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The water came razing down,Through my head pervaded,
And it crashed my jaws,
To flow out underneath.
The fire blasted and thundered,
Through my neck it blazed,
And tore off my eyes,
To sprint out, upwards.
In the middle just stayed,
An old broken rock,
With seven ancient holes,
And a grey ash forest.
Around it, the mute air,
Blind and angry swirling,
Running an endless, broken cycle,
And screaming out of weakness.
They are the ones who created me
They are the ones who will tear me apart.
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Comments: 9
Masa-chan [2008-11-20 03:25:40 +0000 UTC]
The last line..."tare" should be "tear?" (Don't you just love synonymic error? Hehe.)
This is AMAZING, Neno! I instantly +faved it!!!
You used "pervaded!" What a nice word.
(And you told me not to use huge words. Hehe. *poke*)
The fire blasted and thundered,
Through my neck it blazed,
And tore off my eyes,
To sprint out, upwards.
My favorite stanza.
Gorgeous, macabre imagery throughout this piece really captures me.
One question: What are the 7 ancient holes?
...Are they the 7 deadly sins?
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Sozokai In reply to Masa-chan [2008-11-20 07:26:46 +0000 UTC]
hehehe thank you... btw, "tear" as ripping something appart... not as crying... yes, an error
thank you so much... I'm so flattered
no, the seven ancient holes are the exact holes on our heads... the ears, the mouth, two nose holes, and two eyes... they are with the human kind since the start of counciousness, and if you think about it, they are our only touch with the outside world... if we didn;t have them, there is no telling how we would have gotten in touch with anything outside our minds
thak you so much for the fave... i plan to read all of your works these days when i have time and fav all of them...
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Masa-chan In reply to Sozokai [2008-11-20 07:36:29 +0000 UTC]
Wow, Nemanja, that's deep.
Very deep.
How did you come up with that?! *is amazed*
Did you just sit and count the holes on your face, one day?
It's all so very true.
You're very welcome for the +fav!
It's an incredible piece!
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Sozokai In reply to Masa-chan [2008-11-21 07:48:04 +0000 UTC]
hahah well it plays a part as a symbolic number... when you read a symbol dictionary, and search for the number 7 as a symbol, you will find conotations like: seven mortal sins, seven as a magical number, seven as the number of corporal chakras, seven holes on your head... seven, seven, seven... it's my lucky and favorite number... it's the most mystical number ever!
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Masa-chan In reply to Sozokai [2008-11-21 21:01:35 +0000 UTC]
Did you know 7 is God's perfect number? It is very "lucky," indeed. ^^
7 Days of the Week, 7 days of the Creation week, the 7 Apostolic churches in Asia, the Preist sprinkling the
Holy Altar 7 times with sacrificial blood, the 7th day which is the Sabbath, the 7 Angels that surround
the Throne of God...
Revelation 5:6- And I beheld, and, lo, in the midst of the throne and of the four
beasts, and in the midst of the elders, stood a Lamb as it had been slain,
having seven horns and seven eyes, which are the seven Spirits of
God sent forth into all the earth.
Joshua 6:4 And seven priests shall bear before the ark seven trumpets of rams' horns: and the
seventh day ye shall compass the city seven times, and the priests shall blow with the trumpets.
(The battle of Jericho)
Isn't all of that so cool? I love the number 7, too.
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Sozokai In reply to Masa-chan [2008-11-22 14:30:54 +0000 UTC]
yes... it is the most amazing number... I use a heptagram as my symbol when signing my design projects at the university... hihih
I have dedicated many many stanzas of my poetry to this number... the seven ancient holes is an example... if you ever feel like it, browse through my poetry and you'll find it hidden everywhere
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Masa-chan In reply to Sozokai [2008-11-24 20:52:41 +0000 UTC]
You're 19, right?
So are you a sophomore at your University? What university do you go to?
Ooh, a heptagram. COOOOL. What an interesting way to signature your work.
And, yeah, I've already combed through your gallery. Hehe. I already afforded myself that pleasure.
And yes, the number 7 was everywhere!!
Heptahedron! Is that what your avatar is?
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Sozokai In reply to Masa-chan [2008-11-25 21:50:51 +0000 UTC]
yes I am 19, my birthday was 10 days ago
And no, I'm not a sophomore, I'm in my first semestar of my first year.
At my country the educational system is different from the one in the USA... we start elementary at 6, we have elementary for 4 years, than junior high for 4 more, than high for 4 years, and then college for either 3, 4 or 5 years acording to the kind of faculty you choose
I really want to know the US educational system better, I never seem to get it complettely... can you explain it to me in details?!
Nope, it's not a heptahedron, it is an encircled tech-triangle, it symbolises technology and works... it is my design for a coat of arms of technocracy as a system... I believe that technocracy is a pretty good way of rule
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Masa-chan In reply to Sozokai [2008-11-26 06:08:51 +0000 UTC]
Ohhhh! Happy Belated Birthday!!!
I started school at three (Pre-School) and entered kindergarten at four and 1/2. (We have the option of pre-school.) After that, it's grades 1-4 in elementary (which equals up to 6 years in elementary), 5-8 in Middle School, and 9-12 (and most High Schools give the option of a few credit hours or advanced placement classes), and then whatever amount of years in college, depending on your career choice, of course. I would have graduated High School at 17, and was one of the youngest in my class. But I took a college English class (101) that would have been the equivalent of my fourth High School english credit, and the professor hated me, for some reason. So she accused me of plagiarism (which I would NEVER EVER EVER personally do) and failed me. I can honestly say that I cried for weeks. I thought my pursue of education was shot.
So, I ended up having to take a class through the State of Kentucky, and obtain a state-issued GED (General Education Diploma) so I could enroll in college whenever I decided to. To enroll in an American college, you have to take a test called the ACT (American College Test) and score at least a 16, for an open-enrollment college. Of course, some colleges are more picky, and want higher test scores, which is understandable. I scored a 21. A perfect score is...36, I believe. the math portion is what really pulled me under (I SUCK at Algebra), but I still managed to score above average (average being 16-17) with the help of my very strong english and writing/literature scores.
I guess it IS pretty similar to how you all go to school, as far as the grades go. I don't know about your college enrollment process.
Currently, I am enrolled for my starting semester at a local college. (Yes, at age 21.) I don't know why I waited 3 years, but I did. And I regret it. But I'm excited, because I have included 2 European History classes in my schedule!
"Technocracy?" Dang, you are an interesting person. Why Technocracy? Because you would be governed by advanced scientists and "skill," pretty much? Hehe. ^^ You are such a nerd. But, I am too, so... =/
Nerd! IOLU.
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