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Cuz this TOTALLY is for kids....heheheheheheheheh ;~;
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Hey,Not to be rude.....but this OC resembles alot like a Mary Sue. Just the whole "god of death" and "super edgy" vibe destroys the amazement of this OC. I dont know much about this OC,so if its supposed to be like this for a understandable way,please tell me. <3
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i know she is a littleΒ
she is not edgy it's just the way she looks
and that person you that you saw our conversation of ya she kinda hated me and i hate her so this is normal between us
thundercloud is not real
she is a thought of thunderstormΒ who is making her tern into her
that thought went into her by her mom
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Okay,me an my friends looked over your OC and we wanna say some things tho:
1: Her Cutie Mark Should Resemble Death,since she IS the god of death.
2:Shes multitalented,which resembles a mary sue. (Electricity AND death)
3:We think you should just turn Her into a Unicorn if you want her to have magic.Β Β
Hope we didnt offend you, by the wayΒ Β
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1.her cute mark did not change because she is still a thoughtΒ
2. she is an alicorn and thunderstorm are both alicorns so they have a lot of powers but there horn is just inside there body
it's okay
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i liker her design. its simple yet neat. but her story is kinda eh. it could use some work.
what do you mean by "her horn is inside her body"?
and you say she is the "god of death" but you didnt EXPLAIN exactly what that is,how she is the god of death, and just basically left out things. she doesn't seem to have any bad traits which is a problem and leads to being a mary sue. maybe tells us more and add more details. i just read the back story and personality again and i have to say. her back story is the cliche "mom and dad abused her/died" and its just mmmm. and her personality is just "sad,mean,depressed". you never really explained still how she is a "alicorn" and how she became one. it sounds like she just killed her mom or something and kill her family.
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i have to tell you that again i am working more on her back story ^^''
and ya in the one i am righting it explains every thing
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thanks for the advice and ya i know it's not that detailed i am working on her back story ^^'
and by her horn is inside her body i mean her horn magic is inside her so it does not show the actual horn
and by god of death i mean she take's people or ponies life when it's there time to dieΒ
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i edited my comment again so please read it. i added more things into it
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how is this Mary sue?
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Oh *clears throats*
"Alicorn but her horn is inside her body"
Impossible #1
"God of death"
Pffft bitch please
"She has electrical powers"
From where her ass
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maybe impossible for you but that is just my idea
and the god of death again just my idea
and no she has it from her hoofs
and these are your opinions so ya okay
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whatever (still mary sue)
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again it's you opinionΒ
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I think you got mixed up with the hair and body colors XD
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oh wow i just saw ;-;
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SO I HAVE THE DAWING DONE-
but do you mind if i upload it on youtube as a speedpaint?
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oml please do it :33
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