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ToaFeliax — Ori (Prototype, Bio)
Published: 2014-09-02 15:14:07 +0000 UTC; Views: 641; Favourites: 18; Downloads: 0
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UPDATE: Don't look at her, she's hideous!Ori was born in 1848 AGC, shortly before the attack of Zaurak. Her home was Iconox, until she seceded from her family in the war as a child, and lived in the wild afterwards. Having no home and job, she often visited abandoned villages for a place to sleep. She saved Feliax from a Baterra attack when they first met, after that, she was occupied as a healer in the Toa hideout. She also cared for Feliax when he was severely injured in the Battle against Zaurak. Being 166 years old (in 2014 AGC; equals to a teenage human girl), she is very young for a Glatorian, so she can't be allowed to fight in the arena. Despite she is from the ice tribe, she decided to wear black clothes.
Species: Glatorian
Gender: Female
Tribe: Ice
Age: 166 (in 2014 AGC)
Affilation: Good
Tools/Weapons: Medical equipment
Favorite means to kill: Intentionally failing a surgery, otherwise harmless.
Arm design inspired by ClockworkTempest's MOC Circuit .
Realistic details here .
More Ori:
Prototype 1 (non-canon, outdated)
First finished ver.
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Comments: 20
I really like the design. It's very simple, yet very well built and versatile.
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I kind of like the drawings better. The MOC seems a bit scrawny and thin. The lower body design is well done though, but the torso and arms could use some filling out.
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Can't wait to see the new version!
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What is her exact age equivelant to a human girl (for example 17 or 18)
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Let's say 16 to 18, she was about 13-14 when she first met Feliax, and 4-6 when she lost her family.
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To be honest, she doesn't look much like a Glatorian... Give her some of the new hands, some more armor plates and a helmet, or at least something that doesn't make her appear bald...
And give her some actual tools/weapons to use. When you give a character items, show them. You've got the potential for a great character here, but it just looks unfinished...
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She's supposed to be just a citizen with no special features. The name "Glatorian" can either mean the species or the occupation, in this case the species. The Glatorian you got used to are warriors, that's why they wear armor. Ori doesn't.
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Even the non-fighting Agori wear armor. The Glatorian and Agori are literally cyborgs, the armor is part of their body. Ori looks more like an unfinished skeleton than an actual character... The limbs are too thin, even for non-armored ones. The head appears bald, making her appear more masculine than feminine. And overall, the only thing that makes her appear feminine is the pose in the pictures, nothing else.
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Maybe in the original timeline, but my story is set 1013 years later, when some things have changed. There are much less threats on Spherus Magna than on Bara Magna, so fully modifying one's body for enhancement is basically pointless, though they kept the traditional outer skull. If you read the description, you'll know she didn't even have much opportunity to be modified. And if you look closely, her arms share the same thickness as the original sets without armor, only their joints are larger. I wanted to give Ori a more human-like look rather than a robotic warrior, since she's almost completely organic, except for the elbows, knees and said external skull, as well as a few blood vessels. She also has some of her toes removed.
As for not being feminine enough, I wanted to build a custom torso that is slimmer than the traditional Inika torso, and more realistic than Kiina's. I also attempted to give her breasts, with not much success, though.
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In the original story, they needed the enhancements for more than just protection, it's what kept them alive. They literally couldn't survive without their given enhancements. And because of the large joints, her arms look unnaturally thin, even to Glatorian standards. You don't have to add much, but atleast give her a more "natural" look. Because those thin arms give her an even more robotic appearance than the original Toa Mata...
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Look, if I were able to make her better, believe me, I would. It's very difficult when you're low on pieces, and the best you can do is not appealing to many people. I mean, I understand that 3rdEye doesn't like it because he's a pro, but you are not even a MOCer. Build something better, then you can tell me what to do.
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Oh, so just because I don't show everything I'm doing online means I'm not allowed to share my own thoughts?
All I did was say what I think is wrong with it and how it could be improved. I'm so sorry for having an opinion on something. Apparently, it's forbidden to think freely here.
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Wait... Didn't pick up on any sarcasm there? Really? You really think sharing your thoughts is something that should be forbidden?
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I never said any of that. I just don't see the reason why I should trust someone's MOCing advices who doesn't upload any of their creations. But fine, I'll do what you want. I made this abomination just for you: sta.sh/01cy64xkqoyu . She got everything you wanted: fingers, weapon, armor, larger bust, life counter, thornax, I even kept her high heels for feminity. Does this look like a female Glatorian child to you now?
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Never said anything about adding bust, a life counter or Thornax launcher. I just said Ori looked a bit unnatural, even to Glatorian standards.
And yes, you did agree to the whole "Free will is forbidden" thing by accepting an apology for having an opinion on something.
And just because I CAN'T show my own creations (ever thought about me not being ABLE to do so?) doesn't mean I'm not allowed to say what I think. If you want to keep Ori the way she is, that's fine. I'm just saying the way she looks is not something I personally like, and I was stating exactly what I didn't like about her.
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I think she looks more like a living being that way. I even put an illustration in the desc to show what she's supposed to looks like. Have you seen it? I just wanted to achieve that look, even if it means puny arms and no armor. But as I said, it is really difficult without the right pieces.
As for accepting the apology, that was meant to be sarcastic as well.
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