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Published: 2008-08-29 04:11:42 +0000 UTC; Views: 6505; Favourites: 219; Downloads: 39
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Description I hope this is more than inebriated romance.  


I watch you in the diner.  

I'm always watching, through mirrors, through doorways, seeing you and seeing me and knowing we're reflections of the same hypocrisy; I'm outside the television, this tellingvision, I'm disconnected, broken, the nerve between me and the rest of existence is strained and I see beyond your charades.  I'm on the outside of the window, our interactions are equivocal, ambiguous, filtered and muted.  My reality is a drunk prism, and your reality is an insane labyrinth of pattern, schedule, and bullshit.

The coffee at dinner makes remnants of the vodka at breakfast taste like cigarettes and five dollar whores.  Stale women on a sunday, gracing my grief with melting laughter.
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Comments: 101

IAmPhoenixMoth [2009-04-06 09:09:02 +0000 UTC]

this DESERVED that DD.

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synapticattack In reply to IAmPhoenixMoth [2009-04-08 17:34:07 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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Script-Interactive [2008-12-24 01:49:55 +0000 UTC]

This is really good. The beginning is brief, then a simple story with good representation of mixed feelings and emotions. I think it's well done.

-A

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synapticattack In reply to Script-Interactive [2008-12-24 01:54:47 +0000 UTC]

thank you very much

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Script-Interactive In reply to synapticattack [2008-12-24 01:56:35 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome.

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JoeBostonPhotography [2008-12-10 05:45:20 +0000 UTC]

I very rarely favor poetry. But fucking wow. Well done.

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synapticattack In reply to JoeBostonPhotography [2008-12-17 07:16:47 +0000 UTC]

thank you

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ShabbyHeart [2008-12-10 05:34:19 +0000 UTC]

i love this.

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e-SKA [2008-12-10 05:32:11 +0000 UTC]

genius. Had me at "inebriated romance"

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synapticattack In reply to e-SKA [2008-12-17 07:16:32 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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DecemberBLUE07 [2008-12-10 05:17:39 +0000 UTC]

Holy cats, this is absolutely fantastic, I love it.
Wonderful work and many congratulations on the DD, certainly a deserving piece and author!

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synapticattack In reply to DecemberBLUE07 [2008-12-17 07:15:11 +0000 UTC]

thank you very much

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DecemberBLUE07 In reply to synapticattack [2008-12-17 08:57:27 +0000 UTC]

You're very welcome.

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hopesforserenity [2008-12-10 04:05:04 +0000 UTC]

Incredible; I received such powerful imagery from this piece. It made me incredibly sad and nostalgic.

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synapticattack In reply to hopesforserenity [2008-12-17 07:16:19 +0000 UTC]

thanks, it was somewhat difficult for me to write

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neptune42 [2008-12-10 02:32:43 +0000 UTC]

wow.

this.
is.
awesome.

you have a real talent! X3

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RheaTorieSoto [2008-12-10 02:30:36 +0000 UTC]

This is really deep and moving, I really feel what's going on, it's got real power and emotion!

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synapticattack In reply to RheaTorieSoto [2008-12-17 07:13:20 +0000 UTC]

it's not really that deep, i think it's quite shallow and superficial.

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Daimanius [2008-12-10 00:44:47 +0000 UTC]

Congrats on the DD!

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synapticattack In reply to Daimanius [2008-12-17 07:12:51 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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kho13 [2008-12-09 23:02:09 +0000 UTC]

I love it, I just felt it like my own emotions.

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SpiritedAway2 [2008-12-09 22:40:14 +0000 UTC]

wow that is amazing. O_O I wanna read mooore...

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Flowerchild666 [2008-12-09 22:20:10 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful, yet so sad.....

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yiayia-kassi [2008-12-09 22:16:13 +0000 UTC]


So very striking! Your words are so well chosen that, with only a few of them, you can knock your reader flat. I've yet to see a poem structured this way that actually works. This is a great piece of writing!
Excuse me while I go nurse my self-esteem, as your amazingness (yes, that's a technical term ) has squished it

~Choey~

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synapticattack In reply to yiayia-kassi [2008-12-17 07:10:01 +0000 UTC]

haha, why thank you!

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yiayia-kassi In reply to synapticattack [2008-12-19 03:13:56 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome

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TheBrassGlass [2008-12-09 22:09:46 +0000 UTC]

Nice. Very punch-n-the-gut Beatnik.

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synapticattack In reply to TheBrassGlass [2008-12-17 07:17:20 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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th3rdeye [2008-12-09 21:23:47 +0000 UTC]

gave me goosebumps while reading. wonderful. i'm glad this got a daily deviation, otherwise i'd never have chanced upon it.

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synapticattack In reply to th3rdeye [2008-12-17 07:09:34 +0000 UTC]

another reason i'm glad for DD then

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50calWolf [2008-12-09 21:22:23 +0000 UTC]

haha i do this all the time xD great writing

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synapticattack In reply to 50calWolf [2008-12-17 07:18:03 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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50calWolf In reply to synapticattack [2008-12-17 18:56:02 +0000 UTC]

welcome ^^

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XxTwistedXanimexX [2008-12-09 21:13:04 +0000 UTC]

Hey, love. Saw this as a daily deviation,
read it, love it.

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arushi [2008-12-09 21:10:28 +0000 UTC]

Wow!! (no more words, sorry!...)

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Ginny-Lucine [2008-12-09 20:47:34 +0000 UTC]

I like it, the whole piece is a wonderful flow of beautiful words, woven in a great rhythm

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synapticattack In reply to Ginny-Lucine [2008-12-17 07:08:41 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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EternalEmber [2008-12-09 20:45:10 +0000 UTC]



*speechless*

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nakedxsnapex [2008-12-09 20:37:05 +0000 UTC]

this is amazing! i love it!

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schriftsteller [2008-12-09 20:06:08 +0000 UTC]

I have no idea what to say about this. It's just...I don't know. I have no words. I just adore it. Congrats on your DD, it's well deserved.

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synapticattack In reply to schriftsteller [2008-12-17 07:05:56 +0000 UTC]

thank you

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A-w0man [2008-12-09 19:39:30 +0000 UTC]

damn ..what the heck is WRONG !?

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synapticattack In reply to A-w0man [2008-12-17 07:17:51 +0000 UTC]

quite a bit is wrong, actually

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A-w0man In reply to synapticattack [2008-12-17 10:16:31 +0000 UTC]

i think i wouldn't wanna know then! eek

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synapticattack In reply to A-w0man [2008-12-17 15:07:32 +0000 UTC]

heh, that's how it goes

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sixsicksins [2008-12-09 19:00:10 +0000 UTC]

this is beautiful !

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sixsicksins [2008-12-09 18:59:46 +0000 UTC]

this is beautiful!
well done!

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HideFromThem [2008-12-09 18:56:11 +0000 UTC]

I'm disconnected, broken, the nerve between me and the rest of existence is strained and I see beyond your charades

beauty

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synapticattack In reply to HideFromThem [2008-12-17 07:04:24 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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Time-Pirate [2008-12-09 17:22:08 +0000 UTC]

I love it, it was so powerful and drew you in from the first word. You are the master of words. <3

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