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Your loving smile,
On luscious lips,
Once red,
Now coloured,
In shades of blue.
My only mistake,
When I stole your breath,
Was falling in love with you...
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No, that's a correct interpretation, but of course I like to leave things open ended ^^
-Β Chennie
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youtu.be/xI7TE99CMI8
The reason I direct you to this video is because of the title 'My First'. The title of the video is 'You always remember your second'.
Parallels, parallels everywhere.
I hope you like it! ^^
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I should've read this sooner... Holy crapoli this is fantastic 
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Hmmm...I might voice something similar instead >:'3 I have a good idea for it ^^
-Chennie
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yay!!! good to hear that
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This was such a beautiful poem! Β
This person doesn't really have any right to say what you should write and shouldn't, it's all your own style, whatever makes you satisfied and happy at the end of the day really is all that matters! However every piece of poetry is always a work of art! Β
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Haha, nah I don't mind people saying what they want. It really doesn't bother me much
But I do like to use it as a chance to improve ^^
-Chennie
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Well, you always create magnificent works, so you always do improve! Β
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Thank you very much for enjoying it ^^
-Chennie
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Hm...I believe the narrator was a trained killer or something or that sort. He had to kill a woman, but fell in love with her before committing the "perfect" crime. Whatever your intended meaning was, this was a pretty poem. 
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Hehe, yes that is actually the story that I wrote. He was a killer, not trained, but a serial killer :'3
Well done! Mention for you on my next proper release (non-filler) ^^
-Chennie
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Ah, serial killers, if done right in a story, you just love them(I've been watching too much Dexter 
And thank you very much!
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Thank you very much for enjoying it m'dear ^^
-Chennie
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I love this, it's very poetic and I don't know what that person was on about, your writing is great! --Short but sweet!
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Haha, nah I just wanted to prove I could do the same thing. I don't mind what people say, it rarely bothers me
-Chennie
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It reminds me of the Dementors from Harry Potter. Not like they have the capacity to love, but stealing breath. Souls. All is fleeting and similar in murder games.Β
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Haha, I guess that could be it, it's an interesting interpretation :'3
-Chennie
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possibly. Just a thought. I do love your poetry so much. I'd like to ask you to read mine. Please.
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I'm not a very poetic person, so what I read here was. that the ficitional protagonist directly or indirectly caused the death of a person ( and I guess here the person was drowned, because that's what I associate blue lips with ) and by the time before, during or directly at the point in time where the person died, the fictional protagonist fell in love with the dead person.
that's what I could read.
Hope you'll have a lovely rest of the week
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You're right x'D
Well the story is that he was a serial killer and he killed this lady as his next target, but fell in love with her when he did and faced the reality of his crime.
Thank you for enjoying it. A mention for you!
-Chennie
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wow that's awesome that I actually guessed right there :3 thank you alot! your poem is still amazing when reading it a fourth time ^w^
thank you very much for the mention :3
~
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From what I see, this poem seems to personify death who actually fell in love with someone but he had to kill them because he is death, afterall. That's what I see.
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That is a correct interpretation. It was actually about a serial killer, but so many people sort of personified death that I'm giving mentions to anyone who picked up on that too x'D
Mention for you :'3
-Chennie
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I could be totally off, but what this poem says to me is that this person fell in love, and the shades of blue mean rejection by the other person... course that could just be what I see cuz that's where I am atm.
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Well that's one interesting way of looking at it. The blue lips symbolised death for me, but rejection could fit the picture. Sorry about you getting rejected though, it happens mate :/
-Chennie
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Yes, it does.Β Well done poem, btw
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No one can be better than anyone. That is really sad to hear anything like that. Clearly that person does not know what true art means. And even if you're proving yourself to him/her, you still are opening your heart up. Haters or going to hate, and you definetly pulled that off. Good on ya! What a wonderful writer you are.
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Nah I don't mind what people say, doesn't bother me, but I do want to use it to improve or try new challenges that people might not otherwise see from me ^^
-Chennie
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This is nicely written ^^.
Eight lines with so many possiblities to what could've happened :3...I love this.
Cheers hehe~
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Haha thank you so much for enjoying it :'3
-Chennie
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Well, you need to be dump to make mistakes I believe
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My interpretation is that the speaker was a balloon. And this balloon was being blown up by a person at a party and he was smiling. But the person had breathing problems, and shouldn't have been blowing it up, yet the balloon was touched that it was being blown up anyway. So while the person slowly died while blowing up the balloon, the balloon slowly fell in the love with the other person.
This is what happens when I spend too much time interpreting a poem.
Err, I didn't mean any offense, just joking around with poetry (even though I love poetry).
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...I'm so giving you a mention because that is the most interesting response out of all of them x'D
LOL! Nice one mate
-Chennie
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Wait, what? someone seriously randomly told you that ''you'd never be as good as {insert username here}??? What a dickhead!
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