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“Amanda! Amanda wake up!”
The voice was familiar, but seemed out of place.
“Goddamn it, wake up!!”
Amanda’s eyes opened, but the flashlight blinded her. She squinted. A hand tugged her arm.
“Come on, sit up.”
Amanda couldn’t sit up: she was wedged in position. The plastic restraints bit at her wrists and ankles painfully. She managed only a futile “mmmm-mmmm-mmmm!” in protest.
The light came closer to her face. Fingers fiddled, nails scraped, then, in a single violent movement, the duct tape was peeled off.
Amanda spat the moist handkerchief from her mouth and gasped in precious air. Her face stung. “That really hurt,” she complained, her face screwed up with the pain.
“Yes well it couldn’t be helped,” replied Ciara. “Now keep still while I cut these plastic things.”
Amanda waited, powerless. “Where are we?” she asked, utterly confused.
“In the museum,” replied Ciara. “Don’t you remember? Now keep your hands still.” She sawed vigorously with the serrated edge on the back of her hunting knife. But the plastic bonds were tough. Maybe the scissors on her penknife would work? Although, they were small and fiddly…
Amanda was no closer to making sense of it all. “But what are you doing here? How did you -”
“Keep your voice down – there’s a cop outside.” Ciara worked patiently with the scissors. A small incision was achieved: a weakening to work on.
“Lafarge… he got away,” Amanda sighed. Her head spun. “What happened to me?”
“Lafarge drugged you and hid you in here," Ciara replied. "I caught up with him later." She was nearly through the one of the cuffs.
Suddenly - blissfully - Amanda's hands were free. She squirmed. “Hid me in here? What is this...” she asked, reaching up and steadying herself on the side of… the casket. “Wait a minute…" she said, "this thing AGAIN?”
Ciara was focussed only on freeing Amanda. “Put your feet over the side,” she told her.
Amanda shifted in the casket, rolled back, raised her bound feet and offered them to Ciara. “I hid in here earlier when they were closing the museum,” she recalled, rubbing at her sore wrists. Everything was sore in fact, especially her damn head.
“Well you nearly got sealed in here for eternity - the Birtwhistle’s latest mummy!” chuckled Ciara, cutting at the bonds around Amanda’s ankles. They were really tight - she levered the scissor blade underneath.
“Owww!” said Amanda as the metal scratched her calf.
“Sorry…” said Ciara, absentmindedly. “I think you might need some new pantyhose after this.”
Amanda’s inquisitive mind worked overtime to make sense in a whirling world of confusion. “Aren’t you supposed to be in Boston? I mean, it takes -”
“- three hours and thirty nine minutes on the train,” Ciara finished the sentence for her, then continued: “Hitting redial every few minutes, with no answer, after you left me a final message ending ‘don’t worry.' If I get a message from you saying don’t worry, then no answer, I worry, stupid!”
“Oh,” said Amanda, feeling silly and incredibly grateful all at once. Then, at last, her ankles were freed - bliss! “Oh thank God! Thank you so much…” her voice trembled.
“Come on let’s get out of here,” Ciara implored her, extending a hand.
Amanda got shakily to her knees, bent over the side of the casket and extended one glossy leg then another. Ciara guided her feet to the plinth and then to the floor. But then Amanda’s knees buckled and she sank to the ground as Ciara struggled to keep her up.
“Hang on a minute, I think my legs have gone to sleep,” said Amanda with exasperation. She rolled onto her back with a defeated sigh.
“Hamstrings,” said Ciara, lifting Amanda’s right leg and administering a vigorous massage to the back of her thigh.
“Ooooohh, careful!” said Amanda, wincing.
“Is it helping?”
“Yes,” she sucked in through pursed lips, “now… the other one.”
“Where are your shoes anyway?” Ciara asked her, raking away with her knuckle.
“They might be… upstairs… in the Fossett room. OK stop now.”
“Well you don’t need them,” Ciara said, hauling Amanda successfully to her feet. “Come on this way - we’re taking the fire escape.”
“Wait a minute,” Amanda hauled her back. “I want to look upstairs for my things.”
“Just how crazy are you?” Ciara couldn’t believe her ears. “I told you there are cops in the hallway.”
“But my bag… my laptop… my dad’s gonna freak if I’ve lost it. It might still be there!”
“I’ll buy you another one!” Ciara hissed. “Fire escape, now!”
“The keys for the apartment were in my bag,” said Amanda, matter of factly.
Ciara’s eyes narrowed. “I preferred you tied and gagged.”
“That’s a horrible thing to say!” replied Amanda with mock indignation. “Come on, we’ll take the back stairs.”
She set off across the room, re-energised, irrepressible once more. With a brief ‘tut’ to herself, Ciara closed the casket then hurried after her.
The two girls crept silently up the back staircase, onto the third floor and out into the fashion room; then across the tiled floor and onto the landing. As they stepped out, the sound of police radios echoed up from below. Amanda turned to Ciara, holding one finger to her lips, as if to say ‘shhhhh’. Ciara acknowledged by grimacing and rolling her eyes.
The Fossett Collection was as before. Amanda flitted across the room to where the Egyptian clock rested on its plinth. A hidden drawer was open. Amanda’s memory began to return. Her eyes traced down the plinth to the floor: there were a pair of converse sneakers, a canvas backpack, and a phone, lying face down.
As she picked up the phone, her face fell as she saw a huge spidery crack across the glass. She turned to Ciara.
“Broken…”
“Come on, let’s go.”
* * * * *
Thirty minutes later, Amanda Jones relaxed in the bathtub covered in a mountain of bubbles. The room was dimly lit by small tea lights. Her feet trailed over the side of the tub, the red weals around her ankles barely visible.
Ciara entered with two mugs of hot tea.
“I found some paracetamol,” she said, offering Amanda a mug and two tablets. She sat down on the edge of the bath.
“You look like a ninja, you know,” said Amanda, sipping tea and knocking back the pills.
Ciara raised an eyebrow. “Yeah? Well it was nice to be appropriately dressed for once.”
“Did you bring any other clothes?” Amanda asked her with concern. Then, with a second thought: “You can borrow some of mine if you like.”
“Nope…“ Ciara smiled, shaking her head. “Tomorrow, you and I are going to Macys. After we’ve got you a new cellphone, that is. Then we’ll need something nice to wear for dinner; there’s a place in the Meatpacking District I’ve always wanted to try out. When in New York –”
“Whoah there girl!” Amanda chided her. ”All this on a researcher’s salary? And I don’t even start working in the library until Tuesday. We’re eating noodles until then.”
Ciara frowned. “I am not eating your cooking.”
Amanda’s nose wrinkled. “Look… I better call my dad and ask if he can pay for a new phone. Can you pass the broken one to me?” She blew bubbles from her hand: the smallest ones spiralled gracefully upwards on invisible thermals.
Ciara reached over, took the phone from a shelf and handed it to her.
Amanda regarded the shattered screen with sorrow; however the thing dutifully lit up as she pushed the button. Through the cracks she thought to see something interesting: a small box; a cursor; letters…BCGE.
On impulse, she hit the blue Search button. She gasped. “BCGE - Banque cantonale de Genève!” Everything came flooding back. Amanda sat up with a start – water cascaded over the side of the bath.
“What are you talking about?” said Ciara, retreating from the oncoming tide.
“The key!” protested Amanda, “Lafarge got away with the key!” She exclaimed, almost inconsolable.
“BCGE 331?” asked Ciara.
“Yes! How do you know?” Amanda frowned.
“You mean…” said Ciara, pulling a tiny object from her breast pocket, “this key?”
“How did you get that?!?” Amanda stared in disbelief.
“I told you,” said Ciara enjoying the moment. “Your last message said where Lafarge was staying. The museum was closed and, when you didn’t reply, I went to look for him. I tailed him to the park where some guy tried to double cross him. He was going to shoot him, Amanda, but I got him first! After that, Lafarge told me where to find you.”
Amanda was dumbfounded.
“This... is turning into The Ciara Identity! I can’t believe Lafarge just handed that over.”
Ciara changed the subject. “So, what does this little baby open, anyway?”
“I don’t know yet,” said Amanda. “We have to find out.”
“I’m getting your laptop,” said Ciara with a smile. "Let's look at some flights...” she disappeared into the hallway.
“Don’t you bring that thing anywhere near the water!” shouted Amanda after her, recalling a previous episode.
“Relax!” came the distant reply.
Still in the bath, Amanda felt far from relaxed. She needed to get out and dressed. Things were developing rapidly once more. She dunked her head under the water.
Presently, Ciara returned, cradling the laptop in one arm, the free hand flicking at the mouse pad.
“So United does a direct flight from JFK, overnight, leaves tomorrow evening. Hey! You could be back for Tuesday.”
“How much?...” Amanda dreaded explaining this one to her father.
“$2,800 each,” replied Ciara; she didn’t seem particularly fazed by the sum. Absentmindedly, she asked herself out loud: “I wonder if they take Euros?”
There followed a pregnant pause.
“Ciara…?”
She turned and faced Amanda. Her friend sat bolt upright in the bathtub with wet hair draped over her cheeks. Her eyes were wide open and a hand covered her gaping mouth.
“Ciara you didn’t…”
Ciara sighed with the realization that she would never be able to hide anything from Amanda. She reached into her back pocket, and pulled out a wad of red, 50 Euro Notes. She looked up with puppy-dog eyes and met Amanda’s shocked gaze.
“Well… I sort of did….”
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Comments: 74
Torqual3D In reply to ??? [2015-09-01 04:43:58 +0000 UTC]
Yes sorry to make you wait so long for Amanda and Ciara actually talking to each other...
And sorry also that I have done absolutely zero for the last month and now have 1500 deviations to review including your own fine work.
I am not sure that Amanda is going to 'allow' them to make a profit on the adventure, although the question of exactly who to give the money back to is a problem! I am surprised you didn't pick up on the in joke about Ciara being appropriately dressed for once.
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MosbyRedux In reply to Torqual3D [2015-09-02 19:40:43 +0000 UTC]
No problem! Worth the wait
Eh, don't call it fine till you've read it. But I'll be glad to hear what you think of it when you've done so
I did pick up on the joke, but neglected to mention it! My bad. It's a very funny, slightly genre-aware moment. One more thing that makes their banter so enjoyable.
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MosbyRedux In reply to Torqual3D [2015-09-03 01:17:03 +0000 UTC]
I never liked that 4th wall anyway!
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DanielSpacey [2019-01-05 08:48:18 +0000 UTC]
Worldclass storytelling right here! Freaking aaah-f*cking-maay-zing!
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Torqual3D In reply to DanielSpacey [2019-01-10 16:34:25 +0000 UTC]
Ha ha ha! You're too kind. I owe you a note about your own excellent work!
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DanielSpacey In reply to Torqual3D [2019-01-10 16:45:58 +0000 UTC]
Cheerzz!
Have you noticed my new Damsel; Amanda Tori? Guess who she's named after...
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PoorDebbie [2017-03-22 21:20:59 +0000 UTC]
I just finished reading it. A very exciting and well written tale. It was believable and the characters were well developed. Now to go read your others.
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Torqual3D In reply to PoorDebbie [2017-03-23 15:49:27 +0000 UTC]
Thanks so much! Please let me know what you think of those too!
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goblin775 [2016-04-26 21:43:49 +0000 UTC]
Once again: Wonderful Story! Very thrilling, very realistic, despite the sudden twists.
As I'm not familiar with your personnel (especially Ciara), it was somehow surprising that Amandas mate would prove to be a ninja-like markswoman. (So for newbies like me it would have been helpful to introduce her a little bit more in the beginning; I think that would have taken away nothing from the surprising twist, but would have made it more comprehensible.)
However, this is cheap criticism! I hope you will continue this (soon)!! (Or did you do that already? If so, I couldn't find it ...)
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Torqual3D In reply to goblin775 [2016-04-27 23:23:13 +0000 UTC]
She's not quite such a ninja - she just had total surprise and heavy armament on her side this time. She didn't do so well against Rachel in their recent punch up.
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goblin775 In reply to Torqual3D [2016-04-27 23:51:24 +0000 UTC]
Yeah, but it comes too much as a surprise for the reader, too, if you don't give a hint on that as early as possible (particularly, when it doesn't matter yet).
The way you let Amanda find her british pass in one of your other stories was perfect in this respect: first, when it didn't matter at all, you placed a casual hint on a hidden object in her jacket, so when she was in need of it, she could just pull it out ...)
The (sudden) salvation has to be in the story long before needed - that's a rule I learned from a great (professional) writer (not personally, he revealed it somewhere ...)
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goblin775 In reply to goblin775 [2016-04-27 23:56:21 +0000 UTC]
... you surely know him, it's from Bernard Cornwell ...
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Phyl-CGI [2015-09-22 15:11:16 +0000 UTC]
I've loved every chapter. It has been and still is awesome... Thanks for sharing
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DOAFan247 [2015-09-12 09:25:19 +0000 UTC]
Wow, this entire story, chapter after chapter, was a great read! Well worth the wait, and a great ending!
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Torqual3D In reply to DOAFan247 [2015-09-17 14:50:58 +0000 UTC]
Thanks, I am glad you liked it!
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sohighlydubious [2015-09-12 01:07:28 +0000 UTC]
Great yarn! Loved it and looking forward to more when you have it!
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Torqual3D In reply to sohighlydubious [2015-09-17 14:51:27 +0000 UTC]
I have some ideas for another adventure for Amanda and Ciara, from earlier in their timeline.
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Mad-Man-with-a-Pen [2015-09-02 14:00:29 +0000 UTC]
Wonderful conclusion T3D. I really liked Amanda and Ciara had some great banter. Chuckled when Ciara complained she preferred Amanda tied and gagged LOL. Nice to see Amanda getting to relax some before her next adventure. Great tale sir and I enjoyed it
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Torqual3D In reply to Mad-Man-with-a-Pen [2015-09-02 19:01:52 +0000 UTC]
Thanks! I tried to put a bit of humor (as Amanda and Ciara would spell it) in there.
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Torqual3D In reply to Hoz3DArt [2015-09-01 22:50:49 +0000 UTC]
Thank you and for all the faves too.
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menatv [2015-09-01 11:41:51 +0000 UTC]
Enjoyed both the artwork and the final chapter of this story. And I like it that Ciara is a different character than Amanda. It makes their conversations more interesting. And makes them a great duo as well. Enjoyed it very much. And I'm definitely glad Amanda survived as well.
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Torqual3D In reply to menatv [2015-09-01 12:08:41 +0000 UTC]
Yeah I am glad she survived! I would have to shut this page down otherwise...
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menatv In reply to Torqual3D [2015-09-02 06:36:46 +0000 UTC]
You would have had a lot of disappointed fans on here if Amanda didn't survive!
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thenumbaonespot [2015-09-01 03:17:01 +0000 UTC]
A very well written/scripted story. Every sentence was on point thru my mind; as i could picture everything that is happening between the two. I will forever daydream a final image of this story. But this image, is our beloved Amanda in the bathtub; PG-13 of course. ^_^
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Torqual3D In reply to thenumbaonespot [2015-09-01 05:33:50 +0000 UTC]
Yeah, sorry you will just have to imagine that one!
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thenumbaonespot In reply to Torqual3D [2015-09-01 06:44:39 +0000 UTC]
Sure will. Can't wait to see what adventure is next. ^_^
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Torqual3D In reply to QuadCities [2015-09-01 05:34:42 +0000 UTC]
Yeah I tried to throw you off....
What happened to your alt endings? I am still very interested. Were you waiting until I published this one first, as (I think) we discussed?
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QuadCities In reply to Torqual3D [2015-09-01 11:34:36 +0000 UTC]
Aw thanks! I had a bit of writer's block, but I think I'm over it. I'll send it to you in a note in a couple days, I hope.
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ThePHantom52 [2015-09-01 01:24:29 +0000 UTC]
Excellent conclusion to this adventure! I had to go back through the story and found the reference to Euros in Part 10. It seems that Ciara took the money in the briefcase - I guess as payment for her troubles. Her taking the money and spending it leaves the possibility that the owners of that money will come looking for it. She left both men hurting, but alive. Another twist for a future story, or perhaps a story unto itself.
As always, thank you for sharing your verbal and visual talents with us. I have enjoyed all eleven parts.
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Torqual3D In reply to ThePHantom52 [2015-09-01 05:37:02 +0000 UTC]
Yes sorry for the one month gap...
The 50,000 Euros was always the prize for finding the key. It's mentioned throughout. Banks is supposed to exchange it for the key with Lafarge but decides on taking it as a bonus. Now it's Ciara's bonus. Amanda is understandably horrified to be in possession of gangster money. But now you see why Ciara was planning a shopping spree followed by dining out.
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Curia-DD [2015-09-01 00:02:42 +0000 UTC]
It's fantastic. The chapter, the story, the dialogue, all of it!!!
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Torqual3D In reply to Curia-DD [2015-09-01 05:37:48 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! I finally got my own turn to write these two in conversation, months even years after you have done it!
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Golavus [2015-08-31 23:26:36 +0000 UTC]
Interesting to see Ciara and Amanda working together. Nice dialogue between them, shows they both seem to be on the same wavelength at least. Good end to the story. And I'm sure this won't be the end to their perils...right?
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Torqual3D In reply to Golavus [2015-09-01 05:42:17 +0000 UTC]
They are SORT OF on the same wavelength and in other ways totally not. If these were D&D Characters Amanda would be Lawful Good and Ciara would be Neutral Good. If that makes any sense. Point is that Amanda's behaviour is contained by limits; she is totally non violent, she doesn't curse, she doesn't steal, she cares only about finding out the truth and doing what's right. She is very naughty and mischievous but within these limits. Ciara doesn't have these limits at all, which makes her a useful contrast. I have to write a lot more to demonstrate these differences properly but I seem to have a kind readership now, so I am motivated to get around to it.
They have a million more perils than this.
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Golavus In reply to Torqual3D [2015-09-01 06:12:21 +0000 UTC]
One thing I have noticed is you have a very strong, developed idea of who your characters are and of their personality. It's impressive, means that you are writing the situation around the characters and not writing the characters into the situation. It makes your characters more believable because they are consistent with their reactions and actions.
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Torqual3D In reply to Golavus [2015-09-01 12:08:16 +0000 UTC]
That is very kind feedback, and great to hear. It's what I am trying for.
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gdpr-28186649 [2015-08-31 21:53:09 +0000 UTC]
Uhh, I may be missing something, but what's the deal with the Euros at the end? I'm confused?
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Torqual3D In reply to gdpr-28186649 [2015-09-01 05:43:10 +0000 UTC]
Yes you may have lost in in the last month between chapters... Ciara kept the case of 50,000 Euros that she took off the two men in the park. Amanda is appalled.
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gdpr-28186649 In reply to Torqual3D [2015-09-02 00:24:52 +0000 UTC]
Ah, now I get it. It's the Teen Wolf dilemma
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Torqual3D In reply to gdpr-28186649 [2015-09-02 01:38:50 +0000 UTC]
I have never heard it called that before!
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