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Published: 2005-07-07 19:08:52 +0000 UTC; Views: 5501; Favourites: 105; Downloads: 89
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-When we were mayflies our wings were
worn from wire screens, but the tentative
beats of your belly chimed like iron.
And it occurred to me that through
the breeze of burning leaves our eyes
were open to wasps and weeds.
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I don't think I ever told you how much this poem inspires me. A lot, that's how much, and there's not much more to say.
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This is an amazing little capsule of detached brilliance, so slight and affecting, short and heavy, I love it.
The words, description, and pace of this resemble very much a sort of dance for me, bouncing and active, you're play with words is very impressive.
This made me think of being caught in a dream, wanting so much to wake up, did I come close?
Anyways, it's a beautiful piece and I would like to know the true meaning of it.
Ciao.
-Snowman
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Thank you for the lovely comment.
The first stanza is about relationships. The mayflies are a metaphor for people, and the rest is images to describe love or friendships.
The second stanza is about society's lack of understanding or intolerance of homosexual or bi-racial relationships or friendships. These people are represented as wasps and weeds, because who likes wasps or weeds? I don't!
But really, the meaning is subjective I've found. So many people have gotten something different out of this, and I'm really happy with that.
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Excellent. Very nice read, short yet lingering like a good single malt...
>>Our wings were worn from wire screens
Wonderfully alliterative, with the lilting, melancholic sound of repeated w's.
>>our eyes were open to wasps and weeds
Brilliant conclusion to a nuclear and very efficient poem. Well done!
Thanks for sharing.
Greetz
Jo
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My pleasure. Looking forward to browsing your gallery once I'm sort of through with my hideous backlog
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now that is the way to make much of little. beautiful!
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disturbinglly endearing and startling imagery
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aww you're sincerely welcome
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i wish i could write this well 
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Don't be discouraged, as long as poetry is an escape for you it's served it's purpose, regardless of what caliber it is.
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i dont know you but saw this poem when i was looking around.
i like the poem cuz its simple and to me has absolutely no meaning 
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Has no meaning? Well, I know you mean well, but no writer wants to be told their poem has no meaning. Poetry with no meaning is not poetry.
There is plenty of meaning in this piece, you just have to look harder.
Thank you for the comment nonetheless.
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poetry doesnt have to have a meaning, thats why its poetry. you read it wrong i said i didnt find any meaning to it, and some poems are better left that way.
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I guess we'll agree to disagree, I've never read a poem that didn't have meaning. If it doesn't have meaning it's just a block of text.
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maybe your over rating poetry. to be fair, i dunt believe this either really, poetry is just a block of text, nothing can give meaning to words really, poetry is emotionless. but i agree with you. what do you think poetry is then?
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And maybe you're underrating it. Poetry isn't just a block of text, poetry evokes emotion through imagery, word use, metaphor - to name a few.
If poetry has no emotion, and doesn't make you feel a thing or connect you at all with what the author was trying to communicate, then why is there a poem in your signature? Did you put that there because you wanted to fill a space? If so, why that poem then? Why not something Plath or Heaney. You obviously chose to put that poem in your signature because you felt something through those words.
And with your own poetry, do you write a poem with no meaning? I read some of your poetry, they have meaning, they're not just a block of text. Poetry is an outlet, a way to put your thoughts and feelings to paper. Those thoughts and feelings are what gives a poem meaning.
Yes, word themselves are emotionless, but it's how they're connected that give them meaning. No poem is without meaning, I don't care who wrote it. Something or someone inspired that person to write and open themselves on to paper, how can you not create meaning from that?
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i agree that poetry is more than just a block of text else i wouldnt write, would i? tell me what inspired you to write? ,my problem is that maybe i i dont want to find meanings, things that have meaning are more complicated, life is to complicatd to complicate it more, poetry is an outlet, yet it also is an insight to things you never knew, do you agree? poetry is simple yet complicating do you understand, and that kind of phrase is why i like to write.
the complication of simpleness (new msn name 
i lioke the signature because it is about light and darkness and love.
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i dont know you but saw this poem when i was looking around.
i like the poem cuz its simple and to me has absolutely no meaning
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i dont know you but saw this poem when i was looking around.
i like the poem cuz its simple and to me has absolutely no meaning
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I was told to have a look at this poem by the gorgeous
and i am sooo glad i did, this poem, though short is filled with such beauty and ahhh, its just fabulous!!! you have a lot of tallent
Luisa xoox
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Any criticism I could offer would disrupt the flow, and I'm satisfied enough with the replies you've given to other critics to accept this exactly as it is. Honestly, I think it's beautiful and the very best DD I have seen since I joined this site a month or so ago. So much of the poetry has been cliche and poorly-crafted with lazy images or some reliance on shock therapy, but this piece is just lovely.
Great job! You earned the accolades.
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It's beautiful in sound, rhythm, and because I'm trying to understand it
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It's beautiful in sound, rhythm, and because I'm trying to understand it
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That is beautifil and for some reason sad i really dont know why.lol good luck on future devations
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Words are words. If readers are caught up in spelling, and what word could be used here and there, then I think you loose the magic. I think overall poetry is intended to transmute words to impact directly on our consciousness. It that case who gives a shit whether it is grammatically (is this a word, ha?) correct.
It is the image/feel of this that I love, truly beautiful. It may help people to put away the fly spray and view the sacredness of these creature lives.
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Well I do think grammar is important in poetry, you are reading afterall, it's nice to be able to understand it. But of course, there's much more to it than grammar.
Thanks for the comment.
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Lovely image, kind of subtle, kind of not. (: Beautiful.
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this is lovely, romance seems to pour out of it, the lover's sudden realisation that it could all be over so fast
In this sudden autumn it speaks volumes to me I guess with all the trees falling apart and snuggling inside in the warmth with lovely people
xx
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Thanks for the comment!
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Thats quite beautiful, I love the imagery, the mechanical feel in an organic world
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