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Reasons for the Weekend
Published: 2006-03-30 07:58:45 +0000 UTC; Views: 5269; Favourites: 114; Downloads: 66
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Because human nature zig-zagged in reversefrom wand-waving mornings to night,
plucking on harp-strings with bitten-down nails
and mud-trudging through kitchen floors,
Because we ignored the blue neon signs
that smiled Enter through the gates,
and monkeyed up the glass walls instead,
with the grace of a bullet-filled car,
Love grew a shadow, and splashed Friday with ink
when he dived from a springboard of leather and wood--
but the spectators gave him nil out of ten,
though Perfection had wrapped him in white.
Because human nature keeps sliding down driveways
without elbow guards or mothering smiles,
because we attempt to feel more than our skins can,
stuffing ourselves with reflections of stars--
Sunday grew taller, for Love re-emerged
and de-plugged the pool as he skipped up the side.
His tattered grey scarf soaked the last of the flood,
and he left it behind as he walked past the sky.
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this piece of writing is brilliant, just brilliant, it deserves it!
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I like this, especially the last line of the 4th stanza... I'm faving it because it's something I'd like to come back to one day and reflect upon :]
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Thank you! I'm glad you like it - and thank you for the fave
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wow, i read this and my mouth dropped...i love it...its in my Favs
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Thanks, and thank you for the fave!
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this is my new favorite poem. thank you for having written it. and, by the way, The Magician's Nephew was the first book I ever bought.
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Oh, thank you! I'm glad you found something to love about this piece. 
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I love anything that commands me to read it twice.
I would be careful with the four-line stanza structure--you can make the reader anticipate rhyming, and when it doesn't come it can be jarring and seperate them from the poem. This is a concern witht his poem, but aside from that the imagery is wonderful and I love the subject. My favorite:
"but the spectators gave him nil out of ten,
though Perfection had wrapped him in white."
This poem + that journal asking the travel question + the fact that you currently have 55 deviations = +watch from me. I look foward to seeing more of your work.
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I was a little concerned about the lack of rhyme, enough to originally consider making this a rhyming piece - but I took a chance. I've never been very good at writing anything with much structure. Do you think it disturbs the reading much?
Thank you for the comment and the watch. I appreciate it.
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I don't think it disturbs it too much--I personally found enough there to keep reading despite it. And while I can't speak for everyone, judging by the love this thing has gotten, I don't think it's too much of a problem, here. XD More just something to keep in mind in the future, you know?
And you're quite welcome.
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Yeah, I see what you mean. Thank you!
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Beautiful. I feel like saying anything else would ruin the amazingness of the poem.
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The rhythm of this is absolutely beautiful. It doesn't rhyme, but the words roll so perfectly. I read it out loud to myself and the rhythm thrilled me. The assonance in the last stanza, whether intentional or not, made the conclusion perfect and enhanced the imagery.
*applause* What a gift you have. This is amazing. *fave*
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I'm glad you like the rhythm as I don't often write pieces with such a strong metrical feel. I'm also glad you picked up on the assonance!
Thank you for the comment - I really appreciate it
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It's been a long time since I've seen such eloquently stated ideas for just about anything.
Reading this was like hearing my brother speak to me. (Which is a great compliment, I assure) And I really just find the comparisons you used staggering. I very much love this poem, and I feel you should get it published if you ever find the way.
Keep up the glorious work, darling.
The world could use more people like you.
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Your comment was absolutely lovely and made me smile. I'm so glad that you liked the poem, and I appreciate the comment. Thanks
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I am FLOORED by this. It's gorgeous! It's brilliant!!
I've not read a poem quite like this on dA before. I just want to eat the words... your choice of them is so instinctively beautiful, so RIGHT.
I struggle with what exactly it means to be a Christian artist, but now I think I've seen a prime example of a sincere, artful piece that ALSO glorifies God.
Thank you so, so much for writing this.
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Thank you so much! That's one of the highest compliments I could get. Your comment just put a smile on my face. Thank you
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Oooh super dooper. I've been reading the DD writings for the past few weeks and this is my favourite of that recent history. I love your imagery and detail so much it's excellent. :]
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I'm glad you like this piece so much. Thank you for commenting, I appreciate it
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i love this! especially stanza three, its beautiful.
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Thank you! I really like that stanza, too.
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The imagery in the last stanza in particular is really beautiful and poignant. Nicely written indeed.
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Thank you, I'm glad you think so. Your comment made me smile
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This totally makes sense. I agree!!! My poetry is deep, but only in a dark sense. Yours is critical and makes a great point!
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Thank you, that's a lovely compliment!
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your welcome!!! Glad u appreciate it!!! ^__^
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Hear, hear. I love the flow of your poem, and how each line just works with the next. Also, the writing itself is well-done. I particularly like the last stanza.
Sunday grew taller, for Love re-emerged
and de-plugged the pool as he skipped up the side.
His tattered grey scarf soaked the last of the flood,
and he left it behind as he walked past the sky.
That kind of rhyming narrative is my favourite of all styles of poetry.
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Thank you very much. I liked writing the last stanza a lot, and I'm glad you like the style this was written in.
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Wow..had no clue what it was about at first, until I read the comment and Easter Sunday. This is awesome. ^_^ Very true, very descriptive.
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it
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This was wonderful--I really appreciated the allusion to "The Magician's Nephew", because A)It was weaved in with the poem so nicely it was as if it wasn't an allusion at all, but your own invention B) "The Magician's Nephew" is one of my favourite books and has been since childhood. That's one of my favourite scense from that book, as well. [My first favourite is the guinea pig wandering around the forest with the ring taped to him] C)It was a nice trip back to my childhood, laying under the tree in my backyard reading that book and imagining that scene. Keep up the good work!
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Thank you! I'm glad you liekd the allusion to The Magician's Nephew. It's one of my favourite books, too, and I thought it was very appropriate for the piece. Thank you for the lovely comment!
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This writing is amazing. It's one of those things that it's hard to wrap your finger around. I didn;t understand practically any of it until I read the title, and the first part of your description. upon reading it over again, I could see everything and it's wonderful! This is a fantastic peice of free verse poetry! Congrats on a well-deserving Daily Deviation!
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Thank you very much! I know it's kind of hard to understand at first, but I'm glad that the title makes it clearer. Thank you for commenting!
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nice poem mate!! lots of images... i like your stuff!
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OMFGG**$%43892%$&%#@HE DID IT AFTER ALL!!
eeeee, I'm so happy for you!! Congratulations!!!
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You are SO FANTASTIC.
Thank you!!!
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I've made a bet with myself, since you weren't around--will you hit 100 favs? I bet yes. And I bet no, but thats a lesser side. Who do you think will win?
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Probably you? Haha! Yeah, there have been a lot of faves. I woke up and checked my messages and nearly fell over. Haha!
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