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Published: 2004-06-30 02:40:43 +0000 UTC; Views: 223; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 29
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"What are your feelings about that huge black moth?"Well,
I kind of like it.
[to be honest with you.]
Reminds me of him.
fluttering against the
cracked wallpaperceiling
bangs into the edge
bangs into the edge
bangs into the edge
I can hear the newspaper crinkle
downstairs.
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damn bitch you get so many damn comments!!! i'm jealous. lol. ur poems deserve it though, i get all excited when i see you wrote something, lol. i really like this because there's so much room for the reader to fit in their interpretation-- like i have a perfect image and interpretation of this, and i'm sure it's not what you had in mind when writing it. damn i love it 
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aww yeah!! o guess wot--will's mom found the cuffs and we were right there, it was really funny. i'll tell ya later, lol.
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lol hehe thank you Megyn! Thank you thank you thank you. 
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wow..reading other deviant comments... i guess i got some warped and twisted imagery from reading this one..to me..
the opening question was made by your/my? father and the crinkling newspaper was to be its assassin...
must be cuz when i was little my dad killed my moth...
i still hold a grudge...
i almost stepped on it at strings camp thinking it was just one of the many leaves at my feet.. but then it moved..
it was a bright yellow moth with a wingspan of about a foot...
i took it up to my room..
later..when for reasons i won't explain here..
my stuff got packed for me by my parents in the middle of the night
and i was handed my walking papers..
i asked my dad what happened to the moth..
he said.. "the what?"
i said.. "the moth.. my moth??"
he said.. 'oh.. you mean ..that BUG?!..::shrugs:: i threw it away"
and people say i wasn't abused...
have you read my moth saga ??
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Mmm. The shortness is groovy - it suits this kind of poem (and is something I'm really into lately, without a doubt). But I uhhh...well, I don't get it at all, so that's just about all I can say.
Post part two?
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I shall soon enough! Don't wanna post overload or anything
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Pshh. Fine - be a responsible poster. But I know peer pressure will get to you eventually, so I shall seed my response with subliminal messaging.
Now that you explain it, I think it makes a lot more sense post it. The first time I read it, post it, I thought that I could feel what the moth was going through (poor guy) so I could kind of relate to it, you know? I guess there's probably a mindless insect in all of us.
The ending makes a lot more sense too now - you being on your private mind oasis and being torn back to reality by menial life. Makes for a cool image, post it.
Aaaanyways, commenting was a pleasure.
post it.
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lol, post the new one?! Maybe I will after today. Also though, I have a short story and a long poem to post so I'm spreading those bitches out. Thanks for the comment
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Hell yes post the new one! It's cool though - you've got all the time in the world.
And you're welcome
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It's almost as if your huge spaces in your format allow for interpretation and a little imagination as we all strive (and struggle) to find our own meaning in your work.
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I like the spaces. I don't know if it's good or bad that you struggle. But thanks for the comment anyway
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Struggle is thought provoking. Thought provoking is good. Agree?
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Ah that's so awesome, I especially like the preview 
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lol. poetry. it's over my head.
This is pretty cool though. I like how it's short, but still conveys a strong message.
"What are your feelings about that huge black moth?"
Well,
I kind of like it.
[to be honest with you.]
That's my favorite part. Good job.
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lol. katie. you are too cute. hehehee poetry isn't over your head unless. . . .
anyway thanks for the comment boo, glad ya 'liked' it.
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lol. You're hilarious Carly.
hehehe
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Lovely poem. I like it... it's simple and short... yet holds so much more. The beginning draws you in... as well as the picture you have to go with it. Lovely job.
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THank you very much!!
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Nice. I like the minimalistic style. I admire people who can say a lot without saying... a lot.
Love.
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lol, so do I . That's why I thought I'd give it a shot. Thank you.
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thats aweosme 
bangs into the edge
bangs into the edge
bangs into the edge
lol, its so true sometimes ya know? lol, ayways, great poem
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lol thanks evan.
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Wow. I LOVE your style. Great...really gives it something special. Great piece.
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