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Published: 2012-11-21 14:53:06 +0000 UTC; Views: 14362; Favourites: 1757; Downloads: 118
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This poem describes me completely. I have a strange obsession with sugar, and... I don't need to explain the rest.((NOTE: I didn't write this poem. This was just a piece of typography. All credit to the original author.
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Blah, I have not been on DA in so long that I am not sure if that actually replied to you, or started a new comment thread.
In case I messed it up:
There are so many comments... my poem probably fell to the wayside.
Thanks for noticing it though. ^_^
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I think this poem is wonderful. That being said I do think it needs just a little bit of polishing - mainly the very last line, "and my wrists are stained red." It speaks to me because I went through that phase, I have nothing against, but it does not flow with the rest of the poem. Perhaps you might think to change it to "but the roses are wilted/and the violets are dead/the sugar bowl's empty/and my wrists are red" Just a thought, but I do think that last line does not keep the rhythm.
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Huh... I should send this to my ex.
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I can't decide if this is honest and shallow, or satirical and profound. But it looks like the former to me.
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Super cool!! ^^ You are an amazing poet!!
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This caught my eye love it favoriting <3
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When I read the second part, these were my thoughts:
"but the roses have wilted." There is always a rose in bloom somewhere
"and the violets are dead." Even so, the seeds have just sprouted
"the sugar bowl's empty." I will NEVER let the f-ing sugarbowl go empty!
"and my wrists are stained red." If this means what I think it means than please don't. If it doesn't mean what I think it means, then that's your problem, not mine.
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I prefer the insult version myself. "The sugarbowl's empty, and so is your head." This version doesn't seem to actually flow to me, though I can see the sentiment behind it.
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You and I have something in common.
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Lolol really... this is a GREAT POEM.
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TT.TT I'm litterally crying right now. I had a rather terrible dream and now I can't sleep...
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my first thoughts on this were "well this is gonna be lame" now i'm like "omgggggggggg life! yes, fantastic!"
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it's still good, whomever's it may be
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Art Thieves are not welcome on dA.
dA is for ORIGINAL work, not stolen work.
-.-
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Listen, I can understand what you're saying, and I respect your opinion. But I didn't intend to offend anyone, I just wanted to write out and share my favorite poem! Sorry about that!
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It's against dA rules, this should be taken down.
If you want to share, CREDIT the artist and go to facebook instead!
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It's sweet in the beginning and then bitter and morbid in the end. Very cool.
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I love to just randdomly sing this at random times in random places.
Like... at midnight with my boyfriend in a garden of cherry blossoms.
Coolest date ever. For me anyway. :3
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That does sound like the coolest date ever!
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I can't tell you how much I like this.
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Oh okay o___o
I thought it was gonna be something nice, but then "my wrists are stained red"...
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I knew the last lines were
The sugarbowl's empty
And so is your head
awesome new turn, tho
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Wow. Can't even think of a response, you ignorant fool.
I might just steal some stuff from your gallery and not credit you.
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Oh, my apologies 
I was in a hurry and it's almost a reflex giving such an answer
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Honestly I think it's great the way that it is and I don't think you should add anything to it C: But I'm sure it'll be just as amazing if you added something else to it :3 Anyway I like it
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I really love this. It's so short and simple, yet s filled with emotion.
Amazing work!
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its incredible! very sad, too T.T
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Wow, i love how you turned a "sweet" poem into an emo-ish one! xD
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emo is a counter culture, just because some one is apart of that counter culture doesn't mean they self-harm, and just because some one self-harms that doesn't make them emo.
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