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StrayanPhoenix In reply to ironman658lm [2013-12-20 13:11:35 +0000 UTC]

What sorts of discrepancies, may I ask? Maybe I'll be able to fix them.

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ironman658lm In reply to StrayanPhoenix [2013-12-20 13:58:12 +0000 UTC]

I didn't know you wrote it! That's actually really cool. Go check your DA page's comments by the way.

as for the discrepancies? It's mostly nit picky stuff. That doesn't effect the plot really.

And I'd like to start by saying I enjoyed the shit out of the story, and I've had that song by Cold Chisel stuck in my head for like a week now lol

It's stuff like where daring said something along the lines how it was cliche how the pirates were using the AK47 and that they should have better equipment. Well, the AK47 is cliche because of how excellent of a weapons platform it is and because it was mass produced at ludicrous levels of desperate manufacturing for the soviets to sell one of the few good things they made. When I read that part, it made me stop, turn my head and, well, do the face you see as my icon lol

Now, you're female pilot, the main character's first officer, her personality is SPOT ON! I mean, really, outstanding work there! Plus how she pretty much said fuck tea without saying it? Yeah, that's about right too lol

I can go on more if you want or note you or something? I have some funny commentary too that I wrote down  

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StrayanPhoenix In reply to ironman658lm [2013-12-21 01:32:14 +0000 UTC]

 The AK47 bit was just my two bits on how nearly every man and his dog has one. 

And yes, please note me with your observastions and feedback. That'd be appreciated. 

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