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Published: 2008-06-09 15:04:20 +0000 UTC; Views: 2813; Favourites: 30; Downloads: 39
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This is how it ends.

He is ten years old, and when he wakes up, there is firelight dancing on the walls of his room. Outside is a cacaphony of crackling and roaring and screaming and the twang-thump, twang-thump of arrows.

He thinks it's a dream, and he grabs his bow from its peg on the wall and goes to investigate.

Just inside the door is his mother, crouched with a quiver of arrows by her side. Standing in the doorway is his father, taking an arrow from the stack on the floor at his feet. Their bows are two tall slashes, dark against the fire outside.

His father sees him, the small slim figure at the foot of the stairs, clutching his bow and arrows to his chest. His eyes are wide and dark and soft and confused, angry and frightened.

"Go," his father says. "Go!"

He goes. He runs down the path, which is well-lit with a reddish glow from behind him. The tall grass in the field waves around him softly. He does not look back, until he hears the crash and roar, and turns in his tracks.

The gallery is burning. Its roof has fallen in. He can smell the varnish as it sizzles and pops. Dark shapes swarm around it, the thin lines of arrows flitting between them in silhouette. They stagger and fall, one by one.

He stands, frozen. He watches from the long grass as they come with their broad shoulders in armor when the rain of arrows has thinned, throwing loops of rope around the wrists of the villagers who haven't found friends to turn their arrows on them. He watches them leading his mother away, alone. She walks with dignity. An arrow flies from somewhere, and she falls...

There is an arrow in his hands, nocked to his bow. He pulls, feels the feathers soft against his cheek, closes his eyes and lets it fly away.

Far, far away, he hears the faintest thud. He hears a rising clamor of shouts. He hears pounding feet, trampling the long grass. He turns, and he runs.

They chase him at their disadvantage, through the burning fields, until they come to the river. He does not hesitate. Clutching his bow in one hand, he closes his eyes, and lets himself fly.



When he wakes, someone is bracing him around the shoulders with strong arms, encouraging him in soothing tones to finish spitting up the water inside him. He makes a faint distressed sound. His bow is still clutched in his hand, but his arrows are not. All his arrows are gone.

"Are you all right?" says the young man, bending over him with concerned eyes under dark, winged brows. A strand of wheatgrass tucked between his teeth bobs as he speaks. "Where are you from? What's your name?"

He coughs. His voice tastes like vomit and ashes, and he spits it out with the water, mouthful by mouthful. When it's gone, there will be nothing left but his bow.

"Longshot," he whispers, with the last of it.

He is ten years old, and he will never speak again.
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Comments: 31

Pivypiv [2013-01-09 12:42:08 +0000 UTC]

Very nice. I always thought he must have such a sad story. Though he does speak again, when he tells the gang to go on without him, Smellerbee and Longshot.

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Pivypiv In reply to Pivypiv [2013-01-09 12:42:22 +0000 UTC]

I mean, Jet. Not Longshot.

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Skillet747 [2009-07-31 08:26:13 +0000 UTC]

Powerful. Very powerful.
I always thought that the members of the freedom fighters had much more tragic stories than that of the Gaang.

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flying-katana [2008-08-24 17:08:10 +0000 UTC]

from personal expeirience, its generally not a good idea to allow the fletching to touch your cheek, it really hurts when you loose the arrow...

yes, i do archery. yes, im insane.

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TobuIshi In reply to flying-katana [2008-08-27 10:40:48 +0000 UTC]

*nods* But he's just a lil dude, his technique isn't perfect yet. And, yes, I do archery too, and I've cut my fingers on fletching or gotten bits of it lodged in my skin after many a screwup.

(If you pull in a hurry, though, the fletching does often brush your cheek, at least briefly. That's what I was going for in that bit. XD)

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flying-katana In reply to TobuIshi [2008-09-01 01:19:26 +0000 UTC]

one time, i was shooting barefoot. i had shot twelve arrows, all i've got, and i was going to retrieve them when the top of my foot slides under the nock-end of my arrow, the head imbeded in the ground. it breaks. i trip. my foot is fine. so i pull he arrow out of the ground, stick both halves in my quiver, and continue on my way. i shoot with eleven arrows now.


XD now you've heard my only "archery goof-off" tale... although there was that one time i was paying no attention to my shooting, and suddenly i hit a good inch and a half away from the exact center.

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flying-katana In reply to TobuIshi [2008-09-01 01:12:43 +0000 UTC]

what kind of bow do you shoot? what's the draw weight?

everyone thinks i shoot a 15-pounder just because i'm still a kid (grumble)

35-pound recurve. i draw with two fingers, and i still overdraw.

anyway, how the h-ll do you draw with three fingers? i've tried it, and it just seems so unbalanced. . . and i've been advised to draw with my WHOLE HAND*! that's insane!

*again, because I'm a kid.

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TobuIshi In reply to flying-katana [2008-09-02 12:27:24 +0000 UTC]

I pull ten kilos--yeah, I know, I'm a wimp, but I barely have any upper body strength. ^^ It makes aiming a real challenge, anyway!

Kyudo pulls with three fingers, but they aren't actually hooked around the string. It's caught against a notch in the glove, and held there by a twist of the thumb and first finger. The second finger doesn't actually make string contact, and the fourth and fifth fingers are kept curled up out of the way.

I've got loooads of goof-up stories, including nearly shooting out a window once (the arrow bounced off the metal frame, thank goodness). And I'm still learning to aim; I miss the target the majority of the time. You never know where I might hit. Isn't it more fun that way? XD

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Katy-L-Wood [2008-06-25 06:24:31 +0000 UTC]

This was such a beautiful series of paintings and stories, i loved them all so much, great work.

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TobuIshi In reply to Katy-L-Wood [2008-06-26 11:43:47 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! I dunno about the paintings, but I worked very hard on the story.

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Katy-L-Wood In reply to TobuIshi [2008-06-26 20:09:41 +0000 UTC]

I like the paintings, it's a very interesting style because it gives just enough detail for you to know what it is, but still so little detail that you really have to think about it.

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TobuIshi In reply to Katy-L-Wood [2008-06-27 00:37:39 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! I'm mostly dissatisfied with the first one. It was going to have arrows lying on the floor and they wouldn't turn out, so now it's just a black blotch on a yellow blotch--not much to look at.

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Katy-L-Wood In reply to TobuIshi [2008-06-27 04:50:29 +0000 UTC]

still good though.

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kateison [2008-06-16 13:55:41 +0000 UTC]

Oh wow, this was excellent. Both the writing and the paintings.

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TobuIshi In reply to kateison [2008-06-26 11:46:37 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much! It was a long time in progress, I'm glad it's been well received.

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kateison In reply to TobuIshi [2008-06-27 01:13:32 +0000 UTC]

You're very welcome ;D

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Lamathyave [2008-06-10 00:51:26 +0000 UTC]

great!! ;_;

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TobuIshi In reply to Lamathyave [2008-06-10 00:53:43 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much!

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Lamathyave In reply to TobuIshi [2008-06-10 01:06:15 +0000 UTC]

n_n

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Kaitiedid [2008-06-09 23:31:34 +0000 UTC]

I really love this. Your discriptions are so engaging and wonderful.

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TobuIshi In reply to Kaitiedid [2008-06-10 00:49:24 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! The bits about the archery gallery are actually taken directly from my experience studying at one over here.

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admiralteaspoon [2008-06-09 20:10:43 +0000 UTC]

Wow. That's really amazing, I love the abstract art and the story paired together. it works so beautifully, and the story is very defining for Longshot. It's a great moment you don't see in canon.

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TobuIshi In reply to admiralteaspoon [2008-06-10 00:48:43 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! For me, that's largely what fic is for: filling in those moments you don't see in canon. Especially when they're character-defining (or funny, but this definitely doesn't fall into that category)...

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PFFbySIO [2008-06-09 19:46:18 +0000 UTC]

As far as I'm concerned, that right there is the story of Longshot. Amazing, horrific, and beautiful.

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TobuIshi In reply to PFFbySIO [2008-06-10 00:53:15 +0000 UTC]

Wow. Coming from you, the Major dA Authority on F.F. matters, that's something. I'm really glad you liked it!

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Wolvenfire86 [2008-06-09 16:58:32 +0000 UTC]

......wow. That was dramatic as hell.

Good job. It was well written and the pcitures were vague enough to really get the imagination going.

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TobuIshi In reply to Wolvenfire86 [2008-06-10 00:47:34 +0000 UTC]

Thank you. I love writing, and I can rarely pass up a chance for a shot of drama. (I haven't been doing nearly enough of it lately...)

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SarcasticLeaves [2008-06-09 15:31:20 +0000 UTC]

Wow, that was amazing. And the pictures help to tell the story so beautifully.

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TobuIshi In reply to SarcasticLeaves [2008-06-09 16:17:44 +0000 UTC]

Thank you. They're more like...moody scribbles than actual pictures...but it was a very interesting way to take a new program for a spin. And I guess they do add something to the prose...

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Timber44 [2008-06-09 15:12:44 +0000 UTC]

Wow. That's intense. But well done.

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TobuIshi In reply to Timber44 [2008-06-09 15:14:47 +0000 UTC]

Thank you. It started as a picture drawn with words...but then I got a new painting program, and couldn't resist adding pictures, too.

There's so much unsaid about that boy. Mostly because he won't say it himself.

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