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Name: Erinite
Alignment: Titanium Gems
Role: Kindergarten Kid (wants to be an aristocrat / princess)
Pronouns: She/her
Gem Type: Erinite
Gem Location and Cut: A twisty tri-faceted triangle gem on her left shoulder
Appearance: She has a dress with slippers and fingerless gloves. She also has long hair. She is also defective. (because she has two eyes instead of one)
Height: A head taller than the canon defective Amethyst
Weapon: War hammer
Personality: She has a half scared-child personality. (sfhelp.org/popIF/scared_child.… ) One thing that factors into this is her first meeting with Melo Melo Pearl and Peridot. Another thing factoring into this is being paranoid about being kidnapped by scary gems. A second thing about her personality is that the other half of her personality is just plain childish. Her childishness sometimes gets her into trouble.
Abilities: Phytokinesis (and body expansion)
Fusion Dance: BALLET-
Symbol Placement: On her open-cut back
Story: Erinite was made in the Titanium Gems' kindergarten. Immediately after coming out, she saw Melo Melo Pearl and Peridot. The encounter gave her the "bit scared all the time" personality trait and sent her cowering back into her hole.
Other: She slightly admires Black Pearl. She also hates the kindergarten she was made in with a passion because it's pink (.-.) and the fact that her gem is on her shoulder.
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Comments: 4
She has a cute design!
Some things I have to say though:
from her rank, you say she wants to be an "aristocrat", what do you mean by that? Mind you this group is centered around the crew of a space pirate ship.
I would prefer it if you could write a bit more about her personality. She doesn't seem fully developed like that. I get it that she gets scared easily, but some explanation behind it and some other info about her would make her a more credible character. Also, the fact that she hates the kindergarten because it's pink (sorry lmao) isn't a personality trait.
Other than that, is she supposed to be defective or a fully formed gem? Because kids are mostly defective, but she doesn't seem to have much of a defect, so please let me know if you forgot about that or anything
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she has two eyes instead of one
and hatred is part of her personality too-
also aristocrat as in like a kidnapped princess
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NO, SHE'S A L W A Y S SCARED
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Okay then, it's not really a disadvantage or disability for her but it's also fine if you want to make her simply different from other erinites. Please specify it in the bio though, as it can not be recognized as a defect easily
Okay then if you want to keep that part, then please write more about it and maybe include something about the "kidnapped princess" thing as well if that can help, because I feel without explanation it goes a bit against her being honestly scared all the time.
Plus the rules say at least 5 complete sentences on personality so there's also that: please add to it
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