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Zaphy1415926 — Back of the bakery
Published: 2010-10-26 04:49:32 +0000 UTC; Views: 959; Favourites: 32; Downloads: 0
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My father was a baker- he worked hard every day,I wanted to be like him, in almost every way.
At times if I was extra good, he's take me to his shop,
Where I would eat the goodies, oh, until I'd nearly drop!
Now, just outside the bakery, on the west side toward the back
Sat an alley full of furry things, called backstreet alley cats.
And on occasion it was known that a cat or sometimes more
Would get into the bakery through a wooden swinging door.
This was one image for a two-image project for class. We had to make two images that had to do with complementary colors, one with bright colors and the other with subdued. This was the toned-down one.
I tried to illustrate part of this story... critiques, please (it's not quite done- I've run out of time to work on it further before it's due, but still would appreciate suggestions)?
[edit] Fixed door a bit c:
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Comments: 21
ooh woah I like the angle, framing and doorlight cat. Oh wait, it's a boy and not a cat. Still like it.
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The perspective is very interesting and the cats are very nice. The light on the stones is really good, but the lamp itself is far from being good enough for such an amazing picture... If you look carefully, the bow in which there is a cat almost seems to be floating; you should improve its shadow.
The two roofs in the corner are exactly the same; I don't think the symetry looks so good. Two differents ones would propably look better.
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Thank you so much for your critique, I didn't even notice the box or think about the symmetry between roofs! I'll probably end up fixing it later though... or just keeping these things in mind for next time. I really appreciate the crit though, that doesn't happen enough! <3
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Oh wow, thank you so much! >u<
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awesome perspective 
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I like it, but I think your perspective is a little off on the door area. Its at an awkward angle, and it seems like that corner curves too much. It almost looks like you tried to do a fisheye lens sort of look in that area, but didn't bring it to the rest of the picture.
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Which corner- the corner of the door or the corner of the building (or both)?
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A bit of both. It might help if you made the roof line straight, and tilt the door(and the wall its by) more to the left.
I really like the detail on the cobblestones by the way!
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The little boy looks very flat in comparison to everything else. The door could use more texture and shading. I can barely see the doorknob, and the lamp looks rather flat as well. You should work on that area. Everything else is absolutely amazing, it drew me in and the area by the little black kitty, with light falling on it, held me. It looks fanastic, I want a wallpaper version.
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Yep, that's the area I had to skimp on. I'll come back to it. =u=
The building was originally going to have bricks, but after doing the cobblestones and the shingles I only had about 10 more hours before it was due, and I still had a whole second image to start and finish (and preferably sleep too). So now I feel like that whole part of the image is sad and empty... =n=;; I don't think I'll do bricks on the wall, but I will at least do some texturing on the door and maybe on the shingles too, to make it more apparent that they're shingles and not just bricks floating in the air. :'D
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That would fix it right up. :3
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Man, I just went back to fix the door and I realized that I forgot the windowpanes! XD;;
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