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thrutheeyesofruby — questions of a bitter soul
Published: 2003-11-13 01:51:32 +0000 UTC; Views: 187; Favourites: 4; Downloads: 7
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how can i describe the feeling of my sorrow?it's like a dark and stormy summer day
waiting to be tarnished by the comforting light
a chill of loneliness shrivels down my spine
the selfish sun will never shine
why are there footsteps in places i have never dared to walk?
my dreams are fading into reality
and the difference is smothered in a cloud of wishful thinking
great expectations kill you in the end
with a deep stab of what could have been
who are the voices that tell me i will never know?
the night's darkened flame has hollowed underneath
for i am unsure of my belonging
and why i still breathe heavily
as i mourn, i cry out to the sea
where has my soul fled off to?
i want to get away from this sick anguish and despair
to reach the euphoria of hope
there, far out is a nest for my fragile mind
that will keep my terrible thoughts confined
when did i lose my only friend?
lonely has taken over solitary
i miss the comfort in being sad
to look forward to a gentle tear
for a soft blanket to cover the fear
what has become of my mind?
it is easier to find clarity through confusion
i would rather drown myself in beautiful sorrow
than fake an ugly happiness from within
it's almost an ironic sin.
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wow thank you so much, i never thought my writing was that good. heh.
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Wow, shes a great photographer AND a great writer... and a musician? That likes final fantasy? ... AND GOOD MUSIC?! well this was a great poem, it brought one of those ...hmm what do you call them...wet, thingies...um...tears to my eyes. Right...no its really good man. I'm very very impressed...very nice!!!!
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This is very good, and the style was very creative. I like the imagery and the clearness of the tone. You write well, I wish I could write that well consistantly. You should do it more sometime.
-Ramuel
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thank you so much, it really means a lot to me when ppl comment on my writing since i think it kind of blows. lol..but yes i should do it more, now that i have a digital camera i've just been focusing on photography and leaving no time for writing. shame on me hehe.
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This is really good. You have some absolutly stunning imagry with the way you set it up, and I think the last stanza is just such a feeling I at least can relate to, the odd want to be sad, at least to be true to what your feeling than fake a smile. I love the last lines. Great job.
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dear amanda,
this poem seems very complete to me
i like the questions and descriptive lines underneath them
you truly have a knack for writing - keep on going my dear
<3 kristin
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woah, great job, i think i'll have to agree on the best lines.
great job, i love the rhyming, that's every once in a while instead of every line, that's very creative.
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i really like this, great poem. two lines really hit me, 'the selfish sun will never shine' and 'i miss the comfort of being sad'. those lines are fantastic. all very well written, keep it comin!
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