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tinkertype — Empty Mirror
Published: 2006-09-15 00:52:06 +0000 UTC; Views: 321; Favourites: 6; Downloads: 1
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There's a hole in my mirrorThat I can't seem to fill.
It used to be me.
I try to put in new pieces,
Old pieces, used pieces-
Nothing seems to fit.
Nothing seems to be
Fitting.
Old clothes never fit twice.
New clothes never fit
Twice as well.
There's nothing left
in the mirror.
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Comments: 31
*returns your words to you* On the house.
I'm glad you enjoyed it, my dear.
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Yet another thought stirring poem... I like your musings here, the metaphor and the play on words at the end.
I am not sure how the shadow and life go together though poem wise, unless you are meaning them to be contrastual like the life without the whole, the step without the sole, each one when severed is lost without the other.
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As for that last part, it was a play on the words and their homophones. Sole, soul, whole, hole, so and sew.
I admit, I've never much cared for that last part. I've thought about cutting it off entirely and just ending the poem on the fourth stanza. O.o
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Homophones? I thought it said homophobe when I first read it.
That last part makes the poem intriguing. Makes the reader think you know a lot more than we do.
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XDD! Hahaha, nice.
Well, then I guess it stays for now. ^^
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It should stay. Unless you can make it more cryptic.
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...maybe I'll work on it someday. Thank you for the advice on which direction to maybe work it toward. x3
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I think it is fine as is. I only mentioned to go more cryptic because it would cause more wondering what the reader missed that you intended.
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I don't have the kind of depth needed to be mysterious. XDD I'm impulsively honest. Ask me anything, and I'd probably tell you.
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You dont need depth to be mysterious, just persistance.
So, is that a hint you want me to ask you something? Its a fairly bold statement, more so because we havent known each other long??
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...then I'm confused about the definition of 'mysterious'. XD
...or maybe you don't have anyone like that. I don't know what kind of conversations you have online. x3 Well, other than the ones we've had. XD All I meant was that I'm a bit of an open book, both online and in person (it's gotten me into trouble, so I know XD) but probably more so online.
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Gotcha.
I havent done much online interacting before DA. I dont mind personal conversations in that if someone asks me a question, I will answer honestly. I didnt take it as an invitation, hence why I asked. If I was curious about something, I would ask witht he caveat that you dont have to answer.
I dont have many friends, never have actually. Dont even have one "best" friend. Its kinda tough actually, so being on DA, for me, is a way to share my writing. I think I am developing friendships here but they are all with the opposite sex. Of course the friendships have developed through writing and commenting. . .
I hope you didnt take offense at my question from my misread of your "openness". It wasnt my attention.
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Someone hooked me up to the internet when I was ten, and they never dared to unhook me again. >XD I'm an addict, no doubt. Loooves me some internet~ <3
I know you can't see my face. :3 That's why I try to make up for it with smilies and writing in a manner that might reflect my voice tones. Like this! Orrrr... you know. Like that. XDD
Of course it's mostly girls, I think you're walking through the circles we've formed. x33 Darkfeatheredwings, Londonrey, Perfect-impurfektion... all girls. Who did I talk to today? O.o Renosaur, Silent-Lulliby, Penlessauthor, Fellier... yup, all girls. XDD A lot of the writers I know are girls, except for you, Frietzche (and I guess Wiebette) and recently Netherling. x3 Look up Frietzche, he's just started a project that I'm loving so far. 8D
I've been making friendships online for a long time. My very best friend and coauthor, I met her online. ^^ I'm happy to make another one with you, Jas. 8D I have yet to go through your gallery, which I'm going to try to do tonight. I shouldn't watch so many deviants! XDD Especially lately, all I watch are writers, so I've got a stack of prose and poetry to go through in my inbox. ^^
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It took me a bit longer to hook up to the internet but I am addicted. I would rather give up t.v. than the web.
Maybe I am drawn to girls? I do have two correspondents that are male;one from egypt and one from russia- maybe i should try to collab with one of them?
You can consider me an online friend. I watch too many too. It gets overwhelming to read everything.
Take your time with my gallery. I have a lot of crap in there and few that are good. If you want recommendations, let me know.
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-salutes- Already made that choice myself. XD The internet won.
Mm, if you are, then so'm I. >X33 -grins- Orrr I could elbow you in the ribs and simply point out that girls make better writers. XD And friends, and people all around. ...what, me? Bitter? Naawww.
Crap in your eyes, maybe. I'll sift through it, no worries. x33
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I try not to be overly harsh in my assessment of my work but I strive to be fair and honest. Crap is crap. I have some prose that I think is quite good, some that is "in progress" (more like limbo actually) and some I should never have posted. My poems are the same.
Girls are more of a mystery, plus there are more of you willing to respond to comments.
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Ooh, much better point and probably closer to the answer of this mystery. o.o ... which makes girls just want to talk and chat and what not. -brick'd!- Gah! I'm typical of my gender, nooooo~ XDDD
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I think we all harbor some stereotype of our gender in some way. Nothing to be ashamed of.
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I was giving this a passing glance at first, even as you switched towards clothing until the play on words made me stop and reread it at least three times. I love the rhetorical questions, very thought provoking.
Four year late commentary. ^^
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Four years late, and still freshly appreciated. ^^ Oh gods, now I'm blushing at the idea that you're reading through my old stuff. ^////^; Thanks, I'm glad you liked it.
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Because I can't draw happy, anime characters. O.o
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you can probably draw happy, anime characters if you try hard...
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But I can write sad things without trying at all! ^^
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ooh.. dark, my friend. The last four lines are my favorite part. ^^
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I liked the play on words, too. ^^ Though, if I had to choose, I liked the clothing reference. This poem actually was written in parts (wrote in the last word this morning) but when I wrote those two lines about the clothes not fitting, I had had a particularly trying experience at the mall. XD My fashion inspiration~
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good inspiration, I must say. ^^
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