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A scream from the potato on the end of the ASHPD, followed by, "Well, this is the part where he kills us."They bounced off a panel right onto a platform in the middle of a bunch of spike-covered mashing plates.
Chell's eyes drifted to the only portalable area while Wheatley spoke on his screens cheerfully. "Hello! This is the part where I kill you. Had a brainwave. There I was, just smashing some steel plates together, and I thought to myself 'Yeah, it's deadly, but what's missing?"
The girl ignored Wheatley's rambling, noticing the conversion gel dripping on a surface below the screen then looking back to the one portable wall she'd noticed before. The angle might work—
"—It's still a work in progress, don't judge me yet. Um, but eventually I'd like to get them to sorta shoot fire at yo—"
Chell fired an orange portal at the gel and a blue one at the wall. "Nonono! Don't do that!" Wheatley protested. "Stand right—"
But the test subject was faster than him. She made a portal below her and fell in just as the spike plates sprung forth, ruining the trap.
She started to turn to run before hearing Wheatley's pleas to come back, saying he wouldn't kill her. Chell paused for a moment, then turned around and walked back, much to the surprise of both GLaDOS and Wheatley.
"Oh, you came back… I didn't plan for this," Wheatley admitted bashfully, mumbling to himself about the trap. "Oh! Could you just jump into that pit? That deadly pit…" He trailed off, wondering if she was brain damaged enough not to catch on.
Chell eyed the pit, looking down. There didn't seem to be a bottom and it was definitely a fall too long for her boots. She was amused when Wheatley started offering her things like parents and boys.
"You really must have brain damage," GLaDOS snarled. "I can't believe you came back!"
Chell raised an eyebrow before smirking up at the screen. "A-apple."
She jumped from the edge.
Wheatley's optic widen from shock. First he'd heard Chell speak, and then she'd actually jumped. Was she mad?
A panel shot out to catch the girl before she fell too far. "Ah—um—well…" Why had he done that? Why had he caught her? Wasn't her death what he wanted?
Chell blinked, before steadying herself on the panel and looking up at the screen. "S-say apple," she mocked.
"Apple!" Wheatley said immediately in an innocently cheerful way before catching himself. "W-wait, I'm the boss! You're not supposed to boss me around anymore!" His optic narrowed.
"I think you may be suffering from a slight case of serious brain damage." Chell ignored his claims of authority, her voice growing stronger as she spoke.
"You can talk? All this time, you had the ability to talk?!" GLaDOS' tiny voice grew louder as she continued, "I can't believe you didn't inform me of this and saved me the trouble of almost killing myself with that parado- Don'tthinkaboutitdon'tthinkaboutit-*Bzzzzt*"
"S-stop, I'm not brain damaged!" Wheatley paused for a moment, and when he spoke again, his voice was filled with hurt. "You didn't even try to catch me-"
"I'm sorry." Chell frowned.
"-when I fell from- You what?"
"I'm sorry."
This time Wheatley shut up before he pulled the panel closer to the screen. They met eye to eyes. After a moment, Chell sighed and smashed the screen with her boot, then used portals to escape to the catwalks.
"I forgive you."
She wouldn't hear his whisper as she moved on to the next room.
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Comments: 54
WulfarRexwave [2013-06-11 05:09:25 +0000 UTC]
What a great twist! If only, Valve, if only...
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SnapCentino [2013-02-21 11:36:34 +0000 UTC]
"Apple."
This story is cool, the fake-out title is cool, you are cool, and CHELL IS BADASS.
What more need be said?
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5ilvara [2011-10-09 22:39:39 +0000 UTC]
This Chell look more like a projection of a player than a character, but the idea is brilliant. I imagined her with a slightly different body behavior and voicing tune during the scene and it all became quite plausible. The concept feels very strong and pertinent. Valve could really have put an achievement here...or another end. But at least an achievement. <3
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VampireNote13 In reply to 5ilvara [2011-10-09 23:46:01 +0000 UTC]
My version of Chell has a sense of sarcastic humor.
Humor's a great way for staying sane, and after you've almost been killed twice, been betrayed by someone who you thought was trying to help (Maybe even a friend, I'd like to think Wheatley and her had at least gotten along after pulling off sabotaging GLaDOS), you'd need something to keep you strong, besides pure confidence.
Then again, maybe Chell is just that badass; We don't have a clue, since she doesn't go through characterization like GLaDOS and Wheatley; We're just told straight out that she has a high IQ (Some were higher), and a high tendency rate.
Plus, if this wasn't sappy, my beta might kill me. *Shot by Chlowo*
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5ilvara In reply to VampireNote13 [2011-10-10 02:42:05 +0000 UTC]
It wasn't sappy! ...Okay, but the good kind of sappy. ^^
On the other hand, I understand the use for sarcasm and I agree. But when the audiance doesn't feel or forget the drama and strong detrayal atmosphere, given how Chell's mind is foremost set on survival, it feels like the evetns in the plot hae just become a game for her. I would understand she could actually decide to jump off the edge. But here she taunts him right afterward even through she knows he is very unstable and that could actually earn her to fall down for good. Either his betrayal has affected her so much that she is having a serious lack of control of her psychological defense mechanism - which is possible, but not felt/mentioned through this narration - or she seems to have lost some of her marbles. Anyway, I love the idea. Now I want to go and replay the game just to try that. X3
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VampireNote13 In reply to 5ilvara [2011-10-10 03:05:46 +0000 UTC]
..... Maybe she's just lost some of her marbles?
The reason I hadn't posted this originally: Because it really doesn't make sense in that way. >:
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5ilvara In reply to VampireNote13 [2011-10-12 10:00:51 +0000 UTC]
And... sorry for complainning. I rather enjoyed the read so I'm glad ou posted it! I just didn't expect it to be a little slightly crack. But it's quite fine!
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VampireNote13 In reply to 5ilvara [2011-10-12 10:05:52 +0000 UTC]
Lol. Craaaack can be fun though. :U
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DestinysCharm [2011-09-28 04:55:09 +0000 UTC]
:3 :3 :3 AWWWW This is so an ChellxWheatley story!!! :3 :3 :3
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VampireNote13 In reply to EliBlazeTheEevee [2011-09-16 10:21:40 +0000 UTC]
Smashing is fun :I
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ChibiRegalli [2011-09-14 23:48:03 +0000 UTC]
The best part (besides Chell mocking and apologizing to Wheatley) has to be GLaDOS having that little outburst. Though her actually talking is awesome in itself.
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trans2rotf [2011-09-14 15:08:41 +0000 UTC]
Wow, that's like an alternate ending type of thing. Nice take on that scene. Thought for sure she would punch the screen(anything is possible in an adrenaline rush), but slamming it with her boot works too.
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VampireNote13 In reply to trans2rotf [2011-09-14 21:00:21 +0000 UTC]
But then she'd get glass in her fist. D:
Boot is at least some protection. :\
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trans2rotf In reply to VampireNote13 [2011-09-15 09:00:21 +0000 UTC]
Like I said, anything is possible in an adrenaline rush. She won't feel the pain when she punches it.
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VampireNote13 In reply to trans2rotf [2011-09-15 10:04:58 +0000 UTC]
I still like the boot better, because it feels like a 'Take that' to Aperture in general... >:
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trans2rotf In reply to VampireNote13 [2011-09-15 10:35:20 +0000 UTC]
Yeah true. Besides, It would be cool if she did a backflip and landed on her feet on the catwalk below using the force of the kick. Granting of course she used a double forward air kick.
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ZimGalForevah [2011-09-14 04:54:56 +0000 UTC]
I think my favorite part was when he just involentarily yelled out "apple" when Chell asked him to XD
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ditistomzelf [2011-09-14 04:54:31 +0000 UTC]
when I jumped in the game I half hoped it would bring me somewhere secret instead of falling to my doom
this is a very nice twist.
"They met eye to eyes" <-- I liked that line lots!
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VampireNote13 In reply to ditistomzelf [2011-09-14 20:59:37 +0000 UTC]
At least you get a nifty achievement.
BE THE BOSS OF THE PIT.
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VampireNote13 In reply to Jenovaii [2011-09-14 20:59:08 +0000 UTC]
Half the commenters did... XD
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Seihana-Chan [2011-09-14 01:12:19 +0000 UTC]
Awh. It's better than mine, strangely. I already saw this and it looks a lot better than mine now that I'm reading it a second time.
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VampireNote13 In reply to Seihana-Chan [2011-09-14 20:58:30 +0000 UTC]
Well, this one was altered slightly. The biggest change was GLaDOS' comment on how Chell isn't mute... Lol.
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Seihana-Chan In reply to VampireNote13 [2011-09-14 23:22:22 +0000 UTC]
Oh, but it looks really good. You've got people! ^^
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KiwiKiwi3 [2011-09-14 00:44:02 +0000 UTC]
Despite it feeling a little rushed when he suddenly started and stopped rambling, it was well-written. ^__^.
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VampireNote13 In reply to KiwiKiwi3 [2011-09-14 10:51:58 +0000 UTC]
Thanks. :3
Yeah, I guess when I wrote this god-knows-how-long, I'd rushed to finish it or something. >:
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KiwiKiwi3 In reply to VampireNote13 [2011-09-14 11:28:27 +0000 UTC]
Aw, you can always go back and refine, and nobody will judge you. No need to rush art! My own last chapter involved a lot of adding and refining, tbh.
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VampireNote13 In reply to KiwiKiwi3 [2011-09-14 23:11:27 +0000 UTC]
I might later. Who knows. XD
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