06 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much.

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Still-Dreams In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-10-24 19:32:38 +0000 UTC]

No problem ^^

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IrisxFlyerxFreedom In reply to ??? [2010-10-24 19:11:42 +0000 UTC]

AMAZING

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to IrisxFlyerxFreedom [2010-10-24 19:12:01 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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kacilyn17 In reply to ??? [2010-10-24 18:54:37 +0000 UTC]

cool...very dark and mysterious...but quite depressing...

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to kacilyn17 [2010-10-24 18:56:42 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad you enjoyed it...but sorry for the depressing element.

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kacilyn17 In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-10-24 20:37:43 +0000 UTC]

sometimes it's the missing link b/w good and great. i would know...

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BlackKnight1357908 In reply to ??? [2010-10-24 18:34:04 +0000 UTC]

nice! i loved it! though i didnt get the bunny part....still liked it though!

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to BlackKnight1357908 [2010-10-24 18:44:16 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much.

Would you like me to explain that part? Or is better left unknown?

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BlackKnight1357908 In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-10-24 18:45:59 +0000 UTC]

hehe i think i'll figure it myself if i can

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to BlackKnight1357908 [2010-10-24 18:50:30 +0000 UTC]

Okiie

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bunnyness77 In reply to ??? [2010-10-24 18:30:12 +0000 UTC]

Dude, this is actually so beautiful. The first five stanzas are like breath taking good.
Is death perhaps in love with her? In his own evil way? Kinda sounds like that.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to bunnyness77 [2010-10-24 18:50:21 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much

He's actually not, tho I kinda made it sound like that. She actually just experienced Death really young, and continued to, throughout her life. He "kept returning to her", because all these people in her life were dying. He promised her that he'd take her to see them : when she died.

Sowwy if it didn't make sense

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bunnyness77 In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-10-24 18:57:15 +0000 UTC]

Yeah I knew that as well, but it also sounds as if he kinda is. especially if she can't even have a lover. But yeah, very well done.

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to bunnyness77 [2010-10-24 19:01:51 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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doomdragon88 In reply to ??? [2010-10-24 18:13:42 +0000 UTC]

it's neat

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SoImStillUnsure In reply to doomdragon88 [2010-10-24 18:14:57 +0000 UTC]

Thanks.

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doomdragon88 In reply to SoImStillUnsure [2010-10-25 00:48:41 +0000 UTC]

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