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Published: 2004-07-04 23:38:14 +0000 UTC; Views: 332; Favourites: 4; Downloads: 69
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the room is laying awkwardlyand a beetle is tapping a
cadence along the hardwood floors.
interrupted by your symphony of eclectic inquiries.
it's almost dark
it's almost dark
it's almost dark
i'll peel off the mosaics of your face
and we can
put on a short little play
in the theatre of your sheets.
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Comments: 31
i wish i wasnt such an asshole, and i read something everytime someone submits. But, i ususally give upi on the pile and delete them all. Sad sad day right?
I had to wait this long to see something this beautiful.
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I do the same thing.
Thank you.
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Deliciously naughty last line my dear!!!! I love the innuendo expressed in the piece...and, of course, being a male, I love the preview pic. And I love midsections so hey
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lol glad i could please ya lec
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wow carly thats so good. and hey, i agree with the guys.. Hot preview pic lol.
but seriously its a great lil series, awesome job!!
"put on a short little play
in the theatre of your sheets." <-- yay, how rambunctious. i feel playful. xo
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lol yay i'm glad you're back amanda 
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I just love the imagery in the beginning of the beetle taping the cadence. Very cool piece. I like it.
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Well done. The poem is great, but the preview makes it even better.
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yeah I agree with vodoo its very cool. great wordplay. nice preview! I'd eat your shorts anyday..
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lol, good to know. Thank you
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ah yes yes. thank you!
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you're very welcome
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I absolutely adore your style of writing! I love the follow up
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Oh my: this has gotta be my favorite preview image ever. 
Hmm - I think I like number two better than number one, but that's probably just because number two makes me wanna alluringly unbutton my shirt and have a smoothie.
But uhh, delicious delivery, teehee.
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lol well i'm glad you like this poem because of the uhh preview image.
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Pshh. That preview could turn my mother on. The poem's got the same effect, I think. It's like, seduce-me squared.
Good work
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Yeah I really like the seducing quality of the poem 
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well written...hehe i sound like an english teacher!!.. YOU FAIL.. jk i luv ya good job!
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Wow, I really like the last part, with the "mosiacs of your face." And the description of how the 'eclectice inquiries" ( aweseom words by the way 
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? hmm. . thanks?
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