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Published: 2013-07-28 04:04:49 +0000 UTC; Views: 3689; Favourites: 33; Downloads: 17
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I really hope I'm going about the storytelling the right way. Any thoughts regarding the dialogue so far would be great, especially the readability, if it flows from panel to panel smoothly, things like that.
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I think you got the pacing and flow perfect.
The colored speech isn't quite as easy to read as the black speech but you have to defferentiate them somehow and it's still quite readable.
I love how Dash's face in the third panel just explains it all.
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Thanks for saying so!Β Yeah, I'll see about darkening the colored text, I just used their coat colors (outline in Rarity's case) so that needs some adjusting.Β Expressions and flow, and expressing both effectively with the panels is tough, but getting it right is worth the payoff I think!
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This is when things are going to start being interesting, I can't wait to see the next page.
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Thanks guys, setting a good pace for the storytelling is a hard balancing act.Β Too slow is boring, too fast leaves nothing for the reader to enjoy.
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Why not! Your awesome at this stuff!
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You're very welcome, you're doing a good job so far so just keep it up.
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Your avatar looks familiar!
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yeah it was made from a bunch of random circles when I first got inkscape (+slight changes)
and bout 2months later I got a like saying he looks like a charater from 'abacus' Β
(dono if thats the right name)but yeah freaky likeness , I evan wanted to see if it was madeΒ
after I draw him (theirs was made before my pic) Β Β but his so cute and sort of my art muse ^_^
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Ela would be honored to be your mascot and avatar!
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yyeah but....i call the lil foxy inkcy...as he was made on inkscape :3
but the likeness still blows my mind......another 4th wall breaker lol XD
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It's like Doctor Hooves and Time Turner right?
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.........mmm? spose?
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I mean their different ponies but they have the same look and design!
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I know and yes i agree
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Yep! And now Ela and whatever you just named your fox.
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inkcy and setting a mental reminder that its ela ty ^_^ Β
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