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speakyourmind — The epitome of all I despise
Published: 2008-03-16 22:18:42 +0000 UTC; Views: 207; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 0
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Description I’ve never hated anyone
So much as I hate you
I had never experienced hell
Until what you put me through

Everything I try to fix
You continually destroy
You’re always finding ways
To hurt, break, and annoy

I wish I could take a knife
And carve out your worst parts
I wish you had never begun your life
And broken all these innocent hearts

I wish this breath you take right now
Would be your very last
I wish I could close my eyes
And delete you from my past

I could never imagine
A person as terrible as you
I never believed such torment existed
Until I saw the things you do

The pain you’ve caused
Rips apart my insides
The monster of you
Has finally escaped from where it hides

And I can hardly believe this is you
But here you are before my eyes
Now I see, you are the epitome
Of everything I despise

I’ve never seen such an ugly sight
Until I looked into your eyes
And now as I stare into the mirror,
My enemy softly cries
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Comments: 10

anedz [2008-12-31 21:52:48 +0000 UTC]

rereading this... it is truly a wonderful capture of the ugliest of all human realizations... you are your own worst enemy

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speakyourmind In reply to anedz [2009-01-02 22:40:35 +0000 UTC]

thank you m'dear.

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Elphaba16 [2008-03-20 18:26:06 +0000 UTC]

wow--im not really sure that I can come up with words to descirbe how incredible this is--that twist at the end was awesome, and the poem didn't loose its rythm for even a second
< --- five stars

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abbyj [2008-03-17 22:20:44 +0000 UTC]

i really like it.. absolutely perfect.. rhyming & rhythm..

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speakyourmind [2008-03-17 20:26:06 +0000 UTC]

thank you all very very much! and i'll ask someone to .. explain meter to me and work on it

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beautifulsoul90 [2008-03-17 20:07:57 +0000 UTC]

wow this is like really amazing X10... i heart you

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tieshalynn [2008-03-17 14:46:13 +0000 UTC]

wonderful job

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missmissa07 [2008-03-17 05:48:09 +0000 UTC]

Excellent job! This flows very well and the rhyming is superb, so I must give you props for that. The only suggestion I can come up with is too perhaps try putting the poem in a meter. I mainly think this may work well because it seems like you start with one (the first two lines have it anyways), but then it kind of moves away from the meter every now and then. I just think it would help solidify the awesomeness of the poem if you went ahead and tried it out .

But anyways, great job!

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anedz [2008-03-17 01:57:40 +0000 UTC]

i really need to talk to you soon... there are some things that are bothering me...

as for the writing, its absolutely wonderful

i love you sweetie

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Liberty-Virtue-Life [2008-03-16 22:33:20 +0000 UTC]

...uh.. 'wow' would be the understatment of the year. This is.. 'amazing' doesnt even say it... 'fackin ASTOUNDING!' seriously.. this is.. unexplainably perfect..

i'm in awe.... seriously, i think im in shock this was so outstanding...

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