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t-writes-poems — finding your lullaby. by-nc-nd
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Description this is for you.
        for all of you.


for those who are but are not.

for those who believe love is just a chemical reaction.

for those who are nothing but static on the mainstream radio.

for those who will never know forever.

for those who live in the highs and lows of the roller-coaster ocean breeze.

for those who hurt themselves because they're afraid of hurting anyone else.

for those whose cries have been drowned by the summer rain.

for those who have been mistaken for God.

for those who battle a thousand soldiers of themselves just to find who they really are.

for those who are nothing but natural disasters.

for those who sink somewhere between electric blue oceans and shimmering rainbows of euphoria.

for those whose insanity makes poetry - and those whose poetry drives them insane.

for those who are weighed down by gravity.

for those who have found equilibria in a heart that is caught in a chain reaction of passionate apathy.
        
for those who wait for the classroom telephone to ring their eulogy.

for those who think God is just another love song.
        
for those who are nothing but needle eyes and inkless words.
        
for those who open the windows when it's raining, just to hear the whole world cry.
        
for those who leave and never return.
        
for those who forget it all on the ride home.
        
for those who love - and those who are loved.
                
for you.


stand up.
        stand up against yourself.
and breathe.
        breathe it all out.
because tonight,
        no one has to bleed
        to feel alive.
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Comments: 256

Shunji In reply to ??? [2010-06-28 19:59:45 +0000 UTC]

aww I love this, this makes me cry, but still.

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t-writes-poems In reply to Shunji [2010-06-29 20:21:20 +0000 UTC]

Awww, thank you.

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unprettyprincess In reply to ??? [2010-06-18 06:56:39 +0000 UTC]

I haven't commented on this yet, I don't think. Theresa, you have an incredible talent to write beautiful words, that aren't just words, but emotions that other people can relate to and find themselves in. When I write, it's only a psychotic rambling of mixed emotions that have no class, no beauty, just raw nastiness most of the time. But you take raw emotion, and make it understandable and relatable. And I definitely found myself in here:

"to those who will never know forever."

But yes. This is perfect, and you already can see how many people have connected with it.

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t-writes-poems In reply to unprettyprincess [2010-06-21 21:42:13 +0000 UTC]

Awww, thank you, Morgz.

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j-fern [2010-06-17 18:58:57 +0000 UTC]

I can't even begin to thank you for this. It's heartbreakingly beautiful and made me cry.

I write love on my arm almost every day...

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t-writes-poems In reply to j-fern [2010-06-18 02:11:48 +0000 UTC]

Awww thank you.

And I'm so glad you do. I wish I had the strength to, but I'm trying to get there.

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j-fern In reply to t-writes-poems [2010-06-18 02:14:06 +0000 UTC]

Well, I'm not through it yet, but I'm making progress. You can do it. Just know that we're all here for you. You're not alone.

I don't know if you've seen them yet, but you might like some of my poems and drawings.

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Eternal-Afterglow In reply to ??? [2010-06-16 11:53:14 +0000 UTC]

it broke 200 missy

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t-writes-poems In reply to Eternal-Afterglow [2010-06-16 14:55:28 +0000 UTC]

I knowwww. I cried. :]

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Eternal-Afterglow In reply to t-writes-poems [2010-06-17 11:43:06 +0000 UTC]

haha yay

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Panda-Vision [2010-06-11 22:51:25 +0000 UTC]

Great sentiment, nothing radical but definitely high on impact.

Flow will inherantly be difficult for a list stlye like this, but I'm not sure that's really important. To some extent you want each line to be a seperate entity, for individual people to be able to pick out which one they are.

The structure is always going to have it as cohesive, so in that sense the repetition hangs it together very well. I'm usually not a fan of trite repetition, but you've gone past that here and made it the entire point - which I dig, so kudos.

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t-writes-poems In reply to Panda-Vision [2010-06-17 00:01:24 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! :]

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Cu-Sith1 [2010-06-11 21:35:45 +0000 UTC]

beautiful, made me cry. Very powerful imagery.

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t-writes-poems In reply to Cu-Sith1 [2010-06-17 00:01:12 +0000 UTC]

Awww, thank you

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FlyHigh20 In reply to ??? [2010-06-11 11:05:11 +0000 UTC]

wow.... I love it..it says so much, more than I could ever say sometimes. yes I was one of those things you mentioned, i am...but it's getting better

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t-writes-poems In reply to FlyHigh20 [2010-06-17 00:00:30 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!
And I'm glad you're getting better. Be strong.

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FlyHigh20 In reply to t-writes-poems [2010-06-19 15:42:13 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome

I will be

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masvida [2010-06-11 01:44:35 +0000 UTC]

!!! Last stanza... Ohhh wowo... No you didn't miss anything... everything's perfect!

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t-writes-poems In reply to masvida [2010-06-16 23:59:13 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! :]

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dedgroggin [2010-06-11 00:53:23 +0000 UTC]

"for those who have found lithium in a heart that is caught in a chain reaction of passionate apathy."

yep i'm in here. thanks, Howl.

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t-writes-poems In reply to dedgroggin [2010-06-16 23:59:01 +0000 UTC]

I know how it is.
Thank you.

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agrizzle324 In reply to ??? [2010-06-11 00:25:59 +0000 UTC]

this is beautiful. thank you.
i've never thanked someone just for writing something before. but this deserves my gratitude.

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t-writes-poems In reply to agrizzle324 [2010-06-16 23:57:05 +0000 UTC]

Awww, thank you so much!

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agrizzle324 In reply to t-writes-poems [2010-06-17 00:44:02 +0000 UTC]

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Melchi32 [2010-06-10 20:34:56 +0000 UTC]

"for those who hurt themselves because they're terrified of hurting anyone else."

you got me

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t-writes-poems In reply to Melchi32 [2010-06-11 19:41:56 +0000 UTC]

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Parryy-Xx [2010-06-10 20:26:41 +0000 UTC]

Do you know me?? Do you have like a camera in my head or something?? You basicallly described my life?!?!! weird.... x

Loved it amazing, so real, i can really relate to it x

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t-writes-poems In reply to Parryy-Xx [2010-06-16 23:56:44 +0000 UTC]

Haha, I'm glad you could relate to it!
Thank you!

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chocopie5 [2010-06-09 23:13:51 +0000 UTC]

holy mother. this is great.
the lines that got to me the most were "for those who hurt themselves because they're terrified of hurting anyone else." and "for those whose insanity makes poetry - and those whose poetry drives them insane." i literally gasped at those lines because the image i had was so powerful and moving.
i have a feeling that you would like this. [link]

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t-writes-poems In reply to chocopie5 [2010-06-09 23:20:53 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! :]
And oh my goodness, I love Anis Mojgani. He's such an inspiration.

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PinkFrosting174 [2010-06-09 20:58:27 +0000 UTC]

Beautifully written poem!
I think that you really got into the mind of the person, and it seems that evey aspect of different peoples fears were written out here.
Great job!

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t-writes-poems In reply to PinkFrosting174 [2010-06-16 23:55:58 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! :]

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alyth3cat [2010-06-08 13:45:23 +0000 UTC]

p.s. don't touch the end. That was perfect.

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alyth3cat In reply to ??? [2010-06-08 13:44:24 +0000 UTC]

There are so many lines in hear that are truely beautiful for example, :

"for those who open the windows when it's raining, just to hear the whole world cry."

"for those who battle a thousand soldiers of themselves just to find who they really are."

I'm not sure you've forgotten anyone, everyone should be able to relate in here. It did flow well, but I think it would help (since you don't really have a rhyme scheme going) that you work on the metre. (it's so weird for me to say that, as i'm just learning meter myself lol) For example, if you made a pattern of syllables to help create the lullaby feel for the poem. I really like your abstract idea it turned out very well.

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t-writes-poems In reply to alyth3cat [2010-06-16 23:55:33 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! :]

And yeah, I thought about doing the meter, but I guess I was just too lazy to mold all the lines I'd come up with into that, haha.

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alyth3cat In reply to t-writes-poems [2010-06-17 17:44:32 +0000 UTC]

LOL! I know that feeling well. But if you do get around to playing with it and changing that in the poem, let me know... I'd love to see how it turns out.

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RosalieLillian [2010-06-07 22:55:26 +0000 UTC]

this made me cry. i loved it

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t-writes-poems In reply to RosalieLillian [2010-06-10 02:58:32 +0000 UTC]

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3ruceylol [2010-06-07 18:48:27 +0000 UTC]

This is beautiful. Thank you.

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t-writes-poems In reply to 3ruceylol [2010-06-07 22:07:01 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

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Eternal-Afterglow [2010-06-07 16:18:13 +0000 UTC]

E.

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t-writes-poems In reply to Eternal-Afterglow [2010-06-07 16:20:00 +0000 UTC]


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Eternal-Afterglow In reply to t-writes-poems [2010-06-08 00:01:25 +0000 UTC]

lol.

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Eternal-Afterglow [2010-06-07 16:18:02 +0000 UTC]

MOOS.

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t-writes-poems In reply to Eternal-Afterglow [2010-06-07 16:19:41 +0000 UTC]

COWS.

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Eternal-Afterglow In reply to t-writes-poems [2010-06-07 16:22:11 +0000 UTC]

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syvyan In reply to ??? [2010-06-05 10:10:35 +0000 UTC]

this is most excellent ^_^

thank you a million fold ^_^

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t-writes-poems In reply to syvyan [2010-06-06 04:03:42 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! :]

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ApatheticInsanity [2010-06-05 00:27:12 +0000 UTC]

I found myself in about five - ten - many lines. It flows beautifully, it's coherent, it's real but in a good way. Absolutely touching.

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t-writes-poems In reply to ApatheticInsanity [2010-06-06 04:03:22 +0000 UTC]

I'm so glad you could relate to it. Thank you so much.

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