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Published: 2008-08-29 04:11:42 +0000 UTC; Views: 6505; Favourites: 219; Downloads: 39
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I hope this is more than inebriated romance.I watch you in the diner.
I'm always watching, through mirrors, through doorways, seeing you and seeing me and knowing we're reflections of the same hypocrisy; I'm outside the television, this tellingvision, I'm disconnected, broken, the nerve between me and the rest of existence is strained and I see beyond your charades. I'm on the outside of the window, our interactions are equivocal, ambiguous, filtered and muted. My reality is a drunk prism, and your reality is an insane labyrinth of pattern, schedule, and bullshit.
The coffee at dinner makes remnants of the vodka at breakfast taste like cigarettes and five dollar whores. Stale women on a sunday, gracing my grief with melting laughter.
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Comments: 101
A stunningly executed piece. I'm in awe of your abilities
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to be "in awe of [my] abilities" is just silly, but thank you millions
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is not, I would kill to be able to conceptualize, and write like this. KILL!
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i don't know, the way i write is the way i see things everyday and always, it can be exhausting at times
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well, you have a wonderful ability. And, I hope it's not to exhausting, because I can't wait to read more
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it would seem that i should continue writing and put my crocheting on hiatus then
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lol. It would seem so...
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There aren't enough spectacular poems that get the DDs they deserve on this site.
Congratulations, it was well-earned.
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thank you very much
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Wow, I loved it. It's amazing the way you put the words. Wish I could write in english like that!
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i guess it takes practice and a certain degree of self loathing
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Yeah, I try!
Thanks.
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Such excellent verses you weave,
though I'm very inclined to believe
that you're words, rather dismal,
speak of things quite abysmal,
with intentions I dare not perceive.
More or less, excellent.
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heh, thanks
(your comment has better rhythm than most poetry on this site)
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It's like a rap, only it's not.
Interesting, if not disturbingly delightful read.
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I'd say so. I could picture a random rapper putting that to a beat. >_>
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Excellent use of assonance all throughout. The words flow very well.
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thank you very much
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Holy shit... you are amazing.... your poem is like a fucking paragraph but it has perfect rhythm and amazing vocab AND stunning metaphors, I'm going to go cry in a corner now you kick my ass
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HA! you remind me of me. you and yer mirrors and me and mine. we need COFFEE!
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to say the least
i'm beginning to think that i'm almost too jaded...
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well, listen to your heart. your heart will never lie.
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it doesnt have the option. all those lies are just ego getting in the way of intuition.
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yeah... doesn't that seem like something hitler would have said?
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not even a little. hitler would have said that we are perfect aryans therefore we create no mistakes.
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he's like a charismatic uncle everybody wants to hang out with
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heh. alright. im not certain i understand what youre driving at.
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i'm not certain either
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thats ok, intutition is pure thought at work. we tiny brained humans cant always grasp the meanign.
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people normally make their own anyway
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but its not true....so what does it matter?
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why does anything matter?
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yes. its very interesing how we can believe all this shit matters.but when we look back at the universe and such we realize that we're less than the dust. nothing we do has any real impact an when we're gone noone and nothing but the trees, maybe, will rmember.
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i sort of like that thought, has to deal with an ideal freedom, i think, as well
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quite so. its very ancient. look at buddhism look at hinduism
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