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-It rose from the water there, a delicate thing.
Its corroded walls of red and brown,
thin as paper, clung to patchworks of paint.
It rose in the air now, a delicate thing.
It wept the river in streams of reddish brown,
a sea of waterfalls, as clear as fog.
It hugged the earth now, a delicate thing.
Its face still smiles muted and round,
to spite its fate, that crisp death.
It bends and breaks now, a delicate thing.
It is pregnant with white and blue,
matured long ago, that harsh death.
It floated away from there, a delicate thing.
Its body bruised with red and brown,
a violent end, a delicate thing.
But its face still smiles,
muted and round.
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Comments: 29
xiooua In reply to Sperpy [2011-03-30 18:43:06 +0000 UTC]
You sillyhead. I'm way too spoiled with DDs. Never thought something I submitted after an almost year long hiatus would get featured. Thanks Serp!
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Sperpy In reply to xiooua [2011-03-30 23:11:12 +0000 UTC]
bah shut up, you're not spoiled, you deserved them all
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ArtCrumbss [2011-03-27 06:34:52 +0000 UTC]
Beautiful.. I wrote it down and taped it to my wall. ^^
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Kushinada [2011-03-27 04:58:36 +0000 UTC]
This is an absolutely beautiful poem. It makes me think of a photograph. Beautifully written, the rhythm astounding. I can't stop re-reading it.
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xiooua In reply to Kushinada [2011-03-30 18:42:07 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! This poem is very much describing a scene, so I'm glad it makes you think of a photograph.
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Axe-Cell [2011-03-27 04:51:33 +0000 UTC]
When I read this poem the second time, I kind of had the urge to recite it in a sing-song tune. Does this 'delicate thing' happen to be something we can normally see in our daily lives that we see them for every second? Just wondering.
Congratulations on the DD as well !!
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xiooua In reply to Axe-Cell [2011-03-30 18:41:25 +0000 UTC]
The delicate thing is an object you see in your everyday life, but the situation its in is not something you would see everyday.
Thank you!
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Rumor-the-Mirage [2011-03-26 21:42:16 +0000 UTC]
As a poet myself, I very much enjoy reading your poem
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xiooua In reply to Rumor-the-Mirage [2011-03-30 18:40:16 +0000 UTC]
I am very glad, thank you!
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Meruha [2011-03-26 16:17:22 +0000 UTC]
I really like the style in this. Very nice to read, congrats on the DD!
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B4Risingdawn [2011-03-26 14:53:21 +0000 UTC]
Mmmm, this poem is amazing=] I'm still not sure what....what it's about, but I like it none the same. It's just got that rhythm, ya know?
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revois [2011-03-26 12:05:34 +0000 UTC]
How few comments?
Very well done, love the way the imagery twists. Very nice.
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Lit-Twitter [2011-03-26 09:31:40 +0000 UTC]
Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. [link]
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Sperpy [2011-03-22 10:50:52 +0000 UTC]
How lovely to read something new from you. Love the repetition in this, the language, the desciption - just delicious
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xiooua In reply to Sperpy [2011-03-22 22:58:55 +0000 UTC]
Thanks Serp, love hearing from you!
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