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Description Well, this took ages to continue, but here we go. Another vampire pony picture to tell the story. This time Rainbow Dash, the newest of the Night court ladies meets her new bodyguard
Previous part of the story: adalbertus.deviantart.com/art/…

"Ohmygosh! Ohmygosh! Ohmygosh! Ohmygosh! Ohmygosh!" Rainbow Dash could not contain herself. "Fleetfoot? Here?"
Frostbite, just rolled his eyes and continued to walk toward the white-maned pegasus waiting for them in the the chamber they entered.
"Indeed, lady Dash." he said calmly, "Fleetfoot is the newest member of the Night Guard, she is also a very talented flier and she knows the sky here well."
"I know, she's from Cloudsdale, just like me, she's the fastest Wonderbolt and..." Rainbow Dash looked at the flier In front of them. "... and now she's in... night guard?"
"She asked to be transferred last month. With her references we couldn't turn her down." the unicorn answered and stopped just few steps from Fleetfoot. Rainbow looked at her with barely containing excitement. The other pegasus was slightly smaller then her, but stud therein full guardsmare armor. Her white mane and tail seemed to radiate in the dancing light of the torch-lit interior and her green eyes shined like a pair of precious gems, but the things that caught her attention immediately were her wings, not feathery ones like all the other pegasi, including herself, but bat-like ones, of the kind she'd seen only once before, during last year's Nightmare Night.
"Are those... real"Β  she asked Frostbite, probably louder than she thought.
"Princess Luna personally enchanted armors her Night Guard wares." he explained patiently "It is customary that pegasi within our ranks have bat wings." then he turned to Fleetfoot, who didn't even blink while they were talking. "You will aid lady Dash in her task from the Princess and you will protect and serve her as a bodyguard."
"Yes lord captain." Fleetfoot replied dryly, not even looking in Rainbow's direction.
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Adalbertus In reply to ??? [2022-03-23 09:30:20 +0000 UTC]

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HeroRainbowBlitz In reply to Adalbertus [2022-03-23 18:58:24 +0000 UTC]

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Adalbertus In reply to HeroRainbowBlitz [2022-03-24 09:06:30 +0000 UTC]

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ShroomSuccubus [2013-12-15 20:21:42 +0000 UTC]

Overall

Vision

Originality

Technique

Impact


The originality is amazing, only a wonderful imagination could do this. The technique is astonishing and catches my eye. Vision is wonderful. And the impact is amazing! Absolutely astonishing the entire picture in my opinion. I would say though, try darker colors maybe. But may I just say the outline is wonderful! work on the hooves a bit more though, they need to have a bit of a round about, instead of just more in the square area. But everything else is very,very nice, keep up the good work, and please don't loose that imagination of yours! we need it!

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Adalbertus In reply to ShroomSuccubus [2013-12-15 21:12:13 +0000 UTC]

I think there are too many starts there, but you did point out few things I need to work on, so thanks

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NFSFAN27 [2016-03-31 22:42:09 +0000 UTC]

great story and artΒ 




can you turn my OC also in a Vampire Pony?Β Β 

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Adalbertus In reply to NFSFAN27 [2016-04-01 16:48:51 +0000 UTC]

that is an ancient drawing...
and I don't know what you mean by making your character into a vampire.Β 

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NFSFAN27 In reply to Adalbertus [2016-04-01 20:11:59 +0000 UTC]

ok and it was only a idea if you will continue with the story (because my OC is a Β friend from Rainbow Dash)

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Adalbertus In reply to NFSFAN27 [2016-04-01 20:55:09 +0000 UTC]

I don't know if I will continue the story, because of the lack of time, but I will keep that in mind if I ever need a background character for something Β 

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NFSFAN27 In reply to Adalbertus [2016-04-01 21:03:00 +0000 UTC]

ok; i have also many idea and some OCs, but my art skills are in the moment worseΒ 

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Adalbertus In reply to NFSFAN27 [2016-04-01 23:28:18 +0000 UTC]

Oh, I have ideas too I just don't have the time and patience to develop those ideas.Β 

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Fuzzinator23 [2016-01-11 00:18:14 +0000 UTC]

*Nightmare Soldier passes them* Hello there, may Luna guide you all!
Nightmare Soldier: bipedal haunted armor that is commanded by Luna, these guys are tanks compared to regular Batponies

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Adalbertus In reply to Fuzzinator23 [2016-01-11 00:55:25 +0000 UTC]

I'm not sure what a nightmare soldier is suppose to be or how it connects to this story <_<

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Fuzzinator23 In reply to Adalbertus [2016-01-11 02:00:29 +0000 UTC]

Not really, thought it might make it look fun

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DezzyD19 [2015-08-24 07:34:39 +0000 UTC]

is there a full story of this on fanfiction or something cause i love this story

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Adalbertus In reply to DezzyD19 [2015-08-24 08:10:35 +0000 UTC]

Sadly, the story exists only in my notes for now. I wish I had the skill to either draw it all in a finite amount of time, or write it as a fanfic.Β 

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DezzyD19 In reply to Adalbertus [2015-08-24 15:11:47 +0000 UTC]

well I still think the story is really awsome just how it isΒ  would love to see more of it

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Adalbertus In reply to DezzyD19 [2015-08-24 15:16:26 +0000 UTC]

I've been promising that I will continue it ever since the last picture came out I love this story as well, but I simply lack the talent and time to write or draw it...Β 

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DezzyD19 In reply to Adalbertus [2015-09-07 04:36:24 +0000 UTC]

you aint lacking any talent from what i can seeΒ Β  time i can understandΒ Β  well be awsome to see more of itΒ Β Β 

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Adalbertus In reply to DezzyD19 [2015-09-07 07:25:41 +0000 UTC]

I will try to get something going with this story.Β 

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DezzyD19 In reply to Adalbertus [2015-09-08 04:46:49 +0000 UTC]

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Dactys [2014-12-22 01:28:02 +0000 UTC]

This story is simply AMAZING!!!! The pictures themselves tell an amazing tale and your text additions make it that much better. Please continue your fine work! I'm dying to find out what Rainbow Dash's task is!

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Adalbertus In reply to Dactys [2014-12-23 10:05:28 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, I'm glad you like it
I know I have been really slow with updates in this story (the truth is, over the last two seasons a lot of things made my story kinda hard to continue without few serious changes I haven't had the time to do) but it's not entirely dead, so you might get some more of it in the future

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Diego551 [2014-06-13 01:59:04 +0000 UTC]

Β Β 

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Diego551 [2014-06-08 02:13:17 +0000 UTC]

Cuando continuas la serie

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Penguinator24 [2014-05-31 05:19:11 +0000 UTC]

Fantastic job so far.

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Adalbertus In reply to Penguinator24 [2014-05-31 07:24:21 +0000 UTC]

Thanks I'm glad you like it I have to get back on this some day <_<

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Penguinator24 In reply to Adalbertus [2014-05-31 14:02:31 +0000 UTC]

I'd love it if you did.

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Adalbertus In reply to Penguinator24 [2014-05-31 14:47:11 +0000 UTC]

I'll update it when I'm done with the current workload Β 

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Penguinator24 In reply to Adalbertus [2014-05-31 17:57:14 +0000 UTC]

Good to hear.

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whiteboy23 [2014-04-25 00:46:03 +0000 UTC]

is this the end

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Adalbertus In reply to whiteboy23 [2014-04-25 10:14:37 +0000 UTC]

nah, there will be more, but I'm just kinda busy with other projects at the moment. I should add another picture quite soon Β 

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whiteboy23 In reply to Adalbertus [2014-04-25 12:02:43 +0000 UTC]

thanks
this is very good keep it up

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Vampirkaa [2014-01-30 16:29:08 +0000 UTC]

Ta klacz z prawej mnie wprost zauroczyΕ‚a C: W ogΓ³le caΕ‚a praca jest moim zdaniem cudowna, naprawdΔ™ szacun

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Adalbertus In reply to Vampirkaa [2014-01-30 22:10:03 +0000 UTC]

ta klacz po prawej to Fleetfoot Β 

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Vampirkaa In reply to Adalbertus [2014-01-31 18:55:34 +0000 UTC]

Ah, ok xD

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CrimsonPhoenix34 [2013-12-27 18:12:26 +0000 UTC]

Oh my gosh! I'm so happy to have found a story that is still active. You keep doing those. It was a fun read and I bet it shall keep on to be that way.

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Adalbertus In reply to CrimsonPhoenix34 [2013-12-30 08:17:44 +0000 UTC]

Thanks

I'll do my best Β 

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ravend3 [2013-12-17 21:56:42 +0000 UTC]

I just read all of these up till now and have to say that i have been on the edge of my chair from the beginning.Β  I love the idea as well as concept of this and have to say that i crave more lol.

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Adalbertus In reply to ravend3 [2013-12-18 08:15:28 +0000 UTC]

Thank you. Now I feel bad for not including pieces of the story under few of those pictures. I.ll try to fix that soon

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ravend3 In reply to Adalbertus [2013-12-18 22:55:53 +0000 UTC]

no reason to feel bad the originality is just amazing

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Adalbertus In reply to ravend3 [2013-12-19 08:49:32 +0000 UTC]

Still, I need to fix that lack of story under those early pictures. I'll probably do that during the next week or two. I hope to get some free time during Christmas

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DraconixSongnote [2013-12-17 00:36:35 +0000 UTC]

YAY!Β  I love this story!

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Adalbertus In reply to DraconixSongnote [2013-12-17 08:04:28 +0000 UTC]

thanks I'll try to update it a little bit more often

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JedielDaniel [2013-12-15 20:42:51 +0000 UTC]

OMG! I actually started missing them!

I have to say - technically this one is very... simple compared to Your other works. Is this a negative? Absolutely no It suits the picture very well. The situation isn't as dark as some of the previous ones, so it can be a little more comic-stylish. Especially seeing how good proportions and details are. I also like the color-pallet used and... damn I'm just so impressed with how much attention You pay to lighting in Your arts

Another great work, and good to have part of the story back

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Adalbertus In reply to JedielDaniel [2013-12-15 21:10:05 +0000 UTC]

Well, this is more of a comic-like style which I'll be using for this story for now. As fun as the painting style is, it doesn't exactly fit the format, if you know what I mean... and it takes more time too. so until I improve my skills with it, I'll just use the comic-ish style instead

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JedielDaniel In reply to Adalbertus [2013-12-16 06:52:26 +0000 UTC]

I'm fine with that, since this style is amazing too, and actually I think thanks to that we will see more of these, which will be awesome
However... some scenes and parts of Your story demands more... serious tone, so I'll still love to see them in full-painted glory

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Adalbertus In reply to JedielDaniel [2013-12-16 09:13:15 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, I'll use both styles, because I want to improve the painted one too, so don't worry


And yeah, I'm working on another picture in the series now. The gap between this and the previous picture is too big, so I need to fill it with few explanations <_<

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Fenwolf2003 [2013-12-15 20:33:31 +0000 UTC]

The story on a whole is pretty awkward and disjointed since it's not told as a comic, rather just single images with text beneath, especially since one picture doesn't lead to the next.

There's nothing as offsetting as you showing AJ terrified about her dearest, oldest friend turning into a monster... then the next line of dialogue in context is "OMG! OMG!!!!!" because Dash met a Wonderbolt.Β  That's the direct continuation.

It's pretty awkward and the story needs to be paced a lot better.Β  I realise this is your own little world in your head but you have to remember, if you're posting it to the public you need to connect the dots.Β  YOU probably know everything that happened in your headcanon, we do not.Β 

So like I said, it looks like in this universe Dash just went home from being emotionally crushed that AJ hates her and fears her now... and then creamed herself because she met a Wonderbolt.Β 

It's a real emotional contrast and a weird juxtaposition.Β  Doesn't feel natural.

I like your art and all, but based on story telling, it's too scattered to be effective in any real way.

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Adalbertus In reply to Fenwolf2003 [2013-12-15 21:05:57 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, sorry about that, I will fill that gap soon. There should be one more picture between them, but I failed to draw it the way I wanted and I had sketches of this one waiting, so I finished this one instead.
Besides, I need to rework the story now that we actually got to know some things about Equestria's past...

But you are absolutely right and I probably shouldn't have upload this picture before the one explaining that happened after RD returned. I'll try to fix that as soon as I can

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